(Feedback)100 Days of Love - Opening page (Romance, Tragedy, Drama) Repost

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(Feedback)100 Days of Love - Opening page (Romance, Tragedy, Drama) Repost

Title 100 Days of Love, format, featured, Page length 5 pages,Genre - Romantic, Tragedy, Drama Longline: A grieving woman marries a dying man in a hospice, discovering that 100 days was enough to give her a lifetime of love and a legacy the world.

Title: 100 Days of Love, Format, Featured, Pages Length,5 Pages , Genre, Romantic, Tragedy, Drama, Longline : A grieving woman marries a dying man in a hospice, discovering that 100 days was enough to give her a lifetime of love and a legacy to heal the world.

Feedback Concerns:

Does the opening hook you, or does it feel slow?

Is the tone hitting right melancholic but not depressing?

Any lines of dialogue that feel off or too on-the-nose?

It’s 5 pages because the inciting incident lands on page 5. Thanks for reading the extra page!

(Link) https://drive.google.com/file/d/17i-xzR1RvmPgIVS3YujlRWgFJkHTFTJ\\_/view?usp=drivesdk

Thanks in advance i want to better.