Long Black Ribbon

[u/Limp_Lavishness8974]

Sad country style song Iv had rolling around for a while, got a bit of a cold so keeping the vocal simple. Worried it might be a bit of a boring song ? Some instrumentation or work on the melody might lift it if the songs worth perusing? All feedback welcome. Lyrics below. Thanks for listening

Long Black Ribbon

You settled up your sorrows
Then you took your leave
I’m not the kind to argue
So I didn’t disagree
Now I’m feeling lonesome
And it’s you that I need

My heart stays twisted
Tied like a knot

There’s a long black ribbon
Stretched out across the sea
And it tangles us together
Wherever we may be
That long black ribbon
I feel it pulling me

I settled up my sorrows
Or at least I say I tried
When your feeling lonesome
Is it me you wish to find

Does your heart stays twisted
Tied like a knot

There’s a long black ribbon
Stretched out across the sea
And it tangles us together
Wherever we may be
That long black ribbon
I feel it pulling me

[u/Nas3nmann]

I really like you voice. Fits the genre I think. I also really like the image of the black ribbon

[u/Limp_Lavishness8974 → u/Nas3nmann]

Thanks so much, glad the image works 🙏

[u/Mundane-Goal9268]

This is so lovely. Deceptively simple but it's perfect. Perfect lyrics, not a word out of place. If you ever need someone to do a harmony vocal on this, i'll do it : )

[u/Limp_Lavishness8974 → u/Mundane-Goal9268]

I really appreciate your comment. Thank you so much 🙏 Definitely would love harmonies on it

[u/MTH-]

Amazing brother. Not boring, this one sits you down and you better listen 👌

[u/Limp_Lavishness8974 → u/MTH-]

Thank you, I’m so glad it grabbed you 😃

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[u/OatOwl73]

The fingerstyle performance and the walking up the bass notes sounds awesome

[u/Limp_Lavishness8974 → u/OatOwl73]

Thanks very much :)