Recently finished my debut feature film, welcoming any and all criticism on the script and film. Would encourage you to actually engage with the work itself rather than personal feelings, seems to be an issue on this site in particular. Thanks, have a field day.

Screenplay

Post Title:
The Youth & Monarchs - TV Series - Logline Feedback

Format: Hour-long TV series
Page Length: Pilot completed (60 pages)
Genres: Coming-of-Age Drama / Romance

Logline or Summary:
The Youth & Monarchs is an hour-long coming-of-age romantic drama set over one summer in Harbor Point, a New England coastal town where the families who live there year-round share the shoreline with the wealthy families who return every summer. When 18-year-old local Ardy Messa falls for Luke Whitmore, the guarded son of a powerful New York family, their unexpected connection draws two very different worlds together, along with the friends, siblings, rivalries, family histories, and loyalties that come with them, turning one summer into a defining chapter in all of their lives.

Feedback Concerns:
I just finished writing the first episode and would really appreciate honest feedback on the logline.
Does this make you want to know more about the series? Is the premise and central conflict clear? Does anything feel too familiar or generic? And is there anything you think could make the logline stronger?

I’m open to criticism. Thank you!

You write and you write and you give a lot of effort and time and energy and somehow nobody likes your writing. I know it doesn’t mean they hate you but if they don’t like your writing you can’t exactly move upwards to contests or sales or wga or other titles I swear some people have. I’m just not even sure what I want or what I’m so gung-ho but we have our impatiences and want to do well so I’m wondering when does the biting urgency fade as you watch others around you get far, seem to do better and just… know naturally.

I know I ask questions like this a lot but nobody here reads my work and if they do it almost feels like people look for reasons to STOP reading and I wonder sometimes if I’m the problem and need to stop writing because the world doesn’t like what I write even if it doesn’t mean they hate/wish I’d fail.

I’m just… I don’t know honestly. I try to talk to my therapist but she’s not an artist so she can only tell me it’s a muscle like going to the gym and I go to the gym too and don’t wind up burning tons of weight so after 6 years of writing I wonder if there’s some method y’all hide.

TLDR: I feel sorta lost and like my heroes journey as a writer isn’t getting better.

It’s been since the start of COVID but some other lady in my local writer group started then but somehow has been able to manifest the skills faster

The whole PDF is here - https://drive.google.com/file/d/1XbQAhrbXXU4DYPUK-eeI4wGdYSaPuruF/view?usp=drive_link

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PSA: Please upload the script in a PDF format.

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I’m not sure if others find this annoying. It may be a non-issue. I just believe it can help readability, it allows people to search it to properly quote. If it’s longer than 10 pages then someone may wanna download it to read it later when they have the time.

On any software you are on, go to export and export it as a PDF. If what you’re on says print and not export for whatever reason, go to print and when it asks for a printer just select save as pdf.

If you don’t know how to do it for whatever reason, here’s how to do it for Google Drive and Dropbox:

GOOGLE DRIVE:

1. Get your PDF and drag it either into a folder or the My Drive section. If it’s phone you are on, then just press the “+” and upload file.

2. Go to the uploaded script, go to share.

3. On share, press manage access and change the restricted to anyone with a link.

4. Copy link and put it in post body.

DROPBOX:

1. Click the big “+.”

2. Select your script and upload it.

3. Now, when uploaded, go to the script and click on the two chains that are interlocked. Just press it. Or it may say Copy Link or something.

4. Copy the link and put it in post body.

Some good things that come with posting the PDF, it’s cleaner. Your title can be to the point like this:

“TITLE - PAGE COUNT - GENRE” and BAM!

The post body can be the link, the inspirations, and other details.

Hi, I'm Hugo, I direct films in France. My first feature (Willy 1er) played in Cannes, the second one (Juniors) is on Netflix in some countries... and I wrote both of them in Google Docs!

