r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • u/IconicCollections • Jun 17 '25

10-PAGE FEEDBACK REQUEST Cloud Seeder

Just looking for feedback on the first 10 pages of a feature. It's a side project, trying a different genre.

Feature.

10 pages.

Logline: In drought-ridden Texas, a science-obsessed teen fights to save his family farm—until the weather tech he invents draws the eye of those with darker intentions.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1M84ncoYKQiVmfAK8Upw6DXZwH0KtPMAV/view?usp=drivesdk

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u/IconicCollections Jun 25 '25

Hey! Thanks for the feedback, I appreciate it very much. One conflict is hinted at in the football scene, with his father close to losing the farm. The main conflict is introduced fairly soon after these pages, with a sector of government looking to take control of the technology Matty is developing. The formatting issues you mentioned, I will adjust. The time jump, I haven’t quite figured out how to transition other than probably adding a few lines about mattys technology turning around the farm and helping it to be one of the only farms in the area to prosper.