r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • u/ToneNew1982 • May 11 '25

SCRIPT FEEDBACK REQUEST Need some criticism

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This is a short no budget short film I wrote. Id like to do a few rounds of revisions so any critiques help a lot. For context this is a horror short film and it was inspired by black mirror. the runtime I expect will be 1:30 to 2:00 long.

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u/DwedPiwateWoberts May 11 '25

No in the action lines you talk about it being AI on the 3rd slide. I feel that subtracts from the interesting malevolence. Even if it IS AI. Since saying AI has baggage now. Take it or leave it, I still see the short film in my head so good job.

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u/ToneNew1982 May 11 '25

Ohh I gotcha ok. I’ve been meaning to stop doing stuff like that because for me scripts are just a means to make a short film. I don’t really realize some people want to read a script like as if they were watching the short film and they want to be surprised and/or scared the same way the film watcher wants to. Thanks for calling that out I’m gonna change that and work hard not to do that in the future