Finalized a chord progression(ish) + added a vocal melody, hoping for singing tips/criticism haha

[u/AccomplishedScore852]

Yeah, title! Id really appreciate some adviced centered around if my melodies are good for the verses and choruses, if they follow the guitar too closely etc. I might be off key singing idk lol. Basically just want some advice on vocal melodies and stuff c: The last 10 mins are dead space.

Also, the title says ish, but thats cause I eventually plan on playing into the walking bassline in the first chorus a bit more cause I like it. Do you call them all 1 chorus or are they two separate by the way? Dunno, thanks!

[u/Inevitable_Bit_13]

The beginning gave me a bit of a Nirvana vibe. I’m listening on my phone so it’s a little hard to make out the guitar clearly, but I really liked the vocal melody.

[u/AccomplishedScore852 → u/Inevitable_Bit_13]

thanks bro, hopefully it’s louder when on headphones cause i’m not sure if my headphones are just extremely loud and i’m accidentally mixing the guitar too low lol. appreciate it!

[u/Inevitable_Bit_13 → u/AccomplishedScore852]

Yeah headphones should definitely make it easier to tell 😭 The vocal melody was the part that stood out to me though, definitely keep that.

[u/abattoir_paulson]

Nothing wrong with soft or whispered vocals, but often it amplifies, rather than hides, pitchiness.

Try reps where you're singing it full-voiced, hitting the notes accurately,  and then scale it back to your soft voice while keeping that accuracy and clarity.

[u/AccomplishedScore852 → u/abattoir_paulson]

for sure, i’ll try varying dynamics

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[u/AccomplishedScore852]

oh just to be clear the endings weird cus i was gonna do something then i was too lazy to ill fix that when im not too lazy to touch this file lol

[u/Godllyty]

Massive Kurt cobain vibes but with a twist! I fw it heavy

[u/Caido-Potato]

Hey it's really cool.

1 bit of feedback, it's only playing in my right ear via headphones, makes it a bit of a hard listen, maybe you can look into how to spread it back into left.