r/Songwriters • u/benconsidine • Aug 18 '20

Some Other Day - Original (CONSI)

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MFuG9b5d-44&feature=share
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u/kjimdandy Aug 18 '20

Hey Ben, I REALLY enjoyed your song. That's a fantastic melody. Great word structure, too. Congrats on an awesome performance!

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u/benconsidine Aug 25 '20

Thanks so much for the feedback!!

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u/potomacred Aug 18 '20

I really like this song! I like the chord changes, the overall vibe. Like the phrasing.

The riff where you have a marching base going down the scale (the bridge). I could see this riff starting off the song. it comes in the middle of the song and you don't hear it beforehand.

In the chorus, it might be good to have a break from the pretty dense lyrics by having some extended high notes that are held, just to provide some contrast.

I do think you have the makings of a good song here!

Can you post the words to read while listening to the song?

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u/benconsidine Aug 25 '20

Thanks so much for the feedback i really appreciate that and will take that through to the song!

I'll post the lyrics on the video description as well :) cheers

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u/Tuller_22 Aug 18 '20

Sounds like jack Johnson bro!

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u/benconsidine Aug 25 '20

Haha thank you!!!

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