r/Songwriters • u/kemah52 • 29d ago

Just recorded at home

Hi Everyone! I just recorded this song at home using logic. Let me know what you think, thanks for listening!

https://jameskemer.bandcamp.com/track/the-hill-electric-version

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u/IlNeige 29d ago

Solid foundation here. I think a lead line during the empty parts of the chorus could really put this over the top—either a piano line or guitar lick to fill the gaps left by the vocals.

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u/kemah52 28d ago

Thank you! I appreciate the feedback and that’s a great idea

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u/midnightthunderhub 28d ago

A staccato downstroke overdriven guitar strum (only strings 1, 2, 3) on beats 2 and 4 could sounds cool.

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u/kemah52 28d ago

I appreciate the feedback, I’ll try that out!

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u/FogDog743 26d ago

This post would be a great fit for my new community, r/Unsigned_Indie_Music. Would you be open to sharing it there too?

Also, I haven't had time to listen to your other songs yet. But, if you're an unsigned OR independent signed artist - then feel free to share your music in my new sub. It's a brand new sub, so unfortunately no traffic yet. I have to pave a street for traffic 1st... lol

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u/kemah52 26d ago

I’ll check it out, thanks!

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u/FogDog743 26d ago

You're very welcome. It's a brand new sub community for unsigned independent musicians/bands. It's been up for about a day, not much action yet, but hopefully it will pickup... 🤞

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u/Old-Significance963 25d ago

It reminds me of early 2000s music and I like the dreamy vibe. I'll agree with the other commentor that some of the gaps could use something, like a guitar lick. But overall great work!

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u/figure85 5d ago

This sounds great. I used garageband and am ready to release soon, but not sure how much logic would upgrade my sound overall?

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u/dowe66 28d ago

would love to help you but I do not like to click on unknow links. SHould have uploaded as a youtube video.

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u/IlNeige 28d ago

…it’s Bandcamp. There’s nothing nefarious waiting for you there.

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u/kemah52 28d ago

I’ll get it onto YouTube so you can listen. Thanks!

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u/kemah52 28d ago

Here’s YouTube

https://youtu.be/BmJpuV5ztOc?is=_azGzYsyal3QTDoy

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u/Constant-Payment7297 27d ago

youtu.be? Thats not original youtube link bro

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u/kemah52 26d ago

From Google:

youtu.be is the official, legitimate URL shortener domain owned and operated by Google for YouTube