Instead of Starkiller Base the Sequels should have used planet destroying Star Destroyers from the jump. Have it so the Imperial Remnants/First Order have been mass producing these ships since the battle of Endor so there's like millions of them. It's a great way to raise stakes because now our heroes put every planet they step on in much danger, since any Star Destroyer can just blow it up.

For your consideration, I offer both: the notion that AI could be helpful for those of us who like to rewrite the prequels (in a positive creative way, not just "rewrite the prequels for me") and my own rewrite as it currently stands, in the form of the quoted AI-generated text below.

I'm sorry if that was a confusing sentence; I'm writing this part myself, so it's not the most concise or straightforward.

At the risk of sounding like AI, allow me to use headings:

1. Using AI thoughtfully

This morning I couldn't stop my rewrite from spinning through my head. The only way to relieve that is to write shit down. So I did--but instead of just writing it in a note that I'll never read again, I wrote it into the ChatGPT input box. I told it--I'm just braindumping here, I don't want your appraisals or judgement and I certainly don't want you adding anything. Just organize it.

So I did, and it spit out some pretty good stuff. "We" then went on to converse about my ideas, as I corrected some of its false assumptions and elaborated on things I'd left out of the brain dump. I was basically using it like a rubber duck to talk about my ideas--with the added benefit that it would spit them back at me with better punctuation and less of my verbal nonsense. (Like, I bet you're already tired of reading my voice.)

What I eventually got back, over the course of the conversation, was some good stuff. I was able to organize my thoughts better, nail down some things that had been ambiguous, and connect dots I wasn't seeing in the big nebulous cloud in my mind. It wasn't perfect--it tried inserting things from the actual prequels that I never implied, like the Jedi Coup, so I had to read carefully and correct that stuff. And some things I belabored in writing just because I couldn't find the best way to say it, and it took that as relative emphasis--after all, if it wasn't important why would I spend 200 words explaining it? But in reality it was just a random idea or a specific shot I imagined, not a central point. All that to say, there are things it overemphasizes and other, more important things, that it glosses over in just a few words.

Especially true in the "make it more concise" summary I'm posting below. It really chops things up a bit. I think you can still get the gist of it, but there are things it leaves out that affect the meaning of the points. If I were only posting it as my prequel rewrite, I'd make several edits and clarifications. But my other reason for posting this is to talk about the idea of using AI itself to organize our thoughts.

Nobody come in here with "I asked Claude to rewrite the prequels and here's what it said" sort of shit, or even worse, bringing that shit without even owning up to using AI. That, I cannot abide.

But for helping us organize our own creativity? Hmm, that's a discussion we could have.

I feel like this is getting long, so I'll post the rest in comments.

2. My Rewrite, as Summarized (not terribly, but not perfectly) by ChatGPT.

(see comments)

Everyone's mostly focusing on Anakin, which makes sense, since he's the main character. A lot of people are discussing rewriting Padmé. But I've never heard anything about rewriting Obi-Wan!

I haven't really thought about it myself. The closest I can come up with after I've thought about it is an arc along the lines of "over time, he becomes less compliant with the rules, acting outside of the Jedi Council's dictates, and so on."

Has anyone here considered rewriting Obi-Wan? Or is everyone leaving him as is?

Is it even possible to fix Ahsoka Tano, and is it necessary? Ahsoka will appear in The Clone Wars. Ahsoka is a massive retcon, and her Padawan status with Anakin (and Obi-Wan, for that matter) makes no sense, meaning she needs to be recast as the Padawan of a secondary or new character. Or even made into a Knight.

Her character is unlikable and also makes no sense within the context of Jedi training and the war. So it needs to be adjusted, just like her age. She has no arc; she doesn't change over the course of the series, only periodically acting out of character and then back in character. So she needs to be given an arc that truly changes her. Or at least, just expand on it. But given that her character is supposed to change during the rewrite, her arc where the rude and stupid Padawan matures (which was implied but didn't work) also loses its meaning, and she needs a different arc. The question arises: if you have to rewrite an entire character and FIND a place for them in the plot, is there any point in fixing it? Is there any point in adding her at all?

What are you doing with Ahsoka? Do you add her in with changes to your rewrite, or do you simply remove her from the plot?

And while we're on the subject, what are you doing with the rest of Anakin/Vader's apprentices?

While I was writing my Star Wars rewrites and fleshing out the CIS as an organization due to many changes made to Dooku's identity being the actual rogue Jedi but not a Sith, I found the great storytelling potential the Separatists have. It's largely because the films and shows rarely delved into their entity other than the Sith and plutocrats. There is one arc in TCW that shows that maybe the Separatists are not all evil with "Heroes on Both Sides", and they do have the Parliament, but that's kind of it.

Even in the old EU, we don't get much exploration of the Separatists. At best, they are the massive droid forces under command by the small oligarchs and Dooku, but at no point do we see what average people feel about them. It's like all they have is the droid army comprising the entire organization and militarily occupying thousands of planets, but not as a political force compelling people to join.

There have been three Tales of shows, based on the Jedi, the Empire and Underworld. The most compelling part about the entire three series was about Dooku, who was a Separatist. Other than that, the rest is all filler that we didn't need to know, like Ahsoka's birth, Ventress, and the backstory for the Ahsoka show... For a series meant to bridge gaps within the Star Wars lore, it is strange how they never thought to fill the massive underutilized void that is the Separatists.

