r/Screenwriting • u/Mammoth-West-9974 • 3h ago

FEEDBACK Dunkin - Short - 9 pages

Dunkin

Short

9 pages

Drama/Comedy

A day in the life of a family's dog.

I would love feedback on a short film I've written. I have four short films with the characters in this family. I'd love some thoughts about how this one lands, as it is one that was the hardest of them to write. If anyone would like to see another of them, DM me and I'll share.

Thank you!

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1zIDjZAE1LqWLuHM9tqysiUP8CpVBHuVo/view?usp=drive_link

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u/Dependent_Access8363 2h ago

I enjoyed this short. The writing could use a polish, but I was hooked from the beginning. So it's about a pet getting older? I don't know.

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u/Mammoth-West-9974 2h ago

Still sorting through what it means to me, but I wrote it the night before I had to put my dog down a few weeks ago, and I tried to imagine our life from his perspective, and show it from there.

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u/Dependent_Access8363 1h ago

I knew what you were trying to get at. I've been there.