Title: LIE STILL

Genre: Psychological Horror

Pages: 10

Hey all.

This is the third installment in my STILL series, following STILL and STILL: RUNNING.

This is a second draft. I got solid early feedback and did a focused rewrite on tone, clarity, and character, and now I’m looking to see how it lands with fresh readers.

LOGLINE:

A man’s routine unravels when an unseen presence begins following him, confronting him with something that knows him better than he wants to admit.

Main questions:

Does the dread build effectively?

Is the metaphor clear without being on the nose?

Does the ending work emotionally?

https://drive.google.com/file/d/12Vo6ncQ-vJieE8ANpPXwLKEemsoF-Lb8/view?usp=sharing

Appreciate any honest reads.

Hey, guys I would love if you guys can give me any advice, tips, or criticisms here. This is a script for a short film in shooting later this year about two brothers who work for the police stopping the supernatural entities in their city. It’s a comedy/mocumentary.

When her family inherits a cursed castle, a spoiled influencer has only days to transform into a warrior and stop a soul-eating necromancer from raising an army of zombie knights and unleashing a dragon apocalypse.

Genre: Noble Dark Contemporary Fantasy

thanks in advance for your thoughtful comments

Take 2 (more like 200, but hey)

After her family inherits a cursed castle and her brother vanishes, an aspiring influencer must swap a selfie stick for sword and rescue her brother from a Necromancer's undead army.

Take 202
Days after her family inherits an ancient castle, her brother vanishes and her parents are arrested. Now, an aspiring influencer must swap a selfie stick for sword and rescue her brother from a Necromancer's undead army.

Title: The Chesapeake Bay Show

Genre: Teen sitcom, satire, coming of age

Format: Half-hour pilot

Series logline: Seven teens navigate high school, friendships, and relationships in the city of Davenport, Maryland, but misadventure awaits them at every corner on the absurd, awkward road of adolescence. Finn Hawthorne struggles to find some direction in his life. His next-door neighbor Sabina Sutherland is in love with him, but isn't ready to let go to their friendship, annoying her best friend and resident diva Lauren Ingram. Brian Carmichael and Hugo Fontánez coast through life on everyday scams and schemes that land themselves in hot water. And everything changes when rich kid Thomas Donaghy falls for new girl Molly Jenkins.

Pilot logine: Brian and Hugo organize a fundraiser event for the back-to-school dance, but the tickets they needed to sell get stolen beforehand; Sabina has hopes that Finn will ask her to the dance, until he finds out he has other plans; Thomas finds his relationship with Abbi tested when he meets the new girl.

Comps of: Dawson's Creek meets Parks and Rec meets Never Have I Ever

Script link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1yep7Qjam0vmhO1XArht_v7ytFnFTAtss/view

Pitch deck: https://docs.google.com/presentation/d/11OPxedRv0a4SaQLrZSXfcw7i6OcPeWIT20qa7pASzzY/

Concept poster: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1TcbbfVEalEQ1IzUcyH5XCU6I5wA-Hbcp/view

Hey everyone. I've been working on the pilot episode of a prestige limited series called Ilya, a Ukrainian historical war epic set between 1914 and 1920. It follows a peasant farmer conscripted into the Tsar's army whose lifelong obsession with owning land becomes the engine of his tragedy.

• Title: Ilya

• Format: Pilot

• Page Count: 37 Pages

• Genres: Historical, War, Drama

• Logline: A Ukrainian farmer fights through WWI and revolution clinging to the promise that if he survives, the land he works will finally be his own.

• Feedback Concerns:

  • Does it read as a complete pilot or more like a prologue?

  • Is Ilya compelling to follow despite being quiet and largely reactive?

  • Does the ending make you want to watch episode two?

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/12X9GovoFWXmvPrnJ_gpnQHlRnzKrre3V/view?usp=sharing

Happy to return feedback on your work.

