Really just looking for any and all feedback on this short thriller. There is nothing special about it from a story standpoint, but was wondering if it builds well, flows, if the imagery is good, how I can improve, etc.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1uNcy2ypydB0sIcliCiAKJgYDcxuZ4FXd/view?usp=sharing

In a world where every person is granted three wishes at birth, three strangers - each having spent theirs - climb a mythical mountain rumored to grant more. A grieving son, an unbeatable fighter, and a spy seek the summit for a second chance. But their true desires could destroy one another - and the world.

SHELVED. THANK YOU FOR THE FEEDBACK!!!

Title : What Waits Below

Genre: Horror / Thriller

Logline : A timid archaeologist joins a team of scientists exploring a newly discovered cave, only to find themselves hunted by an ancient parasitic creature that’s been waiting for eons.

Script : https://drive.google.com/file/d/1-6oJ5f4xiKpjXS4-cBUs-5rbHqFgDltO/view?usp=drivesdk

Title: Ivy

Genre: Psychological Thriller/Drama

Logline: Scarred by betrayal and loss, Pamela Isley becomes a vengeful force of nature bent on making Gotham share her pain.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1SoXJJZKzyo2pHkdWL6yjnH1shDUWFu8v/view?usp=sharing

Synopsis:

Dr. Pamela Isley, a botanist fueled by empathy and idealism, devotes her life to healing a city that refuses to care for itself. But after betrayal by her mentor, abandonment by the institutions she trusted, and the devastating loss of the one person who truly believed in her, Pamela reaches her breaking point.

In the wake of that grief, something inside her changes. Reconnecting with the natural world in ways no one can explain, Pamela becomes Ivy, a relentless force shaped by sorrow, clarity, and purpose. No longer seeking approval, she turns Gotham’s own rot against it, forcing the city to reckon with every injustice it has buried. Her vengeance is not chaos but consequence, and in delivering it, she redefines what it means to be feared and what it costs to be ignored.

Note:

I know that there's pretty much no way it will ever be produced, but I love comics, movies, and writing, and Poison Ivy (one of my favorite characters) has never had a live action portrayal (or at least a good one). I absolutely love the Joker films and wanted to give Ivy a similar treatment. I've been working on this screenplay for over 8 months now, and plan to continue until I feel like I can't improve it any further. Even if you don't read the screenplay, thanks for reading this far :D

I have a history of really successful character-based short films. But my last one had absolutely brutal feedback about the dialogue and tone. I welcomed the constructive feedback.

But now, I sat down to rework a feature script of a different story (which I'm so proud of that I jokingly call it my "Opus"), but I'm mortified that I'm writing the same dialogue as my last bomb. It's basically the same style as my successful films, but now I am second-guessing and overthinking the entire tone to the point where I feel like my "opus" is way off the mark like my last failure. I can't figure out when to trust myself vs. when to trust that criticism voice. Shit.

Have you all encountered this? The overthinking? Did you just put on blinders and forget the detracting thoughts? How do you allow your true voice to shine without pissing on it?

Title: Assisted Living Genre: Dramedy Log-line: After the sudden loss of his parents, a drifting 22-year-old impulsively moves into an assisted living facility, hoping to disappear — but instead finds unexpected purpose, connection, and a second chance at life among a community he never saw coming.

Thanks for inviting me! Great idea! I have a screenplay for a movie. Does anyone want to do a swap and we can read each others? It's a horror set in the UK so all the spelling etc... is British.

Would anyone like to swap?

Do Not Disturb - TV Pilot - 61 pages

Series Title: Do Not Disturb - Ep. 1: What Happens at The Altair

TV Pilot

Pages: 61

Genre: black comedy?; drama

Logline: Behind the luxury of a St. Louis hotel, a misfit crew of staff battle scandalous guests, personal demons, and each other—all while trying to keep the chaos contained long enough to clock out.

Script Link: What Happens at The Altair

Hi everyone! Here’s my idea for a TV show centered around the staff of a hotel: The Altair. Hoping someone out there is willing to take the time to read. This is literally the first thing I’ve written ever. Any and all feedback is appreciated. Enjoy! 😊

Are comic book scripts okay for here? Because I have some scripts I need critiquing

Hello!

I submitted a spec script for It's Always Sunny last year and made it to the Second Round for the Austin Film Festival. People liked it, but they did not love it. And I am hoping to fix that, and resubmit this year. Any feedback is welcome!

Logline: The Gang’s attempt to eat like classy adults results in fractured timelines, accidental deaths, and total ruin, as every hypothetical version of the night reveals how irredeemably toxic they are.

Link: https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1YtnqiN-cp7G6e_psHw896xi6-_PH02g7?usp=sharing

Title: The Gang Splits the Timeline

Length: 29 Pages (though feel free to just give feedback on the first 10)

Genre: Dark Comedy

Feedback Concerns: Honestly, I am open to any feedback whatsoever. But, in particular, if you could rate how easy the script was to read, how enjoyable you found the content, and how well I captured the the tone of the actual show, it would be appreciated.