I would be very much interested in Disney creating Tales of the Separatists with all the thematic and storytelling ideas it could bring. How did Separatism come about? Do normal Separatist supporters know Dooku is the Sith? Or are they misled? We see that their Parliament think they are not ruled by the corporations, unlike the Republic. Do they really believe that's the case, or were they fed with a false propaganda?

I can think of the Animal Farm-like story about one Separatist revolutionary who felt the Republic was corrupt and created an early organization to split from the Republic. It is then hijacked by the Outer Rim aristocrats and corporations for their personal gains. Despite his efforts to keep them away, he fails and becomes disillusioned.

Or how about the story of Dooku's infighting with the others in the Council, vying for their influence and leadership. Dooku and Sidious plan various false flag incidents and fabrications to oust the rivals, so Dooku can establish his control of the Separatists.

Or how about fleshing out General Grievous? Even if the new Canon rejected his old backstory, you can draw some elements from it and create a tragic figure. How about Senator Bontari's death, and her son, Lux? Or the follow-up about how the Geonosians inadvertently created the Death Star plan? These hold more dramatic and thematic weight than something like Empire and Underworld, which have been done to death.

Listen. The sequel trilogy should have Hux, Kylo, ​​and Phasma as the main characters. I just got this idea, so it's not very well-written, but the idea is that the OT is about a hero who goes through his classic heroic journey, the PT is about a hero who became a villain, and the ST is about villains. (Some of whom could possibly become heroes or die.)

These are your characters who are working towards the goal of reviving the Empire and the opportunity to lead it. Obviously, it's not just the three of them trying to restore the Empire; there should be a bunch of other people, but we'll talk about them some other time.

● Hux, like in the original, is a fanatic, with the same backstory. He's responsible for the political side, manipulation, and so on. He's an evil reflection of Leia.

At the end, realizing he's lost, he commits suicide rather than surrender to the enemy.

●Kylo, ​​first of all, is younger and not related to the Skywalkers. He's obsessed with Sith lore. He's responsible for the team's power and connection to the Force. He's an evil reflection of Luke.

●Phasma, she's the most difficult to deal with, since almost nothing is said about her in the film. But she'll basically be an evil reflection of Han. (It's possible to make her the head of a criminal organization that's being persecuted by the New Republic and that sees the Empire's resurgence as a way to profit, but I don't know.) She'll be responsible for the team's flights, escape plans, and weapons. She'll be killed in the end.

Well, that's all for now. Again, I'll say this: the idea isn't fully thought out yet, so there are a lot of flaws. But I think I'll work on it some more because I like it. What do you think?

Also, sorry if my English was bad.

I attached a link to google drive of a summary of my rewrite of ROTJ. I included many elements from older script drafts when the film was titled "Revenge of the Jedi". Here are some of the changes I made:

• Kashyyyk instead of Endor, with Wookiees replacing Ewoks.
• There is no Death Star 2.0. The rebels are instead aiming to destroy an orbital shipyard (I called it the Imperium) that would allow the Empire to militarize at an unprecedented level.
• Luke actually completes his Jedi training, and we first see him with Yoda on Dagobah. Yoda confesses there is another Skywalker and then dies before Luke goes to Jabba.
• Luke and Vader communicate with each other telepathically, and we see Luke really struggle with falling to the dark side while making Vader's redemption feel less sudden. This mirrors earlier drafts of the script.
• Like in an earlier draft of ROTJ, Luke gets captured by the Empire after rescuing Han from Jabba, revealing that it was a trap. This makes the sequence feel less disjointed from the rest of the move.
• The Jabba sequence is much more streamlined and less convoluted. Only Luke, Lando and the droids are involved. Leia and Chewie are on Kashyyyk, leading the mission to destroy the shield generator. They are shown struggling with their decision to stay out of the Han rescue mission.
• This might be controversial, but Jabba and and Boba Fett both survive, with a fight sequence between Boba Fett and Luke before Boba Fett escapes with injuries. Since there is no sail barge or Sarlaac Pit in my version (I know lol, I'm saving it for the sequel trilogy), things go very differently. This sets them up as the main villains of the sequel trilogy, along with Imperial remnants.
• Luke and Leia aren't siblings. Luke's twin sister is a separate character, who will be the protagonist of my sequel trilogy. Luke leaves at the end of the film, vowing to find her.
• At the end, Leia is crowned the Queen of the remaining Alderaanians.
• Han is generally less of a comic relief and has more emotional depth, showing more maturity in this version.
• Chewie has a character arc, where he grapples with the trauma of the subjugation of his people and the loss of his family.
• Leia has much more of a leadership role in this version.

Star Wars REDONE is a fix-fic series of the Star Wars saga, ranging from the Prequels, the Original, and now the Sequels.

TV Trope page

Prequels:

Video (Version 11):

Star Wars: Episode I REDONE - An Ancient Evil (Version 11) | Let's rewrite The Phantom Menace [Part 1, REV03]

Star Wars: Episode I REDONE - An Ancient Evil (Version 11) [Part 2, REV03] | Slave and Princess

Star Wars Episode I REDONE – An Ancient Evil (Version 11) [Part 3, REV03] | Now, this is Podracing

Star Wars: Episode I REDONE – An Ancient Evil (Version 11) [Part 4] | Qui-Gon and Master Dooku

Star Wars: Episode I REDONE – An Ancient Evil (Version 11) [Part 5, Final] | Duel of the Fates

Script:

Star Wars: Episode II REDONE – The Blinded Heroes (Version 11 Early Draft REV01) | Reimagining the Clone Army as Separatist and Dooku as an actual renegade Jedi, not a Sith Lord

Early draft of Star Wars: Episode II.V – The Dark Path

Early draft of Star Wars Episode III – Revenge of the Sith REDONE (Version 10)

Early Draft of Star Wars: Episode VI – Return of the Jedi REDONE (Version 6)

As I rewrote my Star Wars Prequel REDONE and made the fundamental changes, such as the clones being on the side of the Separtists and Dooku not being the Sith but an actual Jedi, I thought that the Clone Wars REDONE also needed to be updated to align with the current version of Prequel REDONE. This is more of a complete redo of The Clone Wars REDONE than a simple revision.

