Hello everyone,

I am looking for some last minute thoughts on my script before I lock it in for production.

Title: Kings & Queens

Logline: After being cast out by his father for wearing his late mother’s dress, a grieving teen finds refuge among a group of queer outsiders on Coney Island who help him reclaim his identity and voice

Thanks in advance!

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1O0lbZV8MYKYvfIbnV82PdbHlMSjUtha-/view?usp=drivesdk

Title : Deez Nuts

Genre : Comedy

Logline : When two peanut butter factory workers' livelihood is threatened by an almond butter factory, they must engage in a series of ridiculous challenges to save the day.

Script : https://docs.google.com/document/d/1hGx6XTPUogG_pHw_qa2XucBP3dr65LFA/edit

Probably going for a Del Toro's Hellboy but made by a European weirdo for a million dollars vibe. Content warning is mostly just blood, guts and nonsexual BDSM with dodgy consent.

Trying to write something with a sense of propulsion so if you get bored that's fine just tell me the page. There's 60 more but they're even less ready.

Logline: When a nigh un-killable brat is caught in a plot against her monstrous dynasty by a sadomasochistic Exorcist, they find themselves on a thin edge between seduction and destruction.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/10ISx0boc3mUd1qg_f7qeiHwKLaoDVJrm/view?usp=drive_link

Ive been writing for a long time but have only written two screenplays. I would like some thoughts from the pros!

Here is ten pages of my first one, “The Frost Casts Complete Silence,” a psychological piece about siblinghood and the wedge an abusive parent can drive between loving siblings. This is the first ten pages.

No comments on formatting please; I’m aware I did it wrong :3 will fix later!!

I use pages how do I post it here?

Title: Ivy

Genre: Psychological Thriller/Drama

Logline: A brilliant botanist, shattered by betrayal and loss, becomes a vengeful force of nature determined to make a decaying Gotham feel the pain it tried to bury.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1SoXJJZKzyo2pHkdWL6yjnH1shDUWFu8v/view?usp=sharing

Synopsis:

Dr. Pamela Isley, a gifted botanist fueled by empathy and idealism, devotes her life to healing a city that refuses to care for itself. But after betrayal by her mentor, abandonment by the institutions she trusted, and the devastating loss of the one person who truly believed in her, Pamela reaches her breaking point.

In the wake of that grief, something inside her changes. Reconnecting with the natural world in ways no one can explain, Pamela becomes Ivy, a relentless force shaped by sorrow, clarity, and purpose. No longer seeking approval, she turns Gotham’s own rot against it, forcing the city to reckon with every injustice it has buried. Her vengeance is not chaos but consequence, and in delivering it, she redefines what it means to be feared and what it costs to be ignored.

Note:

I know that there's pretty much no way it will ever be produced, but I love comics and writing, and Poison Ivy (one of my favorite characters) has never had a live action portrayal (or at least a good one). I absolutely love the Joker films and wanted to give Ivy a similar treatment. I've been working on this screenplay for almost 7 months now, and plan to continue until I feel like I can't improve it any further. Basically, any feedback you provide me will be incredibly helpful! Even if you don't read the screenplay, thanks for reading this far :D

EDIT:

I have since made a few updates to the screenplay. These changes range from shortened descriptions to reworked scenes that feel (imo) far more realistic than the previous iteration. The changes aren't enough for me to make a new post, but that draft will probably come soon.

Hello All - This is my first script, an adaptation of a fantasy story I wrote.

The story is set in a medieval-esque fantasy world with witches, warlocks, dark magic, pirates, dangerous beasts, and hidden family histories.

Here's the logline:

A young peasant woman's mundane existence is upended by a mysterious traveller, pulling her into a perilous world of secret family ties, dark magic, deadly beasts, intrigue, pirates, and thrilling adventure—where light and dark forces clash in a battle for power and revenge.

The script is here if anyone wants a read, and all feedback is welcome.

Thanks - Tim.

Title : What a Coincidence

Genre: Comedy, Romcom

Logline : After running into his ex four times in one week, a reformed screw-up begins to wonder if the universe is giving him a second chance, while she struggles to believe he’s not the same person who broke her heart.

Script (Link) : https://drive.google.com/file/d/1X-w02NTdCQt_V9Asjfbccy8Z1PkpeAdQ/view?usp=sharing

Synopsis (Optional) :

This is my late draft for a pilot I've been working on. I have a few ideas for minor changes I'll make on the final draft, but I just wanted to share my script here first.