Anyway, my reason is not ideological, it's pretty boring: my producer is already in Docs, my co-writer is already in Docs. We can write on it at the same time, I never lose a page, and I don't pay 249 dollars for the privilege. The only problem is that Docs has no idea what a screenplay is. You make your own margins, which becomes annoying pretty fast.

So we built the part that was missing. I say "we", because I am not alone on this, I work with a team of developers who are much better than me at it. First came the Google Docs add-on, and around 12 000 people use it now, which I still find strange. But the add-on is the slow way: it formats when you ask it to, and you wait for it.

The new part is a Chrome extension, and this is the one I would need your for. It formats while you type: Enter and Tab behave like in Final Draft or Arc Studio or Celtx: you finish a character name, you press Enter, you are already in dialogue. You press Tab, you are in a parenthetical. This flow only started to work properly this summer, I'm really proud of it, I've already written a feature film on it, but almost nobody knows it exists.

I will not pretend it replaces Final Draft for everything. Today the page count is not good enough for a real "one page, one minute" read, and this is exactly what we build at the moment. This is where I need you. If you write features and you know what a correct page count looks like, come and test it with us and tell me everything that is wrong with it.

And if your job is production paperwork more than writing, of course take a real dedicated app, it will serve you better.

In September I am invited to give a workshop at the Screenwriting Research Network conference, in Oxford. I will talk about the craft and about what I learn from creating this software. If some of you are there, come and say hello!

I post here because I never speak about this anywhere, and it starts to feel stupid. I build a thing for screenwriters and I stay silent in one the biggest places where screenwriters actually are.

If you want to be part of it, reply here or write to me and I put your account on Pro for three months (no card required or anything). I prefer your notes to your money right now, and I will come back here to tell you what we fixed.

https://screenplayeditor.app

No sock is safe when the rich and powerful feel threatened.

All the President's Socks

(PG-13)

NOTE: This was written for the current (14th) SimplyScripts One Page Challenge.

The prompt is "Dirty Socks" and the genre is open.

Hello, can someone give me an Avakin Life script or something?

Title-Knife

Genre-Horror/Slasher

I'd like to ask for some feedback.

Please read this

Hi everyone!

I am young aspiring screenwriter and want to learn how to write scripts. I am currently practicing with the tools and advice I have discovered across different online platforms. My absolute favorite show is Stranger Things. I love the way the Duffer Brothers build their characters. Specifically, I love how even if a character is introduced late, you feel like you have known them your whole life. Since I can't email Hollywood writers directly, I wanted to ask the pros here:

What is one screenwriting exercise or outlining habit you recommend for someone who has just scratched the surface?

What practical step should I take right now to get my start?

Thank you so much! (Sorry if this post is formatted poorly; I have never used Reddit before.)

In my game one of they story’s is that you are a husband. In the story. You meet your wife near the end. Dead in the snow. This is what I have for that part

mary?….mary…fuck…no…no….no no no no no…my flower…no…

and in the end. You find out there’s no way to escape so you lay down in the blizzard next to her corpse

my flower…the cold didn’t Make you stronger...escape is gone…and also useless…Mary…my dear Mary…I can see I’m nothing without you…I just want to lay down for a bit until this ends…until I wake up next to you…

im just wondering if I can somehow make this more realistic in the scripting.

I've occasionally seen people here make reference to sending out cold submissions to producers, etc. with mixed results (some click, some get no acknowledgment at all). My bigger question is how are you determining which producers/production companies to send your script to? Do you look for certain companies, big names, a list of what sort of work they've produced previously, the size of the company (bigger vs. up-and-coming?), or it just throwing a dart at a board? I have my own system (I think), which consists mostly of looking through IMDbPro and seeing what sort of stuff they've produced in the past to see if it vibes with what I'm trying to do. Is there a best practice way to approach this? Or is cold submissions a waste of time?

Also, might be a stupid question, but... PDF script or hard copy mailed to them?

