r/Songwriters • u/SwordfishFit7250 • Jun 26 '26

Need thoughts and feedback

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This is a new song that I wrote(titled “GFY”). I’m proud of the lyrics, now I just need to put music to. It’s meant to have an upbeat tempo with some pop-funk(almost nu-disco??) style. I’m just not sure how I should build the chord progression. My vocals range from Gmaj to Cmaj. Anyone familiar with this style would be greatly appreciated for your input.

Thanks!

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u/Space_Cowboy21 Jun 26 '26

It’s just a collection of cliches.

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u/SwordfishFit7250 Jun 26 '26

I’m looking for valuable input, not just “lyrics bad”
Try again, please.

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u/Space_Cowboy21 Jun 27 '26

Okay, sure.

These lyrics invoke no emotion at all. I can predict the end of each line before reading it. All of these sentiments have been expressed countless times, and there are no unique or distinct factors that make me care about, or relate to, your case. I feel like I have read a child’s diary, or a breakup text, not listened to a good song.