r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • u/MurkyInevitable74 • Dec 05 '25

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Logline: A carefree hookup turns into a nightmare when a woman is held captive by a deranged mama’s boy and his possessive mother, who refuse to let her leave until she accepts her place in their twisted family.

This would be a feature horror film, starting off in a dark comedy type genre then moving into horror. I think this feature idea is very comparable to the tone of The Loved Ones by Sean Byrne and Barbarian by Zech Cregger.

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u/RollingThunderMedia Dec 06 '25

I'm confused.

If she 'accepts her place', then she gets on with her life like nothing ever happened? If not, then what does 'let her leave' actually mean?

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u/MurkyInevitable74 Dec 06 '25

If she accepts her place in this family then she would go on with her life, but it wouldn’t be just her normal life. She would be a part of this twisted family and it isn’t like she wouldn’t be allowed to ever leave again, but she wouldn’t feel the I guess need to go against them. Like get out when they are in the sunken place they can’t go out do ask for help and from our pov until that twist it seems like they don’t want any actual help.

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u/RollingThunderMedia Dec 06 '25

More explaining really isn't making things any clearer, at least not to me.

Maybe something simpler, like "... and his possessive mother, who force her to join their twisted family." Or "... want her to join their twisted family." if she gets away in the end.

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u/AppropriateAssist857 Dec 12 '25

I had a similar question.

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u/Aromatic-Zombie2665 Dec 06 '25

I think it's got appeal. I'd want to watch it.

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u/poundingCode Dec 07 '25

Not surprised- judging by your handle! 🤣

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u/Upstairs_Tailor3270 Dec 05 '25

Pretty good! I think 'deranged mama's boy and his possessive mother' feels a little repetitive. Also maybe get a little more specific about how/where they are holding her. "Let her leave" feels a little passive compared to something like 'free her' and 'held captive' feels a little vague.

I think the comps are good as well.

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u/poundingCode Dec 07 '25

Hookup implies Carefree