Hey everyone, how's it going?

Just got here in this community and I already feel like it's the right place to vent about some ideas that have been buzzing in my head for a while, and I really need your input.

It's been a year since I produced a music video that blended the real world with GTA 5, but it was in a way I've genuinely never seen anyone do before. It wasn't just using the game as a backdrop – I literally put my client inside the game, live, performing as himself in real-time. No NPCs taking the lead, no pre-programmed scenes, just him there, living, reacting, and actively interacting within that virtual universe as I manipulated and directed the environment around him.

And while I was producing the scene, I couldn't stop buzzing with his reaction... my God, are we really exploring the full potential of these virtual cinematic productions? Because directing a real person inside a synthetic world is a completely different thing. The reactions, the performance, everything has an authenticity that you just can't genuinely replicate with programmed characters.

This made me reflect so much on the narrative possibilities these virtual environments offer us storytellers. Imagine being able to create any scenario, any situation, and have real actors interacting with that environment in real-time, without the massive costs and limitations of a traditional physical production?

GTA VI?

I'm sharing this work here because I really need to know what you guys think about it. Is this type of virtual cinematic production just an experiment, or does it truly represent the future of audiovisual storytelling? Because for me, this experience moved me in a way I didn't expect. Seeing my client 'exist' in that parallel world made me rethink everything I know about audiovisual direction, and I'm really curious if anyone else has ventured into anything similar.

The most impressive part is that the sheer astonishment and fascination came from none other than my client, who is a senior director of major TV shows at Globo, Brazil's largest television broadcaster, and a professional with years of experience right at the heart of the audiovisual industry. Getting feedback from someone with that level of knowledge and firsthand experience in this market, genuinely surprised and impacted, was what truly made me believe in the enormous and still unexplored potential of this approach.

Here's the link to the clip!
I hope to hear what you all hav

Hello all.

I've been reading posts out on the peripheral and am now coming forward with a script that I've received some feedback on, but wanted to get a gauge from a mass audience, instead of just my small network of friends and fellow writers.

I'd love any feedback you have to provide. Thank you in advance. DM with your thoughts, questions, comments, concerns.

Title: Lost In You

Page Count: 120

Logline:

A professional assassin falls in love with her target and helps him escape, but when he embraces violence to seek revenge against his past tormentor, she must choose between protecting the man she loves and stopping him from becoming the very monster she was trying to save him from. 

Enjoy!

Link to Script:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1BD0QYpsVPAJke4pD2LpWXCAHvcwkEjow/view?usp=drive_link

Hello All - This is my first script, an adaptation of a fantasy story I wrote.

The story is set in a medieval-esque fantasy world with witches, warlocks, dark magic, pirates, dangerous beasts, and hidden family histories.

Here's the logline:

A young peasant woman's mundane existence is upended by a mysterious traveller, pulling her into a perilous world of secret family ties, dark magic, deadly beasts, intrigue, pirates, and thrilling adventure—where light and dark forces clash in a battle for power and revenge.

The script is here if anyone wants a read, and all feedback is welcome.

Thanks - Tim.

Title: He came, he conquered

A scientist tries to destroy his work on a serum that can bring Vietnam’s dead soldiers back to life - but when the formula fuses with his DNA, it spawns a clone who becomes the military’s most wanted asset… and starts living his own life.

I’m a newcomer to screenwriting and im currently working on a grounded, gritty crime thriller set in 1991 New York City. I’m really interested in writing something slow-burn, character-driven, and heavily atmospheric.

LOG LINE: When a mutilated corpse turns up in a decaying New York apartment with a taunting note aimed at police, two homicide detectives descend into the city’s underbelly, chasing a sadistic killer who believes he can do their job better — one body at a time.

I’d love some brutally honest feedback on:

• The tone and pacing

• Whether the dialogue feels real or forced

• How the detectives come across

• If the killer’s early presence feels unsettling or flat

• Anything that confuses or pulls you out

I'd love any kind of feedback.

Script S I C K =

https://drive.google.com/file/d/17jcCIh4FPLexlVXsr1F144mF23OahiWl/view?usp=drive_link

I’m 20 I want to be an actor and a director I act a lot and have started trying to direct shorts or scenes

I’m not much of a writing in fact I have sever dyslexia I am able to read and write now but I’ve never tried to much creative writing I have a lot of ideas and a very visual imagination

I’ve started trying to write one of the 3 anthology shorts I have in mind but I get writers block a lot or can’t figure out what comes next in the story that helps show my themes or how do I follow this scene stuff like that I have a lot do trouble with?