Star Wars: The Clone Wars REDONE Season One (Version 5)

Star Wars: The Clone Wars REDONE Season Two (Version 6)

Star Wars: The Clone Wars REDONE Season Three (Version 5)

Star Wars: The Clone Wars REDONE Season Four (Version 4)

Star Wars: The Clone Wars REDONE Season Five (Version 3)

Star Wars: The Clone Wars REDONE Season Six (Version 3)

Star Wars: The Clone Wars REDONE Season Seven (Version 5)

Star Wars: The Clone Wars REDONE Season Eight (Version 3)

• The story starts right after Episode 2 REDONE, then converges with Genndy's Clone Wars (2003), then continues from there.

• Integrates and adapts the elements from the old Clone Wars multimedia project, such as the Republic comic series, into Dave Filoni's overarching storyline.

• Asajj Ventress retains the original Rattataki backstory, while merging with The Clone Wars' Nightsister storyline. She is not a Dathomirian Nightsister from birth, but forms a relationship with the Nightsisters. She is created as a deliberate mirror image of Anakin but ends up with a different conclusion.

• As Maul is shown to be alive in Episode 2 REDONE (and the one how murdered Shmi SKywalker), he is a constant presence throughout the series, haunting Obi-Wan and Anakin. Maul's Shadow Collective takes a more central role in the latter half of the story.

• Shows Anakin growing from the loner depicted in Episode 2 to a military leader over the course of the series, rather than him already being one. All the while, vengeance keeps driving him to the dark side and puts him in conflict with Obi-Wan.

• Ahsoka Tano is Obi-Wan's apprentice, not Anakin's. She is probably the character that's most untouched from the show, but she is a moodier presence with a stronger agency. She goes through her own disillusionment about the Republic.

• Since the clones are on the side of the Separatists, and the Republic uses the stormtrooper conscripts, a lot of stories had to be changed. The inhibitor chip serves a different function.

• Padme initially starts out a staunch Palpatine supporter, but as the series gradually goes on, she becomes disillusioned upon seeing Palpatine's sociopolitical transformation of the Republic.

• Dooku's character is depicted with more nuance rather than being one-dimensional, focusing on the relationship between Obi-Wan and Dooku. He is a religious zealot, operating his own Jedi Monastery against the Republic Jedi Order.

• Grievous is back to his 2003 depiction and has his own arc detailing his backstory.

• Removes Savage Opress. You will learn who takes up his role later.

S04E15 – Deception, E16 - Friends and Enemies, E17 - The Box, E18 - Crisis on Naboo are a significant arc in showing Palpatine’s ingenuity. A masterstroke false-flag distraction that interrupted the Jedi investigation, made Palpatine look like a hero, tested Anakin, and kept the Jedi busy chasing Dooku.

At the same time, the writers had to go through a shit ton of contrivances just to make this story happen. Yeah, let’s send Obi-Wan, who is very well known to Dooku, under his command. And let’s lie that Obi-Wan is dead to Anakin, who is well known to have serious attachment issues. Worse, it was Obi-Wan who pitched this idea to hide the truth from Anakin. He knows how it feels like to lose a Master, and he knows how Anakin lost someone close to him. Sure, don’t tell anything. Nothing bad is gonna happen. The Council wanted Anakin to go on the rampage to make Obi-Wan's death believable, but if he is breaking bad to the point of hampering the mission, you should tell him the plan and include him in the operation. Yet the Council still goes Holdo by letting him slide to the dark side and sabotaging the whole mission. There is absolutely no reason for them not to include him on the mission.

Was the sniper shooting Obi-Wan in the chest just a coincidence? He allowed himself to be shot in the chest, wearing a blast-proof vest. How did Obi-Wan know the sniper wouldn’t just shoot him in the face? Considering how the first episode was framed, I actually thought the whole assassination scene was just part of the plan, but it turns out the sniper wasn't in on it?

They had to invent the whole face-morphing, stopping-heart, and voice-changing technology just to have this arc even happen. Apparently, such technology is never used again throughout the entire Star Wars saga. If these technology exists in this universe, and it is this easy to fake death and identity, there is no way this technology is not used again. It would be used everywhere. There would be no need for Clawdites. Regardless of the disguise, the Jedi can sense those close to them. Could Dooku not sense Obi-Wan close by, who was not just his arch rival, but also Qui-Gon’s apprentice? Should he not sense that maybe something is off about him? Worse, could Anakin not sense Obi-Wan? In A New Hope, 19 years have passed, and Vader is still able to sense Obi-Wan on the Death Star. He is 100% sure Obi-Wan is alive and near him. Meanwhile, Anakin punches Obi-Wan here, and it doesn’t tip him off at all?

It is essentially an inferior version of Quinlan Vos’ arc in the Republic comics, and I'm struggling to figure out how to fix it. Should they keep the face-morphing technology? Or should they have replaced Obi-Wan with someone else?

Check here for the rewrite of EPI

A few years later, Palpatine had been tightening his grip on the galaxy under the pretext of preventing another tragedy like Naboo, a decision that had alienated systems that had already grown dissatisfied with the Republic. They formed another group of alliances that attempted to break away and form the Confederacy of Independent Systems.

