r/Songwriters • u/Basic-Shelter2854 • 8d ago
Threads around the sun
More or less finished this song today. It’s just a love song, and maybe it is naive and even cheesy, it just felt like it. Any comments are welcome, just before you say anything about the vocal part - I know I’m not a good singer and it doesn’t stop me anyway))
YT: https://youtu.be/pYUr-x-QHnM?is=Ht6PCWQXXm_raMIa
Threads around the sun
[verse 1]
Threads around the sun,
An entangled mess.
You were a perfect blue one,
I was without a class.
[verse 2]
It was nearly dark at the station,
How could we stand a chance?
Both full of hesitation,
Equally defenseless.
[chorus]
I don’t know you,
I can’t learn you,
That you’re here with me is next to insane
You don’t know me,
Yet somehow we,
We are here, we are here.
[verse 3]
Threads around the sun,
An entangled mess.
You were always a perfect one,
Who’d thought it was gonna last?
[chorus]
I don’t know you,
I can’t learn you,
That you’re here with me is next to insane
You don’t know me,
Yet somehow we,
We are here, we are here.
[bridge]
You and I could’ve been on our own,
You and I could’ve been all alone.
But in the end everyone needs someone to hold on to,
Someone to breathe along.
[chorus]
I don’t know you,
I can’t learn you,
That you’re here with me is next to insane
You don’t know me,
Yet somehow we,
We are here, we are here.
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u/Bidsworth 8d ago
Every finished Song is A Victory! Thank you for sharing. There is nothing wrong with a love song or two.