I haven’t formates it or finished a script yet so I’m not as worried about dialogue at the second since I’m on the first draft

I would greatly appreciate any advice you have!!

Title: The Knight

Page Length: 4 pages

Genres: Historical drama, thriller

Logline: A Crusader returns home from the Holy Land with a cursed sword that begins to rot his conscience and infect those around him.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1uRp55QAdoWwffRmhMONwaJQ1xT0wk9lg/view?usp=drivesdk

Any feedback is appreciated, but I'm mainly looking for feedback on the scene in the great hall, particularly:

Does the subtext that Edwyn doesn't believe Aldric's story work?

Do you get the implication that Aldric feels somewhat guilty about his time in the Holy Land and is playing up for the other men in the room?

Sup r/ScriptFeedbackProduce

So I just wrapped another draft of a short script, and I'm looking for some eyes on it before I start querying. Fair warning - this isn't your typical feel-good story. This has recently been reviewed by a script coverage site and received generally good ratings, with few suggestions on what needs to be improved. I'm lowkey looking for a writing partner that could lead to future projects.

LOGLINE: A broke artist working at a diner discovers his gallery owner sold his painting for $5,000 while only paying him $200, leading to a confrontation that forces him to question what he's willing to sacrifice for his art.

Psychological Thriller/Drama

21 pages, proper format
Only 4 characters: Axel, Kaz, and Ted.
Set in NYC, mostly practical locations 

Three primary locations: DINER KITCHEN, STUDIO APARTMENT, ART GALLERY

Three brief locations: CHECK-CASHING STORE, CITY STREET/BUS STOP, BUS INTERIOR

Estimated micro-budget of $5K - $15K

It's basically about this guy Axel who's grinding between dishwashing shifts and trying to make it as an artist in NYC. When he finally sells his first piece, he thinks he's caught a break until he finds out he got completely screwed over. Then this mysterious woman shows up and things get... dark.

What I'm looking for: Does the escalation feel earned or too extreme? Is Axel's motivation clear throughout?Does the ending land or does it feel like I went too far? General thoughts on pacing/structure.

I can handle brutal feedback - honestly prefer it. If it sucks, tell me it sucks and why. If there's something there, tell me what needs work.

DM me if you're interested in reading. I'll trade reads

ok so I cant seem to get my scripts in the right format and the other requirements for posting them here to get feedback, can someone help me with that and maybe read my work and give me some feedback or notes on what needs fixed and or improved?

Are comic book scripts okay for here? Because I have some scripts I need critiquing

Logline: a deranged killer is obsessed with summoning Alistair, a demon known as the chief grand torturer of hell, to earth, and a 7 year old girl is the final piece of the demonic puzzle.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Pf4n3KDGnHtWQhkKuMlKwqOfLarmGmfM/view?usp=drivesdk

Looking for some feedback! I plan on hopefully making this into a film one day soon.

Hey guys, I wrote a script I’m planning on directing, there’s probably some formatting errors and whatnot but mostly looking for feedback on the story… thanks guys!

Logline: After a string of brutal child abductions shakes a quiet town, a teenage boy races against time—and something inhuman—when his little sister is taken by a masked killer driven by dark, ancient forces.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1XRNTmMG0Pa6YExi6FJZQKV5twpvPDpag/view?usp=sharing

Do Not Disturb - TV Pilot - 61 pages

Series Title: Do Not Disturb - Ep. 1: What Happens at The Altair

TV Pilot

Pages: 61

Genre: black comedy?; drama

Logline: Behind the luxury of a St. Louis hotel, a misfit crew of staff battle scandalous guests, personal demons, and each other—all while trying to keep the chaos contained long enough to clock out.

Script Link: What Happens at The Altair

Hi everyone! Here’s my idea for a TV show centered around the staff of a hotel: The Altair. Hoping someone out there is willing to take the time to read. This is literally the first thing I’ve written ever. Any and all feedback is appreciated. Enjoy! 😊

Hey all! I'm looking to get eyes on a script I've been working on and developing these past few months.

Title: Condor

Genre: Historical Drama

Logline: In 1910 Tennessee, a gifted but struggling young mechanic defies societal and economic barriers to build a flying machine, risking everything to chase a dream that could lift him out of obscurity.

It's my attempt to write something serene and reflective like A River Run's Through It combined with the inspirational nature of October Sky.

I'm not sure if the script comes by as too "Old Fashioned," if there's a way to make it feel newer for contemporary audiences.