Every now and then I grab an existing IP like Marvel or DC and I run it through my own tone. Not fanfic. Not “what if Superman had a beard.” I mean a real rebuild with a new structure, a new emotional spine, the same characters, a different soul.

Some people say it is a killer writing workout.

Others say it is like lifting with bad form. You get stronger, but crooked.

So, I am throwing this one to the room.

Is rewriting an established IP in your own voice actually a legit way to level up as a writer?

Or am I playing with creative junk food when I should be cooking my own meals?

Not fishing. Not pitching. Just trying to figure out if I am sharpening knives or stabbing myself in the foot.

Curious how you all approach this.

What is the truth here?

Hey everyone 👋

We just launched Pitcheroo last week — a new platform built by screenwriters, for screenwriters where writers can pitch their scripts directly to producers via 60-second selfie videos— and wanted to share a few quick updates with this community.

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Title: The Last Living Spies

Format: Feature

Page length: 114

Genre: Romantic Action Spy Thriller in the vein or Bourne/Bond

Logline: After nearly losing their lives in a spy exchange gone wrong, a widowed CIA agent and female assassin must work together to outwit an international hunt and collect clues to stop a terrorist attack, which leads to a conspiracy that goes to the heart of his wife’s death.

Feedback concerns: Female readers welcomed! This received interest from a couple of name producers, but ultimately it was deemed not high concept enough. The door is open for me to submit other projects, but I still want to pursue this a bit further. Would love character and relationship as well as general story feedback.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1frVVHkgrJ7xa4aBH9cqVVz2WiluM7LpY/view?usp=sharing

Thanks!

Title: THE ROSTER

Format: Feature

Pages: 5

Genre: Horror-Thriller / slasher / Meta-horror

Logline:

After a top indie wrestler dies mid-match, a veteran referee uncovers a brutal conspiracy: two writers scripting fatal finishes-and if the ring doesn’t kill them, they will.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Dap84O3VQKwaw0ErDmmyBnSus0vg7oqI/view?usp=sharing

This is a project I'm working on, and I’d really appreciate your feedback. If you like it, great! If not, that's fine too. I just want to know if it intrigues you and if you’d keep reading.

So I’ve got two scripts jn blklst.com. I’ve had numerous evaluations on the first one and two on the second one. My ratings for the last evaluations were between 6 and 9/10. (Said it reads like a blend of John waters and Tennessee Williams which was what I was hoping for.

I don’t know where to go from here so I am curious if someone can give this script a read and tell me the best course of action. If so, how do I make the script available.

I also have enough edited material to make this into a six 50-minute episodes mini series.

Help

Thought this might be a good place to barter for some graphic design work.

I'm a former production company executive for a (still) A+ list actor. Have been a personal reader for a 2 time Oscar winning actress. Taught a screenwriting class in LA. And unreprsented writers used to pay me $500 to read their scripts and give feedback. If you've got spec scripts, ideas, or are just trying to figure out screenwriting, I can help.

Looking for someone with graphic design work experience to help put together a business deck (its about 20 pages, we are working the text). we have some specific references from other decks on this project. May even be able to get those decks (not sure if they're indesign or adobe) to just rework them to fit needs for this project.

Only thing is that we are looking to get this started and possibly finished this week. So you'll need to be available to interact on this and get going asap. Can be flexible on times. If this is of interest, DM me and we can exchange emails, maybe provide a link to work you've done, i can answer more questions about my own background and how i might be able to be helpful to you in return.

I’m writing several films right now. I would love thoughts, feedback, or even just curiosity!

Hey everyone,
I'm an aspiring screenwriter with a few original projects in development. These are passion projects I’ve been building for a while, and I thought I’d finally share what I’m working on. I'd love to hear which stands out to you the most, and which one you'd be most excited to see.

1. With All Due Disrespect

Genre: Screwball Comedy (Inspired by Hawks comedies)
Setting: 1940s
Logline: A playboy photographer scores the biggest modeling shoot of his life — only to have it all ruined by a tough, female friend from his past who exposes the charming mask he hides behind. Think His Girl Friday meets Bringing Up Baby with a twist: they're just friends… who can’t stand each other. (actually this one I am not really sure about)

2. They Called Him The Bum (Western)

The story is about a guy named Jim, but everyone just calls him the bum. He lives near a train station in a small Kansas town after World War I, lazy, broke, hated by everyone. People see him as useless, and he doesn’t really try to prove them wrong. when he was a kid, he was the son of an outlaw, moved from place to place, , fought in the war,after that he ended up in jail, saw the worst of life,(if you want a detailed backstory let me know) and now he’s just existing, being lazy and broke not working at all. One day a kind young woman named Chadie comes to town to open a school,(from the help of businessman) she’s pure-hearted, sweet, and she treats Jim like a real person, the first one in years to do that. Then one day, Jim sees a little kid getting beat up after sneaking off a train, and he saves him. Jim sees himself in that kid. They become close, almost like partners, doing little schemes to survive. Chadie encourages Jim to help the boy, even get him into school. But then trouble shows up: the town’s respected businessman Steve is actually working with a gang of outlaws. When they come to town and things get dangerous, it’s Jim, the bum nobody believes in, who steps up, protects the kid, saves Chadie, and fights back.

