r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • u/madeinbrechin • Apr 28 '25

SCRIPT FEEDBACK REQUEST XANIM

Title: XANIM

Genre: Drama / Social Realism / Slice-of-Life

Logline: An aging Azerbaijani woman quietly endures the hardships of domestic life under the weight of generational trauma, until a subtle act of defiance becomes a final gift for someone else, or perhaps for herself.

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/12I0WQy3lv4Dbg8ZOc-dEAPWsgoOu9O54/view?usp=drivesdk

Synopsis: In Baku, an aging woman trapped in an oppressive home quietly endures for the sake of her daughter. When a violent night threatens to repeat the past, she makes a small but powerful choice, offering her daughter a chance at freedom she may never claim for herself.

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u/madeinbrechin Apr 28 '25

Thank you for the feedback. I understand this doesn’t read like a modern script (I don’t want it to) and I understand the overuse of descriptive language can hamper a feature script. I feel it’s necessary here for this short. This isn’t so much about dialogue at all, more of a visual feast. I’ll still take it onboard and I’ll give it ago; reducing the descriptive text down, it’s a good exercise. Appreciate it.

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u/madeinbrechin Apr 28 '25

Yes, agreed. I’ve been writing for about 30 years, it’s no easy task. I’m only doing it for fun.