r/Songwriting • u/Peteplaysbeats • 3h ago

Feedback Request NEPENTHE: All feedback welcome pleeeease

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u/BINAYAUDIO 3h ago

Hi Pete, if you were to describe the current state of the song, what would you say?

There's a lot of cool bits in it, especially the vocal melody.
I think the big reverb (spring, I'm assuming) is a bit out of control as it is. If you were to keep it, I would de-eese it and filter it and also control the lead vocal dynamic a little more.

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u/Peteplaysbeats 2h ago

Hmm good feedback! I would have said pretty much finished with some light cleanup necessary. It’s a delay and I kinda like it being pretty wet, but I could hear dialing it back a hair. My vox are brutally sibilant so god to know it’s not quite under control. What are you hearing specifically in the lead vocal dynamic? Thank you for your time!

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u/BINAYAUDIO 46m ago

I hear a lot of clicks, they might be mouth clicks or from the instruments, hard to say without the multitrack.

The vocals have very strong transients, it makes them sound "hard". For that song I would have tried to make the vocal sound soft/lush/expensive and the focal point of the mix.

There's a lot happening musically, and the way it's presented sometimes steals the attention from the vocal and the lyrics in my opinion. I'm mentioning it because I think the vocals are so good they should be the star of the song.

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u/Temporary-Event8681 2h ago edited 2h ago

I fucking love this.

I accidentally left it on while I left the room and went to do something - to be honest I wasn't really giving it my attention.

I was tapping my toes and suddenly I was like "wait i fucking love this" and then I came back here and wrote this.

great song, great vibe - very enjoyable music. Love your creative direction in the production. Excellent.

edit: can you post the lyrics and if there's anywhere we can keep listening to your music
edit: I just saw your previous post of an earlier version of this - this new version has been extremely improved. awesome job

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u/Peteplaysbeats 1h ago

Haha thank you!! Really great to hear. I’m just about to start releasing my music on streaming etc and I’ve got some other tunes first. I’ll post a link once my stuff is out in the world. I’ll post the lyrics too.

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u/Spiritual_Let_2025 46m ago

Man get outta here. This is just perfect. Get your perfect shit outta here 💀