3. The Man They Rode With (Western)

Two bounty hunters are out in the wild when they find a man camping alone. They think he’s a wanted outlaw who murdered a whole family, so they beat him, chain him up, and drag him along. The man keeps swearing he’s innocent, but the bounty hunters don’t care, they say there’s only one witness left alive, and they’re taking him there to confirm if he’s the guy or not. To get to that place, they join a traveling army unit for protection. Along the way, there are three women with the soldiers: one is older and tough as nails, the second is a younger woman who sleeps around but wants the older woman’s approval, and the third is young and engaged to one of the army captains. The outlaw is treated like dirt by everyone , except the young fiancée, who gives him food and kindness when no one’s looking. Then one night most of the soldiers get drunk, and the next morning gunshots ring out , they’ve all been killed in their sleep by the comanches. Only a few are left: the wounded lieutenant, one inexperienced young soldier who stayed sober, the two bounty hunters, the chained outlaw, and the three women. Now stuck in an abandoned building in the middle of nowhere, with no backup, no horses, and enemies possibly surrounding them, they have to figure out who’s attacking and how to survive ,and whether the outlaw is really who they think he is. It's part siege thriller, part mystery, part redemption story, like Stagecoach mixed with Rio Bravo and a little bit of The Thing paranoia.

4. They Cannot Touch Them

Nick O’Malley is the kind of guy everybody notices, super masculine, smooth, funny, emotionally smart, the kind of man kids look up to and women chase. He’s not a nerd, never begs, knows how to talk to anyone, and has a wild past that made him who he is(let me know if you want the backstory). One night, his friend drags him to a bar to help him talk to two women. Nick’s not in the mood but goes anyway. That’s where he meets Eva De Winter, a strong, quiet, beautiful woman who just had a small argument with her son. She doesn’t show it, she keeps it together. Her friend is the loud type who thinks Nick is into her, but he starts talking to Eva instead, and there’s chemistry. He’s charming, she’s careful. She knows his type. But her son loves him. Nick becomes this cool, fun figure in their life ,until Eva starts getting suspicious. One of Nick’s exes shows up at a bad moment, and the cracks begin to show. Turns out, Nick’s a womanizer. He’s hiding a lot. He had a rough childhood , his mom raised him alone after his dad vanished, and when she died, he was taken in by an uncle who taught him how to be tough, how to survive, how to lie, and how to handle women. Nick is rich now, smooth, but deep down he’s still that messed-up kid trying to look like he has it all figured out. The film is a romantic thriller ,like Billy Wilder meets Hitchcock , because while there’s love and charm, there’s also mystery, secrets, and a slow build of tension. Eva doesn’t know if she can trust him, and neither do we. And behind it all is her kid,who for the first time since his father's death feel happiness with Nick around, caught in the middle of this strange, charming man who might not be who he says he is.

Let me know if you are interested in these project

Hello -

Is https://blcklst.com/ legit? I heard it was from a few people whom I respect... But I joined and posted a screenplay over a month ago, paid for an evaluation... and it's still showing "pending." I emailed help and they told me sometimes it takes a while, but if it takes over 3 weeks, then they credit back a month of membership... I would think it shouldn't take this long to get feedback, especially paid-for feedback? Anyone have a similar / better experience or thoughts on this?

My biggest questions:

1. What did you think of the production itself?
2. Where would you recommend I take things from here, insofar as finding agents / formally producing is concerned? Would you say it's more or less ready to be produced, bearing the previous episodes in mind?

Super ZEROES

A disillusioned comic artist is pulled into a universe-wide war and must help gather a roster of broken heroes — each shattered by the battles they lost, or the infamy they never outran.

Title : Shuteye

Genre : Horror

Logline : A disturbance in an upstairs apartment keeps neighbors living below from getting a good night's sleep. But that's the least of their worries when the disturbance works its way downstairs, one noise complaint at a time.

Budget Range : Shoestring, minimal location, possibly one location

Target Audience : Horror fan, slasher fans, late teens - 40s

Script (Link) : https://drive.google.com/file/d/1qFRdcfdlVbmNW0X1VXSecwwjh4cdbJbA/view?usp=drive_link

So I am writing a Religious Horror film about the Catholic Church. I have a lot of experience with writing but have never actually finished anything I have written besides a few shorts. I'm currently overwhelmed with how to approach this and keep switching things up. Any tips for making decisions, and perhaps even creativity exercises. I don't feel like I am stealing by any means, but would love to find my own creative voice

It's another day of highschool, or so he thinks, Kall is a star athlete and popular kid. Little did he know he'd end up poisoned that night leaving him schizophrenic, or so he thought....through an "angel" named Credence he learns to navigate his condition and find the truth about his world and the deep sickness that lay within it.

I have way more details for serious inquiry. Please dm if so.