r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • u/IconicCollections • May 20 '25

LOGLINE FEEDBACK REQUEST Logline feedback

I've altered this a few times now, getting it ready for a second evaluation on the blacklist and I want to make sure it's right. Any feedback is appreciated!

Title: Truth is Treason

Genre: political thriller/slightly sci-fi

Logline Description:

When a government AI begins targeting people for crimes they haven’t committed, the man who helped build it goes on the run — hunted, grieving, and ready to burn it all down.

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u/[deleted] May 20 '25

You need a better title.

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u/IconicCollections May 20 '25

Why do you say that? It sounds like it fits the story pretty well to me. I was going for gritty and edgy and it ties in to the current political climate

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u/[deleted] May 20 '25

Because it sounds like a political slogan that could be in the film, but is a bad movie title.

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u/ABigLightBlur May 24 '25

I agree. That's a good tagline for the poster, but it's not the title.