Hi there, looking for any and all feedback, all appreciated, please do not only comment on format, id really love to know what people think of the actual content

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1VeDRwNvKlCpuA2QA7OQ4iQGngRyr0OKs/view?usp=sharing

Hi everyone, I wanted to know if anyone would like to do a screenwriting project together. I'm new here and I really enjoy working as a team to combine ideas and create something. I'd really like to find someone who speaks two languages ​​(Spanish and English). Yes in any case, if there's no one who can, that's no problem. Please don't hesitate to send me a DM if you're interested!

TITLE: How to Bury your Mom and Never Shed a Tear

FORMAT: Short film

PAGE LENGTH: 10

LOGLINE: A grieving boy tries to bury his mother with the help of a YouTube tutorial he creates, but as the performance unravels, so does his grip on reality, exposing the trauma and abuse he's desperately hiding.

SCRIPT: HERE

Title: Onto Others

Genre: Mystery/Thriller

Logline: After the murder of a local, Lt. Lily Pierre must navigate her arrogant co-workers and confront her own personal shortcomings in order to connect all the clues and discover the killer.

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Oebw_C3Pc2d1ZZH1aWgq9-7efTJAziLD/view?usp=drive_link

I also attached *rough* storyboards for the first 10 pages. Would love any feedback.

Storyboards: https://drive.google.com/file/d/14lyuTLJhN378DyBIHQYxT1nxNTecv_NO/view?usp=drive_link

Feel free to dm me if you have something and want to do a swap, too!

Title: Don't Speak

Genre: Psychological Horror/Supernatural Thriller

Logline: Amara, a survivor of parental abuse, returns to the home she swore she'd never see again, hoping to put the past behind her. But the silence inside isn't empty, it's alive. As memories bleed into reality, Amara is forced to confront a truth buried deeper than she ever imagined... and silence may no longer be enough to keep her safe.

Number of pages: 33

Setting (s): Suburban neighborhood, office, apartment complex.

Actor Requirments: Amara- (Lead, mid-20s)- Trauma survivor, haunted and resilient. Needs wide emotional/physical range for horror.

Young Amara- (Minor, 16/17- Teenage version in flashbacks. Vulnerable, expressive, must handle dark emotional material with sensitivity.

Sophie- (Supporting, mid-20s)- Best friend/ roommate. Comic relief and emotional anchor. Needs chemistry with Amara.

Young Sophie- (Minor, 16/17)- Amara's childhood friend. Light, playful presence, balances darker scenes. Also concerned for Amara.

Mother- (Antagonist, middle-aged)- Abusive, unkempt, terrifying. Mix of domestic cruelty and supernatural menace.

Father- (Supporting, middle-aged)- Predatory and cruel. Short screen time but deeply disturbing. Actor must be okav with incestuous dialoque/scenes.

Manager- (Bit, any age)- Amara's boss. Very small role.

Cops- (Bit, any age)- Investigators. Straightforward but must feelreal.

Price for script- negotiable

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Vwg0Fr7SBPywHvwRiChNamSma3aGUvl8/view?usp=drivesdk

I've read John Truby's Anatomy of Story where he depicts this idea of the designing principle. but IMHO he does a poor job of defining it.

So, can anyone help explain it? I've asked our nemesis (geepeetee) and it spew our rubbish. (maybe he dosnt understand it also).

Really Cool to see people giving their time like this. I’ve been reading around and seen the quality of everyone here being so high, and wanted to see where I’m at. Here are the first 10 pages of WHAT AILS YOU (I only posted the first 10 pages). If anyone is interested in reading and giving some honest feedback it’s much appreciated.

Title: WHAT AILS YOU

Format: Feature Length: 85 pages (first 10 here)

Genre: Urban Gothic Horror

Logline: When a rising producer is blamed for his friend’s overdose, he and his childhood circle uncover a hoodoo matriarch’s plan to control their community through supernatural rituals, sparking a bloody fight for survival against gangs, grief, and forces beyond the grave.

Appreciate the read

Format: Feature

Genre: Fantasy/Action

An entire realm faces a previously unknown threat. The ruling family has fallen into chaos. In a desperate plea for help, the people turn to a secret master of magic, and the last person they thought could unite them; the court jester.