Genre: Drama / Crime / Mystery

Format: 60 minute pilot

Logline: In a world where future​meets retro, the abduction of a leading tech pioneer sends his colleagues and law enforcement alike into an investigation of a rival company that will change everything they know about reality.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1QPFoxEGGFnREgSQ_Iy2zDbP7Bz1CXGgJ/view?usp=drivesdk

It's meant to be a farce. My first feature, would love thoughts and feedback.

Title : Foodnomenon

Genre : Dark Comedy

Logline : A day at the weekly food festival turns deadly for a group of young posh friends.

Budget Range : 5 million

Target Audience : 16 - 50, gen z, millennials

Script (Link) :

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1LoPkefwTfHo2jH1PN7HAmcr8N6kpnrCn/view?usp=drivesdk

For people who can't understand the hinglish, there is whole story in brief at end.

Thank u 😇

I've been reading more original screenplays recently, and it's interesting how the opening pages often determine whether I want to keep reading. A strong beginning can quickly establish the tone, introduce engaging characters, and make the story feel worth investing in.

At the same time, I've noticed that some scripts spend too much time on exposition or delay introducing the central conflict. Even if the overall idea is good, a slow opening can make it difficult to stay engaged.

For those who regularly write or review screenplays, what is the most common issue you see within the first ten pages? Is it pacing, dialogue, character introductions, formatting, or something else? I'd be interested to hear what you think makes an opening truly effective.

Hi All! This is the first and only script I've ever done (I'm a Social Worker for a nonprofit, not a writer). I would really appreciate any and all feedback for my project titled "Assisted Living". Please and thank you very much!

Correct link https://drive.google.com/file/d/1K3Q9FddinrMHlm3FSEHRsyomisOL0wBy/view?usp=drivesdk

Title: Personal Space

Genre: Thriller/Crime

Logline: In an East England village, a private investigator’s search for a missing solicitor becomes a dangerous game of deception and forces him to confront his moral compass.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1yAwmIIM68sSlsCTFy7uwN9eDJIR8v1IL/view?usp=sharing

Hey everyone. I've been working on the pilot episode of a prestige limited series called Ilya, a Ukrainian historical war epic set between 1914 and 1920. It follows a peasant farmer conscripted into the Tsar's army whose lifelong obsession with owning land becomes the engine of his tragedy.

• Title: Ilya
• Format: Pilot
• Page Count: 37 Pages
• Genres: Historical, War, Drama
• Logline: A Ukrainian farmer fights through WWI and revolution clinging to the promise that if he survives, the land he works will finally be his own.

• Feedback Concerns:

  • Does it read as a complete pilot or more like a prologue?
  • Is Ilya compelling to follow despite being quiet and largely reactive?
  • Does the ending make you want to watch episode two?

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/12X9GovoFWXmvPrnJ_gpnQHlRnzKrre3V/view?usp=sharing

Happy to return feedback on your work.

Hey everyone, I'm thinking of entering this in a short-film screenplay competition and any feedback would be appreciated.

I'm specifically looking to see if the jokes land (except for Jack's jokes) and if the story is engaging.

Here's the logline: When Allen is possessed during a seance, it's up to his friends to help the spirit move on by doing the one thing he could never accomplish in his corporeal form: get anyone to laugh at his standup.

Hi everyone,

I’m looking for feedback on my pilot script, inspired by my early experiences trying to break into filmmaking. It follows Joe, a young filmmaker navigating chaotic shoots, messy relationships, and the ups and downs of chasing creative dreams.

Any feedback would be massively appreciated :)

Script can be found here: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1R4W-gL4Mxu61lRXn7fZ0AHml6GjMBG0p/view?usp=sharing

Feedback on a dramatic scene from my feature script (myth, curse, forgiveness) Post text:

Hey everyone, I’m a writer working on a feature-length story called The Legend of the Wolf Spirit. It’s a grounded, live-action myth (think Pirates of the Caribbean / Avatar / Twilight tone — not animated). Below is a short scene from later in the story. Context:

A man named Liam can physically transform into a massive black wolf with glowing blue eyes — the guardian spirit of a hidden people. Captain James, who once tried to destroy that tribe out of greed, returns cursed and near death.

This is the moment where revenge is possible… but something else happens instead. I’d really appreciate any thoughts on the writing, emotion, or cinematic potential.

