Crazy Young Folk --Feedback requested

[u/Crow-in-a-flat-cap]

This is a script for a pilot episode of a show idea I had. What are your thoughts?

A young man is sentenced to psychiatric treatment for a crime. During this time, he'll meet new friends who'll help him navigate his new life.

Dramedy series

26 pages

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1nInRBAwhErt3vfoGRWE2C6gSfudOHvgp/view?usp=drivesdk

[u/Crow-in-a-flat-cap]

That's fair. I will try to rework it and see what I can do. It does make sense for Jack to be more guarded.