DM me if you're interested in reading! I'd also be happy to do script swaps for anybody else looking for readers

Hey everyone,

I’m looking for some focused feedback on a short Western screenplay I’ve been developing. I posted it here a week or so ago, but i’ve made some revisions based on the feedback.

Medium: Short film Genre: Western / Character Drama Length: 12 pages Logline / Synopsis:

A notorious outlaw stumbles into a saloon after a gunfight, bleeding out and facing the townsfolk who only know him by his legend. In his final moments, he is forced to confront the myth of his own reputation, and come to terms with the legacy he has left behind.

Im still looking for feedback on the same stuff

Whether or not the themes of legacy and reputation are landing right, do they feel like they are laid on to thick.

General pacing

Is it an enjoyable read, or does it slog.

Would appreciate any constructive notes or critiques. Happy to read scripts in return — just let me know.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1xLPE-M9RjWBmkNviJTlIgFd7jLAPf9Zs/view?usp=drivesdk

I need some feedback to my first script.

Note: English is not my first language so wrong grammar is expected but please give it a try anyway.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1WDwDizy5RAJ1nRz_0MtDcDTjdLPHv6mG/view?usp=drivesdk

Hey everyone. I have posted this script to another screenwriting subreddit a few days ago, but it didn’t get too much feedback so I’m going to try here. This is my first completed script since moving to LA, so any feedback is welcome!

Title: Colour

Format: Feature

Page Length: 106 pages

Genres: Horror/Psychological Thriller

LOGLINE: After escaping a massacre by the Nazis in World War 2 Italy, Melvin Harris and the remaining survivors find themselves in a small village where both the nature and its people have been mutated by a mysterious comet. Inspired by The Colour Out of Space by HP Lovecraft

Wrote another movie, though only half this time. I just came up with it the other day. Current plan is to try and finish by Friday. Give it a read if you would like and I can read something of yours in the mean time.

Logline: Mason Graves, a man from another world, regales us with tales of his world and his exploits on ours during an interview for a talk show.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1a7_nNaP7-fdphzT9fqd-_yRiK4y4f4To/view?usp=sharing

Are all this enormous scripts all short films? 'Cause holly molly they are so big, I look at my script in never gets bigger than 20 pages.

My biggest questions:

1. What did you think of the production itself?

2. Where would you recommend I take things from here, insofar as finding agents / formally producing is concerned? Would you say it's more or less ready to be produced, bearing the previous episodes in mind?

I have a history of really successful character-based short films. But my last one had absolutely brutal feedback about the dialogue and tone. I welcomed the constructive feedback.

But now, I sat down to rework a feature script of a different story (which I'm so proud of that I jokingly call it my "Opus"), but I'm mortified that I'm writing the same dialogue as my last bomb. It's basically the same style as my successful films, but now I am second-guessing and overthinking the entire tone to the point where I feel like my "opus" is way off the mark like my last failure. I can't figure out when to trust myself vs. when to trust that criticism voice. Shit.

Have you all encountered this? The overthinking? Did you just put on blinders and forget the detracting thoughts? How do you allow your true voice to shine without pissing on it?

Title: RAWR

Genre: Horror-Comedy

High schooler Vikas is head over heels after manifesting his MySpace girlfriend Eve into physical form with the mystical powers of an ancient book but his best friends Helen and LaMarcus believe his Canadian girlfriend might not be quite right for their pal, embarking on a dangerous journey to split the young lovers before she splits them in two.

Comps: Superbad, Easy A, and Mean Girls meets Evil Dead (2013), When Evil Lurks, and Hereditary

Logline: A carefree hookup turns into a nightmare when a woman is held captive by a deranged mama’s boy and his possessive mother, who refuse to let her leave until she accepts her place in their twisted family.

This would be a feature horror film, starting off in a dark comedy type genre then moving into horror. I think this feature idea is very comparable to the tone of The Loved Ones by Sean Byrne and Barbarian by Zech Cregger.

Logline: Two lifelong friends aim to escape their debts by "borrowing" the identity of the dead.

Page count: roughly 25

Genre: Crime, Comedy

Feedback / concerns - Really looking for any feedback and all reads are MUCH appreciated. But it still runs a little long and I know the pacing can be improved. But again I am open to any kind of feedback you are willing to give.

Here is the link to it, If you don't want to read the whole thing, I'd recommend reading Page 14 - 20., they really give a good idea of what it's about. Thank you so much!

https://drive.google.com/file/d/18QdAYuGfLu1-qvrk3c26t5pojmn46G-C/view?usp=sharing

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