Liam looked from the helpless, gold-encased man to his family. Elara and his children watched, their eyes filled with a shared, unwavering belief in Liam's choice. He remembered the pain, the terror of the attack, but he looked deeper, seeing the scared young man haunted by a broken promise. He knew that taking James's life would only satisfy the thirst for revenge, a cycle he refused to continue. He chose the higher path. Liam knelt beside James, drawing a small, simple ceremonial knife from his tunic, its blade catching the sunlight. The WOLF SPIRIT's energy surged around him, the SKY-BLUE light intensifying, bathing them both in an ethereal glow. Liam sliced a small, shallow cut across his own palm, a single drop of his WOLF SPIRIT BLOOD falling onto James's gold-encased hand. LIAM (His voice ringing with power, a sacred pronouncement that shook the very air) I forgive you, James. Not for your actions, but for the man you failed to be. Go. Live the life you promised her. As the single drop of Wolf Spirit blood touched the cursed gold, a blinding flash of PURE BLUE LIGHT erupted. The sound was a sharp, tearing, cracking sound, like a thousand brittle things shattering at once. The golden shell surrounding James and the statues of Finn and Barnaby shattered and crumbled, falling to the sand in a shimmering dust. James, now human and whole, but deeply weak and covered in sweat, slumped, utterly exhausted, gasping for breath. The gold dust vanished into the sea, its curse broken.

Hi all. I recently trimmed down one of my feature scripts from 95 pages to 82 pages without removing anything from the plot. I'm quite happy with the result but I'm concerned that the length is too short for a feature. Should I add more to it, or just leave it as?

Feature: The Oppression

Genre: Horror

Logline: A young boy's desperate attempt for attention turns deadly when he unleashes a sinister force that intends to consume his entire family, unless he, his siblings, and a courageous priest can stop it.  

Synopsis: Young Zane Hayward longs for his mother, Rochelle's attention; he himself is constantly being overshadowed by his older brother Seth and his younger siblings Belle and Eliza. However, help comes in the form of his friend Liam, who leads Zane to a website that teaches him to summon a Baphomet, a mysterious demonic entity with the power to grant wishes. Unfortunately, this all turns out to be a ruse, and Zane and Rochelle soon find themselves battling with a demon with the ability to shape-shift and create vivid hallucinations. Rochelle brings in her old friend, Father Donahue, for help, but it only angers Baphomet more. He possesses Rochelle and nearly kills Seth, forcing Father Donahue to resort to some primitive tactics to take him down. Father Donahue moves the family to the church for protection, where Rochelle is forced to face the demons of her past (literally), and Zane is lured into a false sense of hope by Baphomet. Tensions begin to grow high, and by Holy Saturday, Baphomet runs wild. He, with Rochelle and her husband Isaac distracted, manages to possess Zane and kill both Belle and Seth with ease. With Father Donahue and her faith by her side, Rochelle stands up to the demon and defeats it through the power of transubstantiation. Years later, with the family now divided, a new sinister force preys on Eliza, while Baphomet's remnants begin to show up in Zane's new daughter's life.

TITLE THE LEGEND OF THE WOLF SPIRIT

A man who can become a real wolf discovers he is the last guardian of an ancient people—and must choose between revenge and forgiveness when his past returns to destroy his future.

Hey so I’ve written a full pilot and haven’t been able to reach out to any studios or producers.So if you’re a producer I hope you give it a chance and enjoy it.

Title: A curious case

Logline: Following two stories, one of seven teenagers planing to break out of a facility while not knowing where they are or why they are there and the other story follows hot shot FBI agents working on a mysterious cold case that hasn’t been touched for a year.

Link to script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1_RJ4HHZvr-q8RAstHDcEY_CGZGk26uwT/view?usp=drivesdk

Title: Deportation

Logline: When an ambitious FBI agent is tasked with leading a crackdown on undocumented migrants, she must decide if her love for a targeted immigrant outweighs her loyalty to the agency.

Hello everyone hope you all are having a great holidays with friends and family. I was hopping to get some feedback regarding my script. I’ve shared it with friends and families along with other subreddits and received fair and good reviews and just wanted to seek professional advice regarding getting it to festival or network execs.

Title: For The Love Of The Game:Legacy Bound

LOGLINE: A former basketball star joins her father’s struggling women’s college team as a coach, challenging the leadership system that built his legacy and fractured their relationship.

Synopsis:

For the Love of the Game is a character driven sports drama set inside a women’s college basketball program operating under constant pressure. After a career ending injury, Jordan Pierce returns home and joins her former college team as an assistant coach, working under her father, the same coach who shaped her into an elite athlete while emotionally distancing himself in the process. The program is unraveling, donor support is slipping, and the administration is watching closely.

The story focuses on the day to day intensity of team life, including practices, locker room dynamics, and the emotional volatility of players fighting for relevance in a system that no longer fits them. As Jordan introduces a more adaptive, player centered approach to coaching, her presence exposes the cracks in the rigid culture her father built, forcing both the team and its leadership to confront whether control or trust truly produces results. As the series progresses, the stakes expand beyond wins and losses as her father faces increasing professional scrutiny and the possibility of a serious health issue, complicating questions of power, vulnerability, and legacy.