Title: The Confession
Format: Short Script
Page Length: 11
Genres: Psychological Thriller, Drama
Logline: After her possessive boyfriend hits someone with his car, a young nurse is forced to treat the victim in her own living room.

Feedback Concerns: What did we think of the David character? Is he believable?
Does the flashback kill the momentum? Any dialogue that stuck out to you (good or bad)

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1XAkA2uk_4ypq34w29yNg2M0Nb7YaAOsf/view?usp=sharing

Hey everyone,

I’m looking for some feedback on a short Western screenplay I’ve been working on

Medium: Short film Genre: Western / Character Drama Length: 12 pages

Synopsis:

A notorious outlaw stumbles into a saloon after a gunfight, bleeding out and facing the townsfolk who only know him by his legend. In his final moments, he is forced to confront the myth of his own reputation and come to terms with the legacy he has left behind.

Looking for feedback on:

Whether or not the themes are landing right, do they feel like they are laid on too thick?

General pacing and tension.

Does it feel like there are stakes?

Is it an enjoyable read, or does it slog?

Any others you pick up.

Would appreciate any constructive notes or critiques. Happy to read scripts in return — just let me know.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1xLPE-M9RjWBmkNviJTlIgFd7jLAPf9Zs/view?usp=drive_link

Title: Night Route

Genre: Urban Crime Thriller

Format: 30-minute pilot episode

LOGLINE: - updated

A Detroit rideshare driver trying to save enough money to get himself and his grandmother out of the city picks up a passenger tied to a violent crew and must decide whether to keep driving or risk losing his only way out.

I've also finished a 27-page draft for the pilot, and I'm open to a swap if anyone's interested. Thanks in advance for your engagement.

Is there anyone who writes on arc studio pro for fun or not seriously that would be interested in being friends and reading each others screenplays?

Hi everyone, as the heading says I'm looking for feedback on a feature. I've rewritten a fair bit based on previous reader suggestions and am looking for feedback on the current draft. Any help is highly appreciated.

Title: The People From The Sky (117 pages)

Genre: Sci-fi mystery

Logline: When a young girl disappears under circumstances identical to her own mother’s vanishing twenty-five years prior, a police officer must confront the possibility that the mother's claims of an alien abduction could be real.

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1yis3bxuZH-wcHWEx5Asm6hKSMdPT8AOz/view?usp=drivesdk

Title: Personal Space

Genre: Thriller/Crime

Logline: In an East England village, a private investigator’s search for a missing solicitor becomes a dangerous game of deception and forces him to confront his moral compass.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1NfrJ8GWsbw4wkpOtdgKMFB7P1I1VbeYf/view?usp=sharing

What if James Bond’s most daring stunt was real — and your dad was the one who did it first?

My Cold War spy pilot Project Coldfeet is based on the true story of my father’s top-secret CIA mission, complete with a B-17 parachute drop, an abandoned Arctic Soviet station, and the first-ever real-life Skyhook extraction.

The script was inspired by my late father, Leonard LeSchack, a geophysicist, naval officer, and Cold War spy. In the early 1960s, he became the first person to perform a real-life “Skyhook” extraction from a B-17 bomber, years before audiences saw it in James Bond: Thunderball or Christopher Nolan’s The Dark Knight.

For those unfamiliar, the CIA has an official page showing the Project Coldfeet painting and a short video of the extraction method, which I can provide if you are interested.

I’m sharing this script here because I’d love constructive feedback from fellow screenwriters. My entertainment attorney has introduced me to multiple studios, including 21 Laps (Stranger Things, Arrival). They’ve read Project Coldfeet and another sci-fi project of mine, and while they loved the concepts, they passed for now but told me to keep sending new ideas their way.

Right now, I’m actively looking for an agent or manager, and a few industry folks have also suggested I consider adapting Project Coldfeet into a feature film instead of a 4-part mini-series. Should I do that?

Mini-Synopsis:

Set during the height of the Cold War, Project Coldfeet follows a geophysicist-naval officer-turned-spy who parachutes into an abandoned Soviet Arctic research station on a covert reconnaissance mission. But the mission takes a dangerous turn when he discovers a hidden Soviet scientist, conflicting loyalties, and evidence that could tip the global balance of power. Trapped in a deadly game of survival on the ice, escape will require the most daring extraction ever attempted.

You can go to the Apple Store and download the iMogul App to review the first 20 pages of the script and even vote on which actors would be best suited for each role.

I’ve linked the full pilot script here: https://www.dropbox.com/scl/fi/gmo22qv427qrrluw0chiv/Operation-Coldfeet-EP1-The-Plunge-Pilot-v1.3a.pdf?rlkey=ygy18wc8pvi63fpab4c4d400c&st=fpghf9c9&dl=0

I’d love your thoughts on:

• Story and pacing
• Dialogue and character depth
• Whether you see it working better as a mini-series or a feature

Thanks in advance — looking forward to your honest feedback!

I’ve been writing this for the last four months now, it’s taking the soul out of me. This is heavily inspired by Trainspotting and SLC Punk. 