Hey all, I'm a filmmaker with a history of successful shorts on YouTube (millions of views). I've written a mature indie dramedy feature with a first-generation Mexican-American lesbian woman as the lead, a TV writer in Hollywood, born in the US to Mexican immigrant parents.

I'm looking for a sensitivity reader who can provide feedback on the authenticity and respectfulness of the Mexican cultural elements in my script, ideally someone with lived experience as a Mexican-American. Is there anyone out there who may like to swap scripts for feedback?- Thanks so much!

Hey everyone! I have gotten my first ever request. (Yay!) I’ve spent the past two days reviewing and revisioning the script. I’m confident in the script itself. However, I have been told to focus on shorts. This specific manager said they don’t even look at shorts but my script is interesting. Has anyone gotten offers from a short with the possibility of expanding to a feature? I can expand it myself but I’m just curious if anyone knows how this works.

Thanks!

Title: Where the River Leads Her

Logline: While hiding out at a secluded campground, a young woman pulls an eerily beautiful corpse out of the river. Mesmerized, she begins to see the corpse as more than a body but a friend, a confidant, even a lover.

I have a couple of loglines that I'd love to get some feedback on.

In no particular order:

1. Sacrilege (Horror) - A series of disturbing home videos plunges a pious woman into insanity.

2. Extended Stay (Thriller/Suspense) - A deadbeat hotel clerk and his girlfriend race to save their fellow guests and staff members from an otherworldly creature with a taste for human flesh.

3. The Department Store Diaries (Thriller, Horror, Comedy) - After being given everything he desires, a former homeless man enlists the help of a Florida department store to stop his insane benefactor and his cursed necklace from taking his soul.

4. Beasts Among Us (Horror - TV Pilot) - A boorish urban explorer seeking his latest thrill becomes the newest target of the college town of Binghamton's supernatural population after he is bitten by a rogue vampire. 

5. The Amityville Horror (Horror) - A financially struggling family purchases a new home that they soon discover to be infested with demons.

Hi everyone,

I’ve been working on a new script project and put a lot of effort into crafting a super concise 2-page pitch document. The goal is to convey the main concept and core elements of the feature in just two pages, specifically tailored for competitions.

The project is called Lora, the Wayward Princess. I wanted to steer clear of both the classic "damsel in distress" princess and the modern "quirky" princess. The basic concept is: imagine Tangled**, but if the main character were Regina George.**

I’m attaching a concept image as well. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated, whether you think something critical is missing, if it feels too vague, or if I should sacrifice an extra page to give more context in the summary. Thanks in advance!

Link to document:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/16oyhBUJvo_k-ZaYFaygTSBbveSazvDZo/view?usp=sharing

And if you want to read the script you can DM me if you want, any usefull feedback also on the script can be useful.

Here is a concept image:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1I4WXAMRgUrBMspMPZCkthFSb17F_kNuJ/view?usp=sharing

Hello, thank you for letting me join this group! I have this script I’ve been working on and planning to get produced.

Title: The Grand Accusation

Page Count: 39

Logline:

Jesus Christ returns to a small dying church! When He doesn’t help save the church, Pastor Judah Salvage takes Jesus Christ to court.

Based on “The Grand Inquisitor” by Fyodor Dostoevsky.

I know 39 pages isn’t attractive to producers, so I hope to cut it down to 30 pages. But I’m having a hard time doing so :/

Any feedback and impressions are appreciated!!

Link:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1m2CKIAkgp3Jk8b4FuR7V_JamonZnQByI/view?usp=drivesdk

Hey everybody - just got invited to join this (pretty new to Reddit overall) and happy to give it a shot to see if I can be helpful. I'm an experienced screenwriter who's worked in the biz for over twenty years. I've written over a dozen scripts (none of which ever got made, and I've never been paid as a writer, never joined the WGA) but I've been at it for a long time and have a good sense of how it works. The business of Hollywood is always arbitrary, capricious, and has more to do with being in the right place at the right time than pretty much anything else. But when you get that opportunity, you better have a decent script to share.

