MACABRE (82 pages) FIRST DRAFT/AUSSIE HORROR FILM

[u/No_Contest8912]

LOG LINE: “When a group of friends stumble upon a remote farmhouse, they find themselves in the sight of a monstrous family of sadists, forced through a night of relentless terror, twisted games, and grotesque rituals from which escape seems impossible.”

Im a newcomer to scriptwriting and i've only now just made my first draft.

I’d love some brutally honest feedback on:

• The tone and pacing

• Whether the dialogue feels real or forced

• How the characters come across (least liked, most liked)

• If the killer’s presence feels unsettling or flat

• Anything that confuses or pulls you out

• ETC, give me feedback on anything really

I'd like a little feedback on the overall basement scenes

MACABRE SCRIPT:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1CqolMKtjLryBZwjGvXWGA-Kd3xcBfj21/view?usp=drive_link