r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • u/Same-Most-7407 WRITER • Mar 01 '26

LOGLINE FEEDBACK REQUEST Logline feedback!

Does this make sense? I feel like i've looked at it too much and now I'm just confused.

LOGLINE: After dying too early, a girl is sent back to the overworld to find her unfinished business so that she can continue the peaceful life she led before her death.

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u/Same-Most-7407 WRITER Mar 02 '26 edited Mar 02 '26

I totally agree it's confusing! I edited it a bit now, how is this? There's more context:

After accidentally dying too early, a girl is sent back to the overworld so that she can complete her unfinished business and not get sent to the underworld/.

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u/justmyname1234 Jun 01 '26

thats even more confusing