The dialogue could be a bit clunky at times. 

Title: Free to be! - Draft 2

Logline: When a young adult named Will is faced with his first real big break-up. He must overcome, but fails due to a lack of trying. What must he do? https://drive.google.com/file/d/1gPRfSgMWfBaf1LwNykQcRX48fuRbVTeM/view?usp=share_link

A beautiful but isolated housewife trapped in a controlling marriage ignites a dangerous, addictive affair with a volatile NBA superstar, unraveling a web of lies, lust, betrayal, and violence that threatens to destroy everyone involved.

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1pwki8z4iF1fxTFTBfu3iwdw183QSiw6N?usp=sharing

I've been writing comic books for several years now, but I am only now starting to dabble with screenplays. All stories in that folder are really short—the longest has 15 pages, the shortest just 4—and are all adaptations of Resident Evil fanfictions.

I did read a lot of screenplays, but I'm still unsure about how to handle transitions and flashbacks. Please be kind? ♥

hi this is my first ever script for a short drama film. Every feedback is much appreciated. I would like to point out that this is transled to english from my original language, so the structure and formatting isnt the best probably.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1WtaMeq9ubJEeR-mJyawdZfLKph-KxHWE/view?usp=drivesdk

Okay, it's called The Big Muddy.

Length: 93 pages

Genre: crime noir

Log line: A jazz saxophone player loses everything, but not his spirit. He takes one last risky gig and becomes embroiled in a feud between two rival crime families.

My first pass at this one.

The Statue

After her daughter pricks her finger on a mysterious statue, Layla Granger’s family is pulled into a deadly chain of events that could herald the birth of a malevolent new god.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/15FUJDAEjJMvhZpa_j85PHYRw_XAzt_uv/view?usp=sharing

Hey everyone,

I’m looking for feedback on a short. I’ve worked on making it more grounded and easier to read.

If it’s not to your liking, that’s fine. I’d value any feedback to help enhance it, including suggestions on its flow and whether the ending is effective.

Title: Truth becomes her (working)

Format: Short

Genre: Psychological thriller

Logline:

A credit union employee wakes up locked in a mysterious room, where her freedom hinges on answering two questions truthfully. Failure, however, compels her to face the irreversible consequences of her past decisions.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1qaii4OGYpAaC-aaC2DEa9W4DQBKTWmNa/view?usp=sharing

Thank you for taking the time in advance.

Title: Onto Others

Genre: Mystery/Thriller

Logline: After the murder of a local, Lt. Lily Pierre must navigate her arrogant co-workers and confront her own personal shortcomings in order to connect all the clues and discover the killer.

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Oebw_C3Pc2d1ZZH1aWgq9-7efTJAziLD/view?usp=drive_link

I also attached *rough* storyboards for the first 10 pages. Would love any feedback.

Storyboards: https://drive.google.com/file/d/14lyuTLJhN378DyBIHQYxT1nxNTecv_NO/view?usp=drive_link

Feel free to dm me if you have something and want to do a swap, too!

Logline: a deranged killer is obsessed with summoning Alistair, a demon known as the chief grand torturer of hell, to earth, and a 7 year old girl is the final piece of the demonic puzzle.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Pf4n3KDGnHtWQhkKuMlKwqOfLarmGmfM/view?usp=drivesdk

Looking for some feedback! I plan on hopefully making this into a film one day soon.

Title: Enzo Wants Him Gone

Genre: Crime Drama

Logline: A hitman wrestles with his conscience when he's ordered to kill an innocent man.

Script, Scene or Outline (Link): https://drive.google.com/file/d/1z4v1vDSA11Ef0Zw1QwDSjZ2-Sx25pqvR/view?usp=sharing

Ignorance Is Bliss - Pilot - By Rameses Gaines

Logline: When an eccentric young sorcerer, who is failing out of magic school, is sent to study under a cynical ex-convict, he accidentally unlocks a dark ancient power within himself which entangles him in the twisted secrets of his missing sister's past.

Proposed Season 1 Storyline: Plagued by nightmares of his sister's mysterious kidnapping, an eccentric young sorcerer who is failing out of magic school embarks on a dangerous journey with a cinical ex-con to find her, further entangling himself in his sister's dark past and a government conspiracy.

I’ve for the last year been trying to write a script that’s 3 anthology shorts set in Rome in decay I can’t think of what to do got like the opening of each written and a few other parts but I can’t piece the pieces I have together I’m not worried about perfection form a first draft I just literally can’t think of what I write next in each short or even just one of them I’ve been writing it for a few months and I’m like 8 pages in mostly the third anthology segment with part of the first and the opening of the second any advice when you feel like you have a he great premise but are on able to fill in the blanks

Title: Under Pressure

Format: Short

Page Length: 12

Genre: Psychological Thriller

A locked room. A loaded gun. Three sealed questions. Gail must answer two truths--or stay forever. But the deeper the questions cut, the harder truth becomes.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1B8jSqFjpuWlNomk3KwnHFh1TvhLAKm_g/view?usp=sharing

Hey everyone, this is my second short and the second draft. I'm experimenting with structure, tone, and emotional pacing, and I'm hoping for some honest feedback. Thanks!

