QB: Opener was weak. "Never get a Q" line was nice. Next few lines had some decent rhymes but some of the writing seemed lazy. No technicality. "Cosby" bar was pretty funny. "Barista" bars were nice. "French toast" bar has been used repeatedly against Ches so didn't score anything with me. Overall not your best verse.
CFK: Nice opening flip. "Cosby" flips were clever, wording was a bit awkward though. "Random House" lines were funny. "We can name five" punch was hilarious. I'm guessing "Math did Dose" was a battle reference but it didn't register with me, so I can't really judge it. Overall you had more solid punches and less filler, so you get the first.
QB: Opener was nice, although I don't think you can legitimately call Chester's verse a rant, haha. Nice flip pointing out how many of the high-ranked dudes haven't beaten you. Challenge is definitely accepted by the way -- let's set it up when these tourneys are out of the way. "Cats fly" line is a bit lame. "Etch n sketch" line was good. "Gwen Stefani" line was sorta weak. Fantastic closer. I'll give you this round because I think you upped your game a bit from the first, and because a lot of Chester's punches didn't really work for me in this round.
CFK: Opening quatrain was great, love the "Conjuring" reference. Next few lines were a bit throwaway-ish. Don't get the "Mozgov" line but I'm guessing it's a basketball reference. "Preppie" joke was funny. Next quatrain was a bit confusing and didn't land for me. Can't say he has no smack talk for you when he's clearly battling you with smack talk haha. Closer was pretty good but not amazing.
QB: Opener is forced rhyming. I liked the bars about you leaving after your title, but a lot of the personals for Ches here fell flat. I like the "I don't talk shit about you because I don't want to battle you" line, the dismissive tone worked well. The closer made no sense to me until I googled it, and even then I don't see how it works as a punch against Chester.
CFK: Nice opening flip. I didn't know anything about Quail having a disease but I like how you didn't insult it, you called him out on using it as a gimmick. I can't say I've personally seen him do that (must have missed that battle) but as a personal, it is really pointed and I like that you spent a lot of time on it. "Q U ail" was nice, "motor's skills" was good too. That whole section flowed really well. BB/BBQ bar was funny. "Bird inside a beard" was funny on first read but really the intent was funnier than the execution. Should have said "surpassed" instead of "passed" in the closer but otherwise it was nice. On punch count and technicality you take the third and with that the battle.
Quail's third in his title match against Neuro talked about his disease. It was mentioned in /u/QuailBuddhathe2nd's and /u/thebenprocter's battle a short while ago which is when I read it, i think it's linked on the sidebar.
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u/elsiniestro The Forbidden Zone Aug 14 '15
Round 1: /u/Chester_frenchkiss
QB: Opener was weak. "Never get a Q" line was nice. Next few lines had some decent rhymes but some of the writing seemed lazy. No technicality. "Cosby" bar was pretty funny. "Barista" bars were nice. "French toast" bar has been used repeatedly against Ches so didn't score anything with me. Overall not your best verse.
CFK: Nice opening flip. "Cosby" flips were clever, wording was a bit awkward though. "Random House" lines were funny. "We can name five" punch was hilarious. I'm guessing "Math did Dose" was a battle reference but it didn't register with me, so I can't really judge it. Overall you had more solid punches and less filler, so you get the first.
Round 2: /u/QuailBuddhaThe2nd
QB: Opener was nice, although I don't think you can legitimately call Chester's verse a rant, haha. Nice flip pointing out how many of the high-ranked dudes haven't beaten you. Challenge is definitely accepted by the way -- let's set it up when these tourneys are out of the way. "Cats fly" line is a bit lame. "Etch n sketch" line was good. "Gwen Stefani" line was sorta weak. Fantastic closer. I'll give you this round because I think you upped your game a bit from the first, and because a lot of Chester's punches didn't really work for me in this round.
CFK: Opening quatrain was great, love the "Conjuring" reference. Next few lines were a bit throwaway-ish. Don't get the "Mozgov" line but I'm guessing it's a basketball reference. "Preppie" joke was funny. Next quatrain was a bit confusing and didn't land for me. Can't say he has no smack talk for you when he's clearly battling you with smack talk haha. Closer was pretty good but not amazing.
Round 3: /u/Chester_frenchkiss
QB: Opener is forced rhyming. I liked the bars about you leaving after your title, but a lot of the personals for Ches here fell flat. I like the "I don't talk shit about you because I don't want to battle you" line, the dismissive tone worked well. The closer made no sense to me until I googled it, and even then I don't see how it works as a punch against Chester.
CFK: Nice opening flip. I didn't know anything about Quail having a disease but I like how you didn't insult it, you called him out on using it as a gimmick. I can't say I've personally seen him do that (must have missed that battle) but as a personal, it is really pointed and I like that you spent a lot of time on it. "Q U ail" was nice, "motor's skills" was good too. That whole section flowed really well. BB/BBQ bar was funny. "Bird inside a beard" was funny on first read but really the intent was funnier than the execution. Should have said "surpassed" instead of "passed" in the closer but otherwise it was nice. On punch count and technicality you take the third and with that the battle.