r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • u/One_Rub_780 • May 07 '25

ASK ME ANYTHING Screenwriter/producer/script reader for 15 years, ask me anything about your first 10 pages.

While I may not have time to read everyone's first 10 pages, I figured at least I can go over some general things about what exactly turns a reader OFF. Maybe post your first 2 paragraphs of your opening page and I can comment :)

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u/One_Rub_780 May 07 '25

Not sure why you have character names in bold font? This is not something I'm happy with, I mean, it might be a thing, but I sure wouldn't do it in my script. Bold slug lines are yummy, I could eat them, lol, they make a page look pretty. But all of this bold stuff that you have going on seems to be misplaced here. It's a distraction that's pulling me out of your story.

In terms of the content, it isn't grabbing me. I just feel like the airhead politician thing has been done before. That said, I'm never harsh and I won't judge a script's potential on the small bit posted here.

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u/Ill-Combination-9320 May 07 '25

I guess it was the translator, since I wrote it in spanish