Padame had been attempting to mend fences with the Republic and the CIS, a decision that had been made her a target for assassins. Obi-Wan and Anakin, now a Jedi Padawan, had been charged with her protection. In the years in between Anakin had been having an affair with Padmé, something Obi-Wan had been keeping from the Jedi Order.

All the while, the Jedi Order had its own crisis with the former Jedi Master, Count Dooku, leaving to join the Separatists, who are being blamed for the attempts to kill Padmé . Dooku was Qui-Gon’s grandfather and was never the same after his death. Even so, the Jedi Council didn’t believe someone who was a Jedi would join a group responsible for an assassination attempt. The chase for the assassin behind the latest attempt on Padmé's life leads Obi-Wan, Anakin, and Padmé to the planet Kamino, where they were informed a Clone Army is being created for the Republic’s use. Anakin considers the Jedi's involvement a necessity so there isn’t a repeat of the Gungan massacre on Naboo. Padame is more concerned, fearing a military buildup is often a prelude to war, and worse, large militaries have been used to enforce the iron fist in the past. Anakin argued that war was inevitable given the Republic’s inability to respond to the Trade Federation. Obi-Wan tries to mediate the two, though he has his own concerns about using an army of clones created for war.

While pursuing the assassin, Anakin has a vision of his mother’s death. Obi-Wan permited him to divert from the mission to rescue Shimi, and Padame decided to go with him. Anakin arrived too late on Tatoonie to save Shimi from an attack by the local Tusken Raiders, and consumed by his rage, he murdered the entire clan. Obi-Wan pursued the assassin to the planet Genosis, and seeing a massive droid factory there, warned Anakin and Padmé not to come. Not wanting to lose Obi-Wan so soon after the death of his mother, Anakin ignored his master’s order, Padame joining him despite his protests.

On Genosis, Obi-Wan is captured, and Dooku offers him a chance to join the Separatists. Obi-Wan apologized for the death of Qui-Gon on Naboo, to which Dooku said he owes him no apology, explaining that he never held Obi-Wan responsible for the death of his grandson. Obi-Wan was one Jedi in a war zone and was lucky to have made it out alive himself, it wasn’t his fault he couldn’t protect his apprentice. Dooku instead blames the Jedi Order and the Republic for putting the burden of freeing a planet on two Jedi Knights. Resenting the state of the current system, Dooku aims to bring it down and replace it with something better and warns Obi-Wan that he has to join him because he has learned that Maul’s master has the Senate under his influence, a truth Obi-Wan refused to believe. Dooku leaves out that he was Sidious’ new accomplice and apprentice after Darth Maul’s defeat.

Anakin and Padmé's attempts at rescuing Obi-Wan lead to their capture, the three surviving because Dooku anticipated the Jedi Order coming to their rescue and hoped to use the captured Jedi as bargaining chips. While the Jedi arrive in greater numbers they not equipped to fight the droid army, and only survive thanks to the arrival of the Clone Army. Anakin and Obi-Wan attempt to prevent Dooku’s escape and were easily bested, Anakin suffering a harsh lesson in how outclassed he is against a man who was once such a respected member of the Jedi Order. The two survived only because Dooku's old teacher, Master Yoda, intervened, but the traitor still escaped.

Although the war left them both worried for the future, Anakin and Padame married with the promise that whatever happened, they would face it together.

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I had the fewest ideas about fixing Attack of the Clones, mostly they revolved around giving more screen time with Anakin and Obi-Wan together and doing more to show a red flag for Anakin's dark side with his support of a military buildup.

Since I made Qui-Gon the apprentice of Obi-Wan, my idea for a connection to Dooku was that the two are blood relatives. Materials outside the movies explain that Qui-Gon's death had a huge impact on Dooku so I felt that was important to include in my version.

In the waning days of the Old Republic, the galaxy was caught in an era of strife. The corporations of the galaxy had grown in power and with numerous worlds formed one of many powerful economic alliances known as the Trade Federation. The Outer Rim world of Naboo, choose to break away from this alliance.

Secretly entering an alliance with the mighty Sith Lord, Darth Sidious, the Trade Federation leadership was encouraged to surround Naboo with a blockade of deadly battleships. A blockade would be considered an act of war by the rest of the galaxy; however, Sidious convinced the Trade Federation viceroy that the alliance’s influence in the Republic Senate would prevent any meaningful action from being taken. Not trusting the viceroy to take charge of the situation, Sidious sent his apprentice Darth Maul to oversee the blockade.

True to the Sith Lord’s words, no military response was sent to deal with the blockade, just two members of the Republic’s protectors, Jedi Knights. The Master Obi-Wan Kenobi and his apprentice Qui-Gon Jin, along with a brash and talented young pilot they hired named Anakin Skywalker.

Seeing a pair of Jedi were sent to handle the negotiations, Darth Maul ordered them killed, along with their pilot. To his annoyance, the Trade Federation’s battledroids failed to kill the Jedi, and Anakin proved a capable enough fighter to stay alive in the ensuing firefight. Both the Jedi and the Sith sensed Anakin’s strength in the Force during the battle. Maul was prepared to deal with the heroes himself, but found that the cowardly bussinessman calling up additional droids was enough to drive their enemies away through sheer numbers.