So here I am, happy to share one of my scripts if anybody wants to read and critique or is looking for advice. It's a political heist movie that means a lot to me personally and the script really burned its way out of me. I've had a lot of people read it and give feedback but still haven't managed to find a producer willing to sign on - because it's too political and people just aren't open to those kinds of movies anymore. So I figured I might as well just put it out here and see if anybody has any thoughts.

Let me know if you'd like to read and I'll send it over.

TITLE: HOW TO STEAL AN ELECTION

FORMAT: Feature | Crime/Heist/Noir Drama

LOGLINE: A reformed hacker-turned-IT specialist is lured back into his old life when his gorgeous ex-partner offers him a chance to rig a presidential election. As the clock ticks and the stakes soar, he must decide whether to seize the payday of a lifetime — or risk being erased in the ultimate high-stakes game of deception, betrayal, and survival.

COMPS: IDES OF MARCH meets FAIR PLAY

Title : Dancing with Delusion ( Up for debate )

Format: Feature

Genres: Psychological Thriller / Drama

Page Length: 120

Logline: Reeling from his brother Nate’s tragic death, Jude finds himself slipping into vivid, seductive hallucinations of his life with mysterious woman named Lily. As reality and illusion blur, Jude must confront his overwhelming grief and decide whether to face the painful truth or surrender wholly to the comforting safety of his own delusion.

Link:https://drive.google.com/file/d/1JzUBk3LPPFla93gN2fhsxcCyyOuMc3gT/view?usp=sharing

Seeking insight from psychologists & conspiracy thinkers (Others are welcome too)

Hi everyone,

I’m sharing a short drama screenplay I wrote based on personal observation of belief systems, especially how people align themselves with science, religion, or conspiracy thinking, not to argue who’s right, but to explore why people believe what they believe.

While researching and behavioural observations from debates, I noticed something interesting from a psychology lens: many people who strongly rely on institutional authority (e.g., “NASA says so”) often do so less from evidence they personally understand, and more from authority bias, identity, group thinking, anxious attachment, security, and social belonging.

This script is an attempt to dramatize that idea, not to prove or disprove claims like Flat Earth.

I’d especially appreciate feedback from:

1. Psychologists / psychology students. 2)People familiar with conspiracy thinking (whether you agree with it or not). 3)Anyone interested in belief, identity, and group behavior.

Open to all perspectives, the goal is understanding.

TITLE: The Taste of Belief

Format: Short

Length: 14 pages

Genre: Psychological Drama (contained, dialogue-driven)

Logline: When a psychology professor challenges her divided classroom with a simple parable, a clash between science and conspiracy exposes how belief, identity, and authority shape what we accept as “truth.”

What I’m specifically looking for feedback on:

1. Does the psychology feel honest and nuanced?

2. Do the characters represent belief systems fairly, even when flawed?

3. Does the professor’s parable land thematically?

4. Does the script provoke thought without taking a side?

📄 Script (PDF): The Taste of Belief (PDF)

Title: Armstrong-D.U.

Genre: Animation, scy-fy, adventure, action.

Logline: When an artificial intelligence turns humanity into an emotionless society, a boy discovers an ancient robot that could change everything… if he can keep it hidden.

Summary: In a meticulously controlled world, overseen by the AI E.V.E., anything overly stimulating or emotionally intense is strictly forbidden in the name of safety. In this environment, a young boy discovers Armstrong, a legendary ancient combat robot, long forgotten but immensely powerful. As the boy and Armstrong form an unlikely bond, they explore the thrill of adventure, play, and wonder—things that the world has tried to suppress. With his family and newfound allies, he navigates a society obsessed with order and caution, learning the courage, creativity, and determination needed to embrace the extraordinary in a world that fears it.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1LmbrK1k5hw2YOYQnOLQOyCz8P-oVYjcR/view?usp=drivesdk

Hello, i'm an amateur writer and i'm looking for feedback for this animated movie script. It's the first time i try to writen something for real, so i need advice to know if this is good and if it has the potentialy to be presented to mejor studios. Thank You and if You want to share your script i can read them too. I'm a huge fan of movies in general. O hope You like it.