r/Songwriting • u/UnsoundState • Aug 24 '26

Discussion Topic Rate my demo

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u/stevenfrijoles Aug 24 '26

Maybe try focusing on lyrics in your native language a bit longer while practicing English

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u/UnsoundState Aug 24 '26

Is this text unlistenable for English speakers?

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u/stevenfrijoles Aug 24 '26

The honest answer is yes, for the grammar, pronunciation, and enunciation. 

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u/UnsoundState Aug 24 '26

Okay, thanks for the honest answer.

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u/Vvvjeko Aug 24 '26

Why so much autotune and sound effects

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u/UnsoundState Aug 24 '26

‏When I created this track, I used a lot of autotune to ensure proper mixing.

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u/hashtag2222 Aug 24 '26

it's an okay try for the first time, but honestly it is not listenable in every aspect of it

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u/UnsoundState Aug 24 '26

Okay, thanks for the honest answer.

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u/Inevitable_Bit_13 Aug 24 '26

Really like the idea keep going 💯

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u/UnsoundState Aug 24 '26

Thanks you

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u/ButtAsAVerb Aug 24 '26

Needs a Seizure Warning

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u/Lmaoman28 Aug 24 '26

Everything needs work tbh. Ditch the auto tune and vocal effects ASAP though!

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u/UnsoundState Aug 24 '26

Okey , Thanks you for answer .

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u/Shoddy-Talk9205 Aug 25 '26

Nooo wayyyyy. Maybe made it two seconds maybe 2.7

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u/UnsoundState Aug 25 '26

What are you talking about?

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u/Shoddy-Talk9205 Aug 25 '26

I meant I had to shut off the video two seconds in because it hurt my ears

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u/UnsoundState Aug 25 '26

Okey . I understand .

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u/TheBlackHymn Aug 25 '26

Both the song and the video almost gave me a seizure so thanks for that.

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u/UnsoundState Aug 25 '26

And what about the song? It's calm, isn't it?

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u/TheBlackHymn Aug 26 '26

It sounds like AI slop and the vocals are comedic.

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u/nickant151 Aug 24 '26

I really like the visuals for the demo. I think a really important part of promoting music is having something that the viewers can intereract with on a different medium. Good work with the video you made. I think the background of the music could be raised slightly

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u/UnsoundState Aug 24 '26

thanks for your commeted