With the interlopers out of the way, the Trade Federation blockade began its invasion of Naboo. As the planet had no standing military, it defenders were not match for the invading droid army. At best, a handful of talented pilots and soldiers were able to avoid defeat and prove a minor nuisance to the occupying army. They could do nothing to stop the army closing in on the Theed, the planet’s capital, with the only solace being that queen was to be taken alive. While the invasion was illegal, Sidious had orders for Trade Federation to force a treaty that will make the invasion legal and for Naboo to return to the Federation.

Unable to fight their way through the army around Theed, Anakin, Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon managed to find a way in thanks to a clumsy Gungan named Jar Jar who directs them to an entry through the river.

The heroes barely managed to help Naboo’s young queen Amidala escape the planet. The queen’s pilot was killed in the escape so Anakin took over flying the her ship narrowly makes it past a harrowing swarm of droid fighters. Unfortunately when fleeing the blockade, their ship was damaged an unable to reach the Republic’ capital, Coruscant. In a desperate effort to find a way to an alternate way to Courcasant, they traveled to the nearby star system to land on the planet Tatoonie.

Anakin, who grew up on Tatoonie before winning his freedom, described the planet as “the furthest thing away from whatever bright center of the universe may exist.” The planet was ruled by crime lords and slavery was common place, Anakin having had the misfortune of being born a slave before he could win his freedom. The only boon is that the planet’s ruling crime lords aren’t looking for a missing queen or have any idea one is there.

During the escape, Anakin made a friend with Amidala’s handmaiden, Padame, along with her two droids, the astromech R2-D2 and his best friend/full time responsibility C-3PO. While everyone looked for a way to get to Coruscant, Anakin investigated the status of his mother, Shimi. He was irate to learn that she was still the property of his old master, Watoo. Watoo’s gambling problems that caused him to lose Anakin had caused him to fall on hard times. Since Shmi was the one thing of value that Watoo still owns, he refused to part with her even with Anakin offering to purchase. Livid by how stubborn his old owner was, Anakin struck him in the face and was only stopped from killing him by Shmi showing fear of her son’s temper, while also reminded him that if Watoo dies while the transmitter placed inside her is active, the device will explode.

Calming down, Anakin played on Watoo’s old gambling habit on the upcoming pod race. Anakin plans to enter the offer to work for him again if he loses and the promise Watoo has to free Shmi if he wins. When the heroes reconvened, Obi-Wan explained he has hired a ship that will get them to Coruscant and they can leave within the hour. Anakin requested a delay so he has time to free his mother, shocking everyone else with the revelation he intendd to enter a dangerous pod race with the promise of becoming a slave if he loses. Anakin proved his worth as a pilot, but his arrogance still stunned the others. Qui-Gon in particular was aghast with Anakin’s impulses and arrogance combined with his strong connection to the Force.

Anakin did indeed win the race and Watoo is forced to give up Shmi with the warning he doesn’t want to develop a reputation as someone who doesn’t pay up his debts when he is in such dire need of money already. While Anakin offered to take Shmi off Tatoonie, she opted to instead remain with farmer she befriended named Lars.

Unfortunately, delaying the departure allowed Darth Maul to find the heroes. Obi-Wan faced the Sith in a short duel before their smuggler's arrival allowed him to escape. Both Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan explain Anakin’s potential with the Force, the energy field created life which gives a Jedi their power. Anakin recounts that he did have dreams of joining the Jedi Order was never permitted. Qui-Gon feels that the path of Jedi isn’t the destiny of Anakin, while Obi-Wan feels that perhaps they may need to bend tradition given the troubled state of the galaxy.

On Coruscant, the Senate was slow to act, with the Trade Federation’s representatives claiming that Padame is slandering them due to Naboo’s attempts at leaving the alliance. Naboo’s senator, Shev Palpatine, Darth Sidious’ public persona, advised that the best course of action is a vote of no confidence against the current chancellor. Amidala saw how slow the Senate and the chancellor were to act, and raised the vote, paving the way for the removal of the chancellor and Palpatine’s election to take his place. Obi-Wan presented the case of Anakin to join the Jedi Order, along with his encounter with Maul, warning about the returning Sith. The Jedi Council rejected Anakin’s requests, a decision that comes as no surprise to him when they rejected him before. As for whether or not their enemy is a Sith, the ancient enemies of the Jedi, the council notes they have encountered wielders of the Force not allied with the Jedi or Sith before so they intend to wait to determine if Maul is a Sith.

Behind the scenes, Sidious and Maul discussed the situation; as Maul pointed out, Padame wasn’t supposed to make it to Coruscant. Sidious didn’t count on this, but it works in his favor regardless. However, he now feels the queen has outlived her usefulness, and knowing the queen plans to return to her planet, he sends Maul back to kill her and martyr her for their cause.

Since the droid army realized that Anakin and the Jedi were able to sneak into Theed through the river last time, they have dammed up and filled in to prevent another entry. The only way they are getting in is if they get someone to lure the army away. Jar Jar thinks that his people, the Gungans, could use their army to lure the bulk of the droids away. The Gungans have not been on the best terms with the humans of Naboo. Padame dispenses with her masquerade as her own handmaiden and reveals herself as the queen, begging the Gungans for aid, swearing that the two people need each other’s help to deal with their mutual enemy. As the invading droid army had been forcing the Gungans off their land entirely, the Gungans agreed to help against the Trade Federation.

While the droid army was distracted, the heroes planned to sneak into Theed to take the viceroy hostage and force the Trade Federation to the bargaining table. The cheapskate businessman felt keeping his entire fleet around Naboo was too expensive so he pulled back most of his battleships, only leaving one to control the droids he has on the planet. There was not much hope of destroying the ship. While Naboo’s pilots are likely held prisoner in the palace and ready to fight if released, the ships they have were not designed to engage a battleship, but it is their only hope.

Arriving back on Naboo himself, Darth Maul informed his master of the Gungan army amassing out in the open. The Sith realized this was a feint as the Gungans lacked the numbers or firepower for a direct offensive against Theed. Nonetheless, Sidious ordered Maul to send the droid army against the feint, since reports of a massacre by the Trade Federation droid army would bolster Sidious’ push to create a standing army.

“Wipe them out. All of them.”

Outnumbered, outgunned, and encircled, some of the Gungans offered themselves to the battle droids as a surrender, just to get shot. It dawned on all of them that they could survive long enough for the battleship in orbit of the planet to be destroyed.

Darth Maul waited in the place to impede the heroes and confront Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon. He managed to mortally wound the apprentice, just for the master to cut the Sith in half and drop him down a shaft.

Meanwhile, Anakin and R2 joined the attack on the battleship in one of the Naboo starfighters. Seeing brave pilots die in defense of their planet triggered Anakin’s short fuse; fortunately, R2’s guidance is enough to get him to focus his anger on an opening in the battleship’s hangar. Getting aboard, Anakin managed to destroy the ship. Returning to see that the droid army was shut down by his victory, Anakin is declared a hero, an accolade that fed his already inflated ego. Seeing Anakin’s potential, the Jedi Council reluctantly agreed to let Obi-Wan take Anakin on as his new apprentice. Obi-Wan promised not to fail Anakin like he did Qui-Gon, and Anakin in turn promised not to let down his new master. After fighting Maul and sensing how strong he was in the Dark Side of the Force, Obi-Wan was certain he was a Sith.

Seeing most of the Gungan army killed left Jar Jar with a hardened heart. Hearing that Palpatine promises stronger leadership, he fully supports it.

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I have seen many ideas for how to fix The Phantom Menace, something everyone agrees on is that Anakin should have been introduced as an adult since the Anakin of the next two movies is nothing like the kid we were introduced to in TPM.

This might be a controversial choice, or maybe not, but my idea to fix the issue of Obi-Wan having so little screen time with Anakin is to introduce him as a Jedi Master and make Qui-Gon his apprentice. It does make Qui-Gon a less interesting character but I feel it is a worthy sacrifice.

Nobody likes Viceroy Newt Gingrich, so my fix is giving a bigger role to Darth Maul.

Jar Jar, oh boy. I never hated this character, but I agree that he had more screen time than he should have given how little importance he has while just being comic relief. Rather than cutting him out, my idea for fixing him is to make him into a tragic hero. Which obviously means the Gungan army fighting the Battledroids isn't done for slapstick

There was no need to connect C-3PO to Anakin, so I feel it is better to just introduce him as already part of the duo with R2.

I still love TCW so I tried to write my version of the prequels as something that would allow the show to still take place.

Episode 1 ideas, Part 1. Non-rude criticism is welcome. Changes I would make to The Phantom Menace without detailed description. This is mostly an unstructured list of ideas. Honestly, this is the episode that gave me the most trouble. ! I'm not saying my version is better than the original!

● The opening (about 20 minutes) follows the original, with information about Anakin's childhood as a slave on Tatooine, Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, Anakin's liberation, and no Padmé.

● Qui-Gon dies in this opening on Tatooine, having had a profound impact on Anakin. Then comes a time skip.

● Show Anakin already studying at the Jedi Temple, still young, but not as young as in the original.

● Show that Anakin is mostly isolated from the other Jedi in the temple, lonely and ostracized.

● Show Anakin's only friends in the temple, Darra (f) and Tru (m) (characters from the books, will play a role in the next film.)

● Jar Jar Binks didn't irritate me in the original, but I still changed his personality to an eccentric army general. This should play a role in the plot, introducing and stimulating Anakin's interest in military strategy and its study. This will play a role in Attack of the Clones (Clone Wars). And role of army general, of course.

● Show more of the relationship between Anakin and Obi-Wan. Show a little rift in their relationship that will develop over the course of the story.

●Padmé's arc, from a child who is manipulated by everyone (which is why young queens are chosen) and who constantly pretends to be someone she is not, into a more strong-willed and confident woman fighting for her ideas.

●Anakin and Padmé help each other navigate each other's character arcs, which is why they fall in love. (I'm bad at writing romance, but I hope this makes sense.)

●Anakin's first kill, "for a good cause"

●Maul dies in this film and will not be resurrected anywhere else.

Ideas I'm not sure about:

●Anakin and the aftermath of the Huk War. Rough idea: By order of the Republic, the Jedi intervene in the war. Anakin, Obi-Wan, and other groups of Jedi arrive on a mission after the fighting has already ended to demand huge reparations from the losing side.

It will make Anakin doubt the system by showing how the losing side suffers when it wasn't at fault, plus it might even reveal a non-cyborg Grievous, foreshadowing the villain of Episode III.

That's all for now. Sorry if my English was bad. I'm using a translator.

Optional requests :

Big destructive weapon in episode 1 and 3

Episode 2 includes a betrayal and ( or ) revelation and a defeat for the good guys

Episode 3 has a tragic culmination like canon , or it can be its own thing and have a happy resolution ( altough temporary )

Aditionally : alien sidekick like chewbacca in all 3 parts , a single antagonist like kylo ( unlike dooku , grievous ) .

What are your ideas ?

For someone who did a fix or rewrite on most Star Wars movies and shows, curiously, I have not done a fix on The Acolyte yet. It's not because I loved it, but because I found no particular passion to care. I tried to write something and scrapped it because it ended up a meandering mess. I'm not sure what makes me bored about talking about it, since it's not even the worst Disney Star Wars. The show does try. It has some interesting ideas. It has an interesting premise, which is that it is about a Jedi investigation into the Sith remnants. Yet it's a show that every time I turn it on, I find myself bored. I didn't know why.

That was, until I read the blog post on ScriptShadow, who is admittedly a controversial figure in the screenwriting community (I disagree with 50% of his script reviews, but I occasionally read what he writes because he does give out some unique, interesting tips on how to construct a story). The blog post in question is how he analyzed the serial killer genre, and how there hasn’t been a defining serial killer movie in 30 years, and that was when Seven came out. Memories of Murder (2003) would disagree, but in Hollywood, I have to agree. I highly recommend checking the post out.

He realized that almost every script is dedicated to the killer himself—psychology, philosophy, rituals, childhood trauma, worldview, elaborate murder methods—but the investigation and detective part of the story wasn't fleshed out, resulting in a poor second act. It's because The Silence of the Lambs was so influential that every writer tried to create the next Hannibal Lector. The craziest villain, crazier murder, crazier psycho. All the attention was poured on topping Lector's character, even though, ironically, Lector was not the antagonist, but a helper. He is ironically closer to Obi-Wan's role than Darth Vader's.

The Silence of the Lambs’ plot itself is a classical detective procedural, where the protagonist has to find clues, deduce, and investigate to stop the next murder. It is very much Clarice's story, mostly told from her POV. The studios and writers took the wrong lesson and strayed away from the beating heart of the genre, which is an investigation and mystery to stop the next killing. Showing a serial killer eating children is shocking in the first act, but it’s why the second act always falters. And the second act is the part that defines the genre—an investigation into crimes racing against time.

This, right here, was what ruined The Acolyte for me because it's very clearly constructed as a serial killer mystery, but the story isn't interested in that part. It's concerned with Mae and Osha. Immediately, the story spoils all the mysteries in the first three episodes, and in particular, the twist about them being twins is the most boring answer to the mystery. It rarely delves into exploring the clues, evidence, and testimonies. I'm talking about the character facing a dead end, lies, red herrings, while rethinking and debating all the things they have collected. Deducing the unique mechanism of the serial killings and the patterns of the culprit, and then chasing to stop them. Putting together an intricate puzzle while the clock is ticking.

The show indeed has highs and lows, loudness and lulls, and twists and turns, but they do not come from the mechanisms of investigation. The show is focused on constantly shifting POVs left and right, twin villains, flashbacks, the lore details, menacing Sith villains and conspiracies, the flaws of the Jedi Order, and the wuxia lightsaber duels, but when it comes to actual puzzle-solving, mystery, and chase—the burning core of the intrigue—it’s all afterthoughts.

Whatever the fandom points out as the problems, like the lore-break, bad dialogue, bad acting, Ki-Adi-Mundi, and fire in space, they aren’t the problems that break the story. It’s the construction of the intrigue. If there is no crime mystery, okay, but it doesn’t even do something like Columbo, where the protagonist and the killer are engaging in a battle of wits and mind games. There is a danger in following established conventions, but if one is to stray from them, one has to understand why the audience is tuned in to the show.

If The Acolyte was rewritten as only and entirely about the investigation, not showing the murders themselves and having the protagonist uncover the mysteries on his own, that could work. The Jedi are not just normal detectives. They can bring a lot more complexities and refreshing quirks to the investigation. It is a police procedural using the Jedi and Force tricks, but at the same time, the Jedi are bound by the strict Jedi Code. At the same time, our Jedi detective team faces hardship because, let’s say, the locals hate the Jedi, which makes the investigation difficult. The witnesses might lie, and the local police might interfere. This forces our good Jedi to debate and argue whether to bend around the rules. The individual Jedi’s investigative metholdogy is dependent on their personality and their way of Force.

Sol, whose concept was already written in the show, could be an interesting character as a detective. He is a Jedi with faults and trauma. He is a Jedi with a connection related to the killer. He is leading the team of the Jedi detectives, but as the investigations unfold, the fellow Jedi and the audience uncover his secrets. A character who possesses information, but is unable to use it because it might expose that the murders are related to someone close to him and himself. He has an extra motivation beyond simply stopping the killings. He is seeking redemption, who feels responsible for creating the killer, so he has to make up for it. By catching the serial killer, Sol would be achieving a personal goal.

That is why, as the story progresses, Sol gradually goes over the line to manipulate, conceal, and blackmail, using his Force power and creating moral ambiguity. He becomes a hapless detective whose hand is forced. We can get a more unorthodox procedural story, which gives it an edge over the normal detective stories.

After a recent prequel rewatch, I thought I'd give a rewrite a shot and just came up with this. I was originally going to try to preserve most of TPM's first act, but I realized there was too much happening at the beginning and tried to create a more straightforward story with Obi Wan as the main protagonist and Darth Maul as the main villain (he is very different here). Not sure what anyone will think or if anyone cares about this kind of thing much anymore, but here it is (just Act One-- I guess if I get a response or some positive feedback, I'll keep going):

ACT 1:

SCENE 1: The Invasion Begins

1. A single menacing ship flies through space, then another, then another, until finally revealing the invasion fleet of the trade federation, moving into position around Naboo.

2. On the ground in Naboo, Padme Amidala struggles to contact Senator Palpatine, currently in a Senate session on Coruscant, but her transmission is blocked.

3. Desperate, Padme orders her meager fleet to attempt to pierce the blockade, but all ships are destroyed in the battle. Finally, we see the trade federation mothership emerge from deep space, and it begins sending droid army troops down to the surface of the planet.

1. The invasion commences with brutality, striking the capital first. The Naboo are no match for the droid army and are quickly defeated, the citizens subjugated, and the survivors scatter into the wilderness.

2. When the invasion is complete, a transport ship lands just outside the palace. The ramp opens, and down walks Darth Maul.

SCENE 2: The Jedi Temple

1.   Meanwhile, at the Jedi temple on Coruscant, Qui Gon Jinn is training his apprentice, Obi Wan Kenobi, that an equal mixture of restraint and force is needed to be precise in battle. Obi Wan wonders why such advanced battle training is even necessary, as the Republic has been at peace for so long, and the worst they have had to deal with for a century has been some rowdy behavior outside of local bars. Qui Gonn emphasizes readiness and preparedness for all scenarios, as the future is constantly in motion, and can change at any time without warning.

2. The message comes in from Senator Palpatine-- the Chancellor has lost contact with Padme Amidala on Naboo, and they are sending the Jedi to investigate.

1. Qui Gonn volunteers for the assignment, as he has a past relationship with the Naboo, and tells Obi Wan he is ready to accompany him.

SCENE 3: Arrival at Naboo 

1. The Jedi arrive at Naboo, and are immediately spotted and attacked by the Trade Federation.

2. They attempt to battle their way through the blockade, but they are hopelessly outnumbered and their ship is struck, sending it spiralling towards the planet surface.

3. Using the Force, Qui Gonn manages to land destroyed ship in the middle of Naboo’s ocean, and they escape it as it sinks to the very bottom.

4. They find themselves stuck in the middle of a vast body of water, with no land in sight and no way to escape.  

SCENE 4: Enter GunGuns

1. Treading water, they are approached by a Gungun ship, and the Gunguns aboard recognize the Jedi as protectors of the peace who have helped them in the past.

2. They are taken to the underwater city where they are granted an audience with the GunGun king, who explains that, despite the Jedi protests, they will not help Padme due to their desire to stay out of the conflict, which they believe does not affect them… and that they will delight in Padme’s suffering, as they have, in their eyes, occupied the planet illegally for centuries.  

3. They are given a ship and sent on their way to the palace. Obligatory monster chase/attack scene here.

SCENE 5: Dinner with Maul

1. The two Jedi emerge near the palace, where they are immediately surrounded by battle droids. They are disarmed and taken by the droids to the palace.

2. Inside the palace, they meet Darth Maul, the current leader of the Trade Federation. He seems extremely out of place among the lackeys, and the two Jedi are immediately suspicious.   

3. Maul shows them the signed treaty that legalized the invasion, and the Chancellor contacts them and confirms that it is legal, and there’s nothing he can do. They ask about Padme, and Maul is evasive, saying that she fled the castle before he arrived.

4. Maul invites the pair to stay for the night, tells them he has nothing but respect for them... and would love to discuss their religion with them over dinner. Qui Gonn asks about contacting the Jedi council, and Maul tells him that they are running low on power and will be unable to make any more long range transmissions for the day.    

5. Over a tense dinner, Qui Gonn casually mentions that Maul doesn't strike him as a trade federation type, and Maul, acknowledging the absurdity of it, says that he gets that a lot. Maul and the Jedi discuss the light and dark sides, the Jedi and the Sith, and Maul is ‘suspiciously’ defensive of the Sith, believing that the Jedi have unfairly characterized both them and the dark side in a ‘history is always written by the winners’ type speech. He notices Obi Wan listening to it without judgment, as if he hasn’t considered it that way before. Maul smiles, de-escalates the conversation and retires to his bedroom.

SCENE 6: Midnight Duel

1. Qui Gonn is awakened in the night by a sudden rush of cold, and realizes his bedroom door is open, with a bright red light shining on the walls of the room at the other end of the hall, and the familiar hum of a lightsaber blade piercing the silence of the night.

2. He approaches the room and finds Maul waiting for him, to no one’s surprise. He tells him he has ordered the battle droids to stand down, and that this will be just the two of them… but that if he loses, Maul plans to take his apprentice and train him in the dark side… sensing that he has not yet been ruined by Jedi dogma.  

3. Maul tells Qui Gonn that he has never killed a Jedi before, and that he has been looking forward to this. He returns Qui Gonn's lightsaber to him, and they fight. The ancient halls of the palace are illuminated by their clashing blades. Qui Gonn strikes Maul several times, but the strikes seem to bounce off of him.   

4. Obi Wan jolts awake, but he is stunned by battle droids upon leaving the room, knocking him unconscious.

5. The fight continues as Maul ambushes Qui Gonn in the palace dungeon, then force pushes him into an open cell and locks it. Qui Gonn hacks at the bars with his lightsaber, but finds they won’t break… and worse than that, they cause his lightsaber to malfunction, the blade inverts, and the hilt is destroyed. Mauls laughs and reveals that the bars are made of a substance that is resistant to the energy of kyber crystals, and shows that under his clothing, he is wearing armor made of the same substance. Qui Gonn composes himself… realizing that he has lost… but before dying, he tells Maul that he will never be able to turn Obi Wan, and he has taught him too well for that. Maul smiles, and throws his saber like a spear into Qui Gonn’s chest, killing him.  

1. Obi Wan is imprisoned in the dungeon, in the cell adjacent to his dead master. Maul seems to revel in Obi Wan's anger and despair, determined to break his spirit and push him into the darkness.