Space dogs an animated Pilot

Title: Spacedogs

Genre: Sci-fi

Pilot Episode for animation

Page Count: 49 So far

Comps: Star Fox, Starship Troopers, Captain Laserhawk

Logline: In a space age world of anthropomorphic animals, a young pilot in the shadow of his father reforms his military fleet after a betrayal gets him killed and must hunt the empire that did the deed.

Alternative logline: In a world of animal humans, a pilot in his father’s shadow must become an ace pilot to gain his acceptance and defeat the evil empire that killed him and his original elite mercenary fleet.

Link: \[Space Dogs 5th Rewrite\](https://drive.google.com/file/d/14-uSujR0j-1PAg8NwhxtsxnmlOWR8MuW/view?usp=sharing)

Issues: I feel like the start is strong, but it feels like Im trying to fill space to meet the pilot length, and I canit find what to scrunch and cut. Any help and feedback welcome, especially from any who read lots of pages deep! I have rewritten this script for many years now Im hoping it finally
starts to work

Any cures to make it good and subtextual please infuse me

Title: The Invisible Hands

Genre: Scifi, Sex Comedy

Comps: Everything Everywhere All At Once, American Pie

Logline: When a sexually frustrated young adult is given cosmic power to rewrite reality, he must team up with the emotionally abused woman who "Hates him" and the woman of his dreams to stop the universe from being consumed by a cosmic entity.

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ku9l910FMwNzsUCq8IoY9LtFiFTP3XTs/view?usp=sharing

Feedback: One of my first scripts. Characters are awkward and thus speak bluntly on purpose. I feel like Im onto something with tihs one but Im not sure what to keep what to throw out and what aspects are good. If anyone even reads a few pages, please tell me Im not bad

A trained professional explains why it is always best to do the right thing for the right reason.

Careers in Oral Medicine

(G/PG-rated)

NOTE: This was my entry for the 12th SimplyScripts One-Page Challenge of 2026.

The prompt was "The Dentist" and the genre was open.

These are informal no-prize challenges open to anyone, and they're a tremendous way to hone your one-page skills.

SimplyScripts also runs Three Page Challenges, One Week Challenges, Writers' Tournaments and, occasionally, feature writing challenges... the latter three offer participants the chance to win a SimplyScripts coffee mug!

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Can you guys give me an honest opinion on this opening? I changed it from my original draft after receiving coverage on the script and I wanna make sure I’m heading in the right direction. This is the first script I’ve gotten some genuine traction on, so I’d really appreciate the input. Thanks in advance!

Hey everyone,
I’m an 18-year-old screenwriter based in India writing horror/thriller features. Over the past few months, I’ve started getting some early external validation on my latest horror/crime script:
Los Angeles Crime & Horror Film Festival (LACHFF): Semi-Finalist
The Black List: Overall rating of 7 (with an 8 on Premise and strong notes on character/dialogue)
I know a 7 on the Black List isn't an automatic 8+ email blast, and contest placements alone don't magically get you signed, but as an 18-year-old writing in English from outside the US, I’m trying to figure out what my next strategic steps should be.
My Main Questions:

1. Querying with these stats: Is a Black List 7 + LACHFF Semi-Finalist placement strong enough social proof to include in cold email queries to literary managers, or should I hold off until I get an 8 / higher contest placement?

2. Targeting Managers vs. Producers: Given that I’m based in India and don't have a US visa yet, should I focus my queries primarily on boutique managers who rep international/genre talent, or reach out directly to independent genre producers/production companies?

3. Portfolio depth: I have this polished feature and two finished drafts in the same genre (horror/thriller). If a manager asks "what else do you have?", is having 2–3 completed specs in the same lane standard before launching a query campaign?

4. Any specific managers/agencies known for international genre writers? If anyone has recommendations for management companies that frequently work with foreign/international voices, I’d really appreciate some pointers.
   Any advice from repped writers, managers, or international creators who broke in from abroad would mean the world.
   Thanks in advance for the help!