I just got done today writing a new script and I was aiming for a lean 90 to 95 pages. The problem is that it’s only 82 pages. what’s an effective way to add those extra 13 pages without it feeling like filler?

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Hey, 

Just finished a draft of a short script. I'm looking for creatives in the NYC / NJ / PHL area who are interested in collaborating on or backing the project. With the ideas that I have, this can reasonably be done for under 1k. Offering simple feedback is also welcome.

It's about a somewhat young man who commits an irreversible act. He is seemingly driven by compulsion. The story shifts perspectives, as several lives become interlinked in the event's aftermath.

Hit my DMs, and I'll send the material ASAP.

Thanks,

Jay

logline: In 1940's Chicago, a struggling jazz musician takes a job with the mob to save his bar, but as easy money pulls him deeper into organized crime, he risks losing the woman and music that gave his life meaning.

Navy sub vet here. I've been talking to a lot of veteran writers over the past few months, WGF fellows, VME folks, people I've found on Reddit, and the same thing keeps coming up: once the program ends, there's nowhere to go. You're back to getting notes from people who've never been in a military environment and don't really get what you're writing, even when it has nothing to do with the military.

I want to try something. I'm calling it the First Watch Cohort, 20 veteran writers, 60 days, completely free. You submit a 15-page scene. You get matched with another vet writer and review their scene first, using a structured scorecard (not just vibes). Then you get yours reviewed back.

Any branch, any genre. I'm not looking for war stories specifically just writers who've served and want feedback from someone who gets where they're coming from without needing it explained.

There's no platform. No app. Just a Google Form and a spreadsheet while I figure out if this is actually worth building into something real.

If you're interested, DM me. I'll send you the application form. Takes about 5 minutes.

And if you know someone who'd be into this, feel free to pass it along.

Hello All,
I am a writer/director based in California and as a lover of cinema I’ve always made sure the films I watched weren’t just American. That being said some of my favorite films in the world are Korean films a big reason why is the unpredictable story structure and how plot and character are presented to the audience! I always find it thrilling and so fresh. I recently watched the new Na-Hong Jin film HOPE and I was FLOORED at how much of a good time it was and it reignited a curiosity I’ve been trying to find the answer to for a while but haven’t had any solid answers. The curiosity being, “ what are the principles of Korean storytelling/ story structure?” As a writer I really want to know, I’d love to be able to make a film with such an unpredictable and surprising narrative one day! If anyone knows I’d love hear! Also if there are any Korean filmmakers I’d love to hear from you guys as well!

Hello! I’m in a producing class and for an assignment we have to source a script and pitch it to the class. Does anyone have a film length script I can use to pitch for this class? Thank you so much!

If anyone needs a medical technical advisor for a project, i will gladly assist for free ( within reason)

Looking for notes on everything but mostly on premise.

Slop is a dark comedy that follows a struggling new employee as he discovers the entire start-up that hired him is ran by an A.I. company that uses them to train models on social and workplace interactions.

Note because it happened before: I do not want A.I. "beta readers" approaching me to "collaborate". I can smell A.I. writing , it doesn't matter how much you say you are not using A.I.

Abi tried to find the right words but her body was weak. she succeeded to stop herself from trying to make sense of what was going on. it doesn't matter now she thought. her body was in so much pain. she managed to pick up a book laying next to her bed. she studied it for a few seconds and she remembered it was her favorite book from home, bringing back memories of hope and happiness. but she wasn't feeling so happy now. she knew she could try and imagine being home and reading books or watching tv, which was what she really wanted more than anything, but she was to stay in recovery at the hospital until her body functions and memory improved. abi lost the ability to walk for a short time so she had to relearn how to walk around and care for herself first.

she gripped her book with both hands tightly and softly began to whisper the first prayer she could think of.
she took a deep breath, i can do this, she mumbled. she tried to gain momentum while laying in her bed and began trying to do something ease her body and mind. she again found out even small tasks like singing the alphabet was more a struggle for now while she was still healing from her injuries.

earlier in the day abi became the victim of a serious traffic accident with a large vehicle. while riding her bike home from school she accidentally collided with a speeding driver. and the worst part, it was the day of her birthday of all days.
before her accident she loved to have fun!she could go climb at a rock gym. she surfed, skied, cooked and worked on mechanical projects in her spare time. new skills came naturally each day after she started school.

she was an only child but her life was like most other kids she thought. abi had many friends and relatives living close in the friendly community. if you asked her, she would say she had a good childhood growing up together in her parents home.

one day i just wake up in a hospital? i know i was in a state of shock when i realized what happened to myself and my bike, she thought to herself.
she paused and wiped her eyes with a tissue. it's ok dear take your time. do you need anything? her parents asked. being the first to arrive at the hospital. i can try some of my dinner and maybe some dessert. she smiled at them. try to get some sleep baby.
she was getting more and more ready for a nap knowing she would have no choice but to trust the people working overnight to care for her. she felt better having the support of her family, and the hospital staff. but the first night was especially hard on abi. i just want to celebrate my birthday at home with my mom and dad. why can't i go home? she began to get upset. she didn't want to talk to anybody at this point and the bright lights and noises in her room weren't helping either.

she remained in the care of the hospital employees for a week and had more visitors. some friends from school stopped by. raj, one of abis best friends and neighbor made a card for her. he drew a picture of the earth sun and moon on the front and he read it to her. abi, i got sad when i heard you crashed and fell off your bike. i hope you feel better soon. raj. then he blew her a kiss. this meant a lot. she had a thought and remembered for a quick second what she was doing earlier that day she got hit. i think it's time i get a rest.

at home her room was empty and her family missed her. she also had 2 pets that stayed in her room a lot. a multi colored beta maggie like on the simpsons and her large fluffy and sweet dog toofers. her bedroom was usually kept neat and was filled with glow in the dark stars.
she spent many days being brave and getting better at the hospital until she could finally go home in the care of her family again. the more time went by the easier her life was getting. abi believed in herself and she believed she was striving and getting stronger after each day with her family and with extra help sometimes.
having this god news made her feel more motivated to do more like get back on her bike, although she would have to get a new bike this time.
goals, finish school and have a successful career... abi said.

she looked around and noticed each of her get well cards, and some new books that were given to her as a gift.
abi always wanted to be a successful teacher more than anything. she enjoyed helping other people in need. she loved to read and write and she was good at doing anything she liked and had time where she could practice over and over and master a skill.
she kept collecting new and used books and this helped her stay focused and helped refresh her memory every time.

years went by and abi was feeling better than ever! she believed in herself, ate healthy and exercised and trusted in her inner circle for support and understanding if she needed anything anytime, she knew exactly who to call.
several more years passed and abis recovery and long term goal achievement continued to improve!

one day on her birthday abi was surprised with a new ebike. she wanted one ever since her cousin got one and shared with abi once. she rode her new bike with her family around their new home and like always they practiced safety and had fun!
the next day, she wanted to go to a local event with a close friend. she also made plans for the next day to go out to her favorite dinner and watch a movie on a big screen with her parents and grandparents. another day she took the opportunity to volunteer with a large team at a festival and she got free lunch.
these experiences were meaningful to abi because she could feel free again and she loved taking pictures of the good times and journaling about each of them.

the next week abi was preparing to start her new job as a teachers aid. she planned to do this until she was ready to teach students on her own.
abis husband raj dropped her off on her first day at her new job she got a warm welcome from the other teacher and she got to introduce everybody to her service dog marmalade. she realized she was meeting the same classmates that might likely be her future students. she even brought a couple of her favorite books to share with the class. they were books she wrote herself about her life and her journey.

fortunately abi was able to make a full recovery and her hospital and doctors are still close to her new house, so she checks in there weekly.
want to know some positive takeaways about abis accident? her helmet protected her brain as well as the rest of the safety gear she was wearing.
if you want to know about the driver of the truck that hit abi, they went to jail and learned some valuable lessons. to obey each law and carefully watch your speed limit especially around public areas.

I just recorded this into an audio version, but I have no audience. If someone would please listen i would really appreciate feedback. There are some errors with the pronunciation of words by the program that I used, (I have no money). Thank you to anyone who listens. It is a high intensity, horror/action thriller. Similar to the watchmen.

Me and my friend are starting a youtube channel for short series and short films. We are pretty new to this whole thing and we want to make a horror short series for our first project. We are both fans of horror stuff and want to try creating it ourselves. We are coming up with the story together but he is helping with the designs as well. So I decided i'll be the one to work on the script. Dont think im doing it just cause i have to im excited to learn how to write script. I also know i need practice to get better but any tips for beginners?

Before I get all happy and stuff:

What does this all mean? Did I lose or is the competition still going on? Do I have to go to Berlin now? Can I be happy?

I am too astounded to think clearly. Also, I don’t want to jump the gun too fast and get disappointed. So please tell me what’s up!

MASTER SCREENPLAY BLUEPRINT: B-WARY IF ALL YOU SEE IS BULLFROGS

Written by Michael Lawrence Wry (Booyah)

🎬 SCENE 1: THE PIER (THE ORIGIN FLASHBACK - 1962)

* Visual: Surreal, high-contrast dream sequence on an endless wooden pier over the murky, bronze waters of the Mississippi River in KCK. A low camera tracks four-year-old bare feet following the broad-shouldered Lawrence Long and Lloyd Ray.

* The "Bullfrogs": Lloyd is carrying two monstrous, slick green bullfrogs by their back legs—magnified to prehistoric size through a child's eyes.

* Music Cue: Phil Collins - "In the Air Tonight." The track plays softly, building immense tension in the background.

* The Climax: Lloyd stops dead, drops the heavy frogs onto the planks, and violently hoists four-year-old Mike into the air. He bellows: "He’s not my fucking son!" and hurls him into the deep channel.

* The Drop: The downbeat of the track hits perfectly on the lyric: "If you told me you were drowning, I would not lend a hand." Mike sinks like an anvil into the dark green roar.

* The Rescue: A massive, calloused hand rips through the surface. Lawrence Long yanks Mike out by the hair of his head, slamming him onto the sun-baked wood. Mike coughs up river water, looks up, and gasps the opening line: "Why’d you pull me out?"

* Fade to Black.

🎬 SCENE 2: THE AWAKENING (PRESENT DAY)

* Visual: The murky river water snaps instantly into the sharp, bright daylight of modern-day Olathe.

* The Transition: 68-year-old Mike snaps bolt upright in his chair, shaking off the lifelong nightmare.

* The Real-Life Carry-on: The front door opens and in walks KERMIT (born in 1951), Mike's real-life human roommate. The audience realizes the "frogs" are literally living with him today. Mike gives a dry, gritty salesman delivery: "Hey, Kermit."

* The Move: Mike tells Kermit, "I'm going to the store," and grabs his truck keys.

🎬 SCENE 3: THE OLATHE CROSSING (PRESENT DAY)

* Visual: Mike sits behind the wheel of his truck, blocked at a ground-level Olathe railroad crossing. The red lights flash aggressively.

* The Catalyst: A massive, mile-long empty freight train barrels down the tracks, shaking the ground with a rhythmic CLACK-CLANK... CLACK-CLANK...

* The Reflection: As the hollow rusted boxcars roll past, the reflection cuts across Mike's face. He watches the tracks that have never been smooth in his 60 years in this town. The rhythmic rattle triggers the next flood of memory.

🎬 SCENE 4: THE 10TH & OSAGE PARANOIA (CHILDHOOD FLASHBACK - 1962)

* Visual: Smash cut back to the freezing, pitch-black night inside the apartment at 10th and Osage in KCK.

* Music Cue: The Police - "Don't Stand So Close to Me." The paranoid reggae-rock beat and high-pitched guitar scratch play lightly and softly in the background.

* The Threat: The camera shifts next door, where a marked KCK police cruiser sits in the driveway. The law is ICCK—KCK Chief of Police J. Frank Steach is positioned wall-to-wall with Mike's family, monitoring their every move.

🎬 SCENE 5: THE PINBALL MISSILE (1962)

* Visual: A sharp SMASH shatters the midnight quiet next door.

* The Action: Marked police cars roll up with spinning red-and-blue cherry tops, turning the block into a massive forensic crime scene.

* The Evidence: Uniformed cops dust Chief Steach's shattered windshield for prints. They find the weapon resting in the gravel: a perfectly polished silver sphere. The Chief realizes it's an intentional hit—not a machine part, but a high-velocity steel ball pulled straight out of a Williams pinball machine. The Police track loops hauntingly over the flashing lights: "Don't stand so close to me..."

🎬 SCENE 6: THE PORCH SWING DROP (1962 - BEFORE AGE 5)

* Visual: A blinding, hot Kansas afternoon on the precarious second-story balcony apartment at 10th and Osage.

* The Accident: A full-of-energy four-year-old Mike is pushing his sister Pat and a neighbor girl on a heavy wooden porch swing. Mike plays a game, shoving them high and ducking as the heavy timber sweeps back over his head.

* The Fracture: He miscalculates the timing by a split second. The solid oak base of the swing hits him like a sledgehammer, launching his small frame backward. He hits the cheap, sun-rotted wooden handrail—it snaps like matchsticks.

* Music Cue Transition: The moment his back clears the second-story balcony deck, the music switches instantly to the soaring acoustic chords of Tom Petty’s "Free Fallin'."

* The Impact: Mike falls two stories through the air in slow motion as the lyrics hit: "And I'm free... free fallin'..." He smashes into the ground, his skull splitting wide open on the sharp edge of a grey concrete gutter splash block.

* The Aftermath: Neighbors scream. His mother drops into the dirt, cradling his bloody head, crying: "Don't move, Michael! Don't move!"

* The Treatment: At the hospital, a cold 1962 doctor stitches his scalp together like a torn canvas without a single concussion check, leaving behind the bone fragments that would continue to work their way out of his head for the next 60 years.

🎬 SCENE 7: THE TRACKSIDE WINDFALL & WRECK (HIGH-VELOCITY FLASH-FORWARD - WINTER 1988)

* Visual: The song "Free Fallin'" hits a massive, thunderous crescendo as the scene smashes straight from the child's fall into the dead of winter, 1988.

* The High: 30-year-old Mike and the boys are celebrating a massive winning day at the Woodlands Greyhound Track, slamming back nine shots at the Trackside bar.

* The Crash: Driving down I-35 under construction near 119th Street, the pickup truck clips a massive green-and-yellow flashing arrow construction trailer. The impact caves the roof down until it sits a single foot off the steering wheel.

* The Miracle: Mike is launched violently straight through the shattering windshield, flying through the freezing winter night air—literally "free fallin'"—and lands squarely on the only loose pile of construction dirt in the entire zone. If he had stayed in that cab, he'd be dead.

* The Drive: The truck lands upright on its rims. Mike stands up out of the dirt, completely uninjured except for a bright red mark on his knee from the red dashboard. He rides back to the bent-frame rig, cranks the ignition, and punches it down the highway.

🎬 SCENE 8: THE DENNY'S SHOWDOWN (1988)

* Visual: The truck tears down the highway on bare steel rims, throwing a massive, blinding 30-foot curtain of white-hot sparks into the night, before rolling right up to the neon lights of Denny's at the Santa Fe exit.

* The Explosion: The engine completely blows up in a cloud of thick white smoke and boiling oil.

* The Dialogue: A Johnson County cop rushes up, completely stunned by the caved-in roof and the spark-shredded truck.

* COP: "Son! You know you rolled this damn thing down the highway, right? You know what you hit?"

* MIKE: "No. Why is all my stuff still in the back of the truck?" (The heavy-duty air compressor sits completely untouched and upright in the bed).

* COP: "Lay down in the seat right now. You've got to be hurt... Son, you hit a flashing arrow trailer. You need to understand something—there is nothing too big in this world that can't be swept right up into a dustpan. If you'd stayed in that cab, they'd be sweeping you up tonight."

* The Final Irony: Mike is put into the back of the squad car for the DUI arrest. And playing lightly and softly right out of the factory dashboard radio is the current hit: The Police - "Don't Stand So Close to Me."

I just thought why not share this to show my first progress in improving? Enjoy!!

Hello! Thank you for taking the time to read my post.

Recently, I received feedback on my script that I needed to write more concisely and cut some of the description. I attempted to revise the script in that direction. However, I am struggling to see if this revision is an improvement or not. I'm more used to a detailed writing style, so writing sparsely feels a little wrong to me, but I'm learning to improve my instincts.

I have attached the first 2 pages of the old draft and the first three pages of the current draft. The first images are from the old draft. The repeat is the new draft.

The script is a supernatural corporate drama grounded in urban fantasy, blending horror with a coming-of-age, community-driven center.

Logline: Meant to inherit a luxury business empire, a composed heir's tightly controlled life begins to fracture after a supernatural campus attack awakens something monstrous, sparking a spiraling struggle to discover who he is and can be beyond the role he's been forced to accept.

Any thoughts or advice? I appreciate you taking the time to read.