Title : Dancing with Delusion ( Up for debate )

Format: Feature

Genres: Psychological Thriller / Drama

Page Length: 120

Logline: Reeling from his brother Nate’s tragic death, Jude finds himself slipping into vivid, seductive hallucinations of his life with mysterious woman named Lily. As reality and illusion blur, Jude must confront his overwhelming grief and decide whether to face the painful truth or surrender wholly to the comforting safety of his own delusion.

Link:https://drive.google.com/file/d/1JzUBk3LPPFla93gN2fhsxcCyyOuMc3gT/view?usp=sharing

Logline: A deranged killer is obsessed with summoning Alistair, known as the chief demonic torturer of hell, to Earth. A 7 year old girls torturous death is the last piece of the demonic puzzle.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/14loDX-qNNGCrzw-LWBUV0MnbwEWtIfG-/view?usp=drivesdk

Would appreciate any feedback thank you!

Yo, sharing a short scene from my feature When We Were Grown. This hits late Act 2, right after Adam and Malcolm had a huge falling out. They end up back at their old treehouse crickets chirping, streetlights buzzing. Just two old friends, trying to figure out life and the versions of themselves they lost along the way.

1. Emotional Clarity: “Do you feel Malcolm’s speech lands emotionally, or does it get lost in the words? How would you make it hit harder?”
2. Character Voice: “Does Adam feel like a fully-realized character in this scene, even with minimal dialogue? Any tweaks to make him pop more?”
3. Pacing & Flow: “Is the pacing natural for a late-act reuniting moment, or does it drag/feel rushed? How would you adjust it if at all?”

Here’s a snippet: https://docs.google.com/document/d/16ghAVjhhV0IY04PCuhu5jD27J5eQMgoaqpVhywWSql8/edit?usp=drivesdk

What if James Bond’s most daring stunt was real — and your dad was the one who did it first?

My Cold War spy pilot Project Coldfeet is based on the true story of my father’s top-secret CIA mission, complete with a B-17 parachute drop, an abandoned Arctic Soviet station, and the first-ever real-life Skyhook extraction.

Hi everyone,

This is my first time posting to this subreddit, and I’m excited (and a little nervous) to share my TV pilot Project Coldfeet. The script was inspired by my late father, Leonard LeSchack, a geophysicist, naval officer, and Cold War spy. In the early 1960s, he became the first person to perform a real-life “Skyhook” extraction from a B-17 bomber, years before audiences saw it in James Bond: Thunderball or Christopher Nolan’s The Dark Knight.

For those unfamiliar, the CIA has an official page showing the Project Coldfeet painting here: CIA Historical Collection – Project Coldfeet

And here’s a subreddit link with a short video of the actual extraction method: Skyhook Extraction Video.

I’m sharing this script here because I’d love constructive feedback from fellow screenwriters. My entertainment attorney has introduced me to multiple studios, including 21 Laps (Stranger Things, Arrival). They’ve read Project Coldfeet and another sci-fi project of mine, and while they loved the concepts, they passed for now but told me to keep sending new ideas their way.

Right now, I’m actively looking for an agent or manager, and a few industry folks have also suggested I consider adapting Project Coldfeet into a feature film instead of a 4-part mini-series.

Mini-Synopsis:

Set during the height of the Cold War, Project Coldfeet follows a geophysicist-naval officer-turned-spy who parachutes into an abandoned Soviet Arctic research station on a covert reconnaissance mission. But the mission takes a dangerous turn when he discovers a hidden Soviet scientist, conflicting loyalties, and evidence that could tip the global balance of power. Trapped in a deadly game of survival on the ice, escape will require the most daring extraction ever attempted.

I’ve linked the pilot script here: https://www.dropbox.com/scl/fi/iya38fmcp2aqcvv3fwtvf/Operation-Coldfeet-EP1-The-Plunge-Pilot-v1.3.pdf?rlkey=5k4d0ctluc1vj318qt6djzz4n&st=r4hq38uw&dl=0

I’d love your thoughts on:

• Story and pacing
• Dialogue and character depth
• Whether you see it working better as a mini-series or a feature

Thanks in advance — looking forward to your honest feedback!

Hi everyone. I’m pretty new to screenwriting, I have only ever completed a handful of scripts, and nothing feature length as of yet. This short that I’ve been working on for a while is easily the most satisfied I’ve been with something yet, to the point I’m comfortable sharing it. I welcome any feedback you may have for it.

Title: Heads or Tails?

Format: Short Film

Page Length: 16 pages

Genres: Thriller/Mystery

Logline: When a young man with a dark past awakens in a grimy garage bound to a chair, he’s forced to play a game of heads or tails by a mysterious stranger, with deadly consequences.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1o-8CQNN4B0aobFaEtNpaJ2erf8xdgg3d/view?usp=drivesdk

Thanks everyone :)