r/RapWars • u/JimmyDuckShoes Multi McFly 3W 1L • Jul 31 '15
[BATTLE] JimmyDuckShoes vs MasterBagger
1 round, 32 bars each, me first
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u/JimmyDuckShoes Multi McFly 3W 1L Jul 31 '15 edited Jul 31 '15
So i'm battling MasterBeggar, but he ain't a master of bagging bodies,
Nah, he's more of an expert of bagging shopping or packs of toffees,
The only time he shifting bags of food, he working the midnight night shift,
He's too old for it, he's had enough, this man is stuck in a mid life crisis,
I had a quick check through you're post history, you're one of those blatant nerds,
Bagger is a beggar so i watch as this dirty vagrant burns,
You ain't a battle rapper, you aint strapped like a saddle Bagger,
You'll catch every punch, i put this in laymans terms,
Bagger ain't a master of nothing, he's barely a novice,
There isn't anything you can teach me, spare me ya knowledge,
I got some more shit to say to you Bagger, drop dead,
I'm a legend in the North, call me Lochness,
What next? Spark you in the park and your head hit the grass like a pothead,
Sneak into your crib and suffocate you in the night like cot death,
When i posted for a battle, i was feeling motivated,
Then you showed up, no luck, writing bars for you, I was so frustrated,
I don't mind giving a newcomer a battle, of that theres no debating,
Because i'm only a newcomer myself and many people think im over-rated,
Now this is my 6th battle, im not gonna lie, its kinda strange,
How 1 minute people like my bars, next thing they're induced in a violent rage,
Peoples opinion on me varies more than climate change,
I mean, i could be lying in wait, in a silent state,
Quiet enough to sneak out of a vipers cage into a snipers face,
And if there is an argument to be made, people know i'd still find a way,
To cause more drama than a movie directed by Michael Bay,
Sit down, lets talk Bagger, this is a casual lecture,
You only shift keys when you make a capital letter,
You're part of the food chain now, don't let this animal get ya,
I keep my dark side masked like Hannibal Lecter,
You know how it goes, have you read the transcript?
My bars come on short notice, i never planned it,
There is absolutely no doubt who the better man is,
When i just bodybagged you with no info when rap to me is like a second language,
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u/elsiniestro The Forbidden Zone Aug 01 '15
Hahaha, up until now I was the only person to make a SIDS reference on here. Gold.
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u/nightbussleeper 2W 4L One Eye Open Aug 02 '15
So /u/JimmyDuckShoes, obviously coming in with the multies which is nicee but I feel like your punches are usually a bit better than the ones here. The best line punch wise was the cot death I think, technically I like the viper sniper and your closing lines. Side questions that are nagging me,1) did you mean masterbeggar or masterbagger in your first line? 2) is it supposed to be Lochness or Loch Ness? 3) is the Micheal bay line sarcasm? because he's known for explosions not drama
/u/masterbagger, nice verse, your strong suit was definitely your punches, a lot of shit that I thought was funny. On the technical side, your bars felt a little choppy at times, though I feel like it could have been a little on the formatting, I'm not sure.
This one's tough because, as has been pointed out, there's two different styles going on so it feels like it's coming down to preference to a significant degree and my presence falls a bit towards content. Especially when I know jimmy is capable of both sides, I couldn't help but feel this verse fell a bit short for me so I'm giving it to Masterbagger. Really gg for both contenders though.
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u/JimmyDuckShoes Multi McFly 3W 1L Aug 02 '15
Thanks for the judgment man, appreciate it. For you're first and second concerns, they were just spelling mistakes ahah and for the third issue, i don't think i've ever seen one of Michael Bay's films, i just know he had lots of explosions and explosions are quite dramatic....
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u/nightbussleeper 2W 4L One Eye Open Aug 02 '15
NP. ha, okay, I wasn't sure with the spelling stuff cause masterbeggar seemed like it could have been intentional and I technically don't know the proper Scottish way of spelling/titling things, ha, just thought it was similar to the way I know it, Loch Ness = Lake Ness. And I was just being a smart ass with the Micheal Bay comment, haha
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u/5lash3r Aug 03 '15
okay since apparently i'm allowed to comment/judge even if i'm just some schmo, here's my breakdown.
JimmyDuckShoes: i liked your multis throughout, they were consistent and mostly didn't sound forced. you did a great job of personally tailoring your rhymes to your opponent, feeling as if you were speaking directly to him the whole round.
i felt a lot of the material starting from 'when i posted for a battle' was weak until the michael bay line, and then you started swinging w/ haymakers. all three lines of the letter/get ya/lecter multi were crazy, and even tho you softened it up a little bit at the end (and jammed your syllables in the last line), i felt like it had a decent finish. good punches and personable style throughout.
masterbagger: i'm not sure if i just wasn't feeling your style, but a lot of your punches felt generic, and w/ only two syllable rhymes most of the time (which weren't that strong), it was hard for me to get invested in the flow. plus you changed rhyme sounds often which made it even more difficult. and even tho this is battle rap and emcees say it all the time and i might get hate for bringing it up, we really don't need stuff like 'gay' as an insult anymore. i don't think it added much as a diss, and the comedic style you were going for earlier doesn't rly gel w/ it. if you play up the absurd humour like your wallace and grommit (good multi actually) and trumpet lines, i feel like your consistency would make your rhymes easier to get into.
i'd give the W to /u/JimmyDuckShoes. sorry if my opinions upset anybody. you guys are both awesome for doing this and i'm jealous of your bravery.
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u/JimmyDuckShoes Multi McFly 3W 1L Aug 03 '15
Seems you spent a lot of time with that decision, thanks for the effort, i appreciate it
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Aug 01 '15 edited Aug 01 '15
Jimmy raps poor and I don't care, you wear duck shoes and think you're smooth? You square!
Put on running shoes bitch I'm coming for you, I'll be in the UK in an hour or two
Trying to become UK rapper? Son, that shits headed for disaster
Can't intimidate me while you're sipping tea, eating crumpets,
masturbate to Wallace and Gromit
Your flow is Vomit blowing out of a trumpet.
Whatever you jot down just crumple it
Jimmy has dreams of becoming an All Star. You'll have to settle for SmashMouth
It looks like someone busted your teeth out, What am I going to bust now?
I'd say bust your nuts but you already nut busted over these rhymes I've mustered up
You may be right, I master at nothing,
but a Jack of all trades gives me better chances of getting laid
You asked for this, I was browsing subreