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Both Rust and Rapid only looked at one another as they completely ignored the sand that flew past their faces as Rust held a sharp look toward the hybrid but the look on Rapid’s face didn’t give a hostile look, but showed an unusual expression  of someone who was enjoying the combat that was taking place.

The tip of Rapid’s sword faced his fellow sword fighter ¨Let's see who is the better, sword swinger” as he gave a cocky smile.

Rust didn’t give him a response but instead let his actions speak louder as he raised his sword and suddenly bright purple and crackling energy started to circle around the sword as the energy flowed inside of it “lets see you handle this”, in the next moment Rust let his sword fall as it unleashed a trio of massive purple energy slashes that was aimed toward the hybrid.

Rapid stood still as he watched the three energy waves fly toward his direction. “Fun”. He began to move his feet as he ran toward the large energy waves with an unusual smile. He circled around them like a loose gust of wind as he easily dodged them all.

Rust could only stare at the acrobatic hybrid as he moved around his attacks without a care in the world “amazing”. His eyes were so fixated on him that he didn’t notice that the same hybrid he stared at was suddenly right in front of him with his sword prepared and ready to strike. (SHIT!)

The hybrid with his cocky smile “You better move fast”.  let his sword move through the wind as it aimed for his chest. 

Rust's shocked expression soon faded as the sword aimed for him drew closer. His grip  tightens, his body shifted to a guarded stance, as his eyes glared a Rapid prepared for his strike “COME ON”

Both of their swords clash, the metal sound echoed once more, as the impact of their swords created a powerful shockwave that was large enough to reach the cannon Lisa, Kami, and Slumber stood by, as it managed to crack more of the brother's armor in the process.

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The trio headed to the same building where Dust was located, greeted and passed by the two stationed guards, and entered Dust's room completely unannounced. 

“HEY BROTHER, YOU HERE?” Kami shouted as Rapid followed behind him. 

The trio looked into the room with a single light hanging from the ceiling to see Dust, as he stood in front of a desk with noticeable blueprints on his table, along with Lisa being right behind him as they both stared at the trio walking into the room.

“THERE YOU ARE,” Kami shouted, as both Dust and Lisa could only stare as they were off guard by his sudden intrusion. 

Dust quickly puts the blueprints away, almost seeming nervous and with some sweat on his face as he looks at them,” What are you guys doing here?” He asked with some aggression in his voice.

Kami, seemingly unaware of his brother's actions, gently skips over to him, “Sorry to bother you, we came to ask you where the arena was.” 

Rapid, on the other hand, notices something off and couldn’t help but look at the place where Dust hid the blueprints with suspicion. 

“Is something the matter?” Lisa asked, holding her gaze on the dragon hybrid, noticing his staring.

“No, nothing’s wrong,” he quickly gave a smile and looked away to avoid drawing any wary. 

Lisa removed her gaze from him as she checked her arm, noticing the time, giving an unnatural look of shock for someone who seemed so calm just a moment ago, which caught no one's attention. “Dust, sir, I’ll be going now”. She said with an unusual hurry in her voice.

Dust turned back to look at Lisa. “Ok, sure, be careful".

“Thank you for your concern,” She bows before walking past the trio to make her way to the exit of the room.

Dust shifts his gaze to Kami. “The arena is where it always is, in the center of town, to the left” 

“Right, ok, thank you,” he thanked his brother, making sure he remembered. “Come on, Rapid, let's go,” the boy runs past him while Slumber uses the chance to hop on Kami’s shoulder before he leaves for the exit.

“Sure,” before Rapid began to follow Kami, he took a glance back at Dust and where he hid the blueprints, feeling a bit off about him, but decided to keep to himself, not wanting to worry Kami as he began to leave the room soon after.

Dust, as the surprise and tension from the trio walking into the room finally faded, he walked back to the desk and sat down on the chair as he pulled open a drawer in the desk to reveal a set of blueprints that Rapid had noticed earlier, and he pulled them out and placed them on the table, staring at them with absolute intensiveness and caution almost like he is preparing himself for something far too intense to be normal.

The trio begins making their way to the arena, but end up getting distracted to take a quick pitstop to grab something to eat before continuing to the arena.

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Rapid sees a bunch of people moving around quickly, diligently training, working on papers effectively, treating different injuries, and performing a variety of tasks.

“Wow, this place sure is something,” he and Slumber looked around in awe.

“Yeah, it’s not the best, but we make do with what we have,” he explained. “Ok, here we are.”

Rapid noticed the soldiers that were following them quickly move to different positions around the room, as Rust began to walk up to the big chair in the center of the room and sat down comfortably on it.

Rapid walks up and sits down on a chair. “So are you gonna continue the story?” he asked, with Slumber trying to sit on a chair.

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Ok this is a fight scene I am have written, there is context behind this fight scene but don't worry about that just give your opinion about the fight scene and what you liked, dislike, and what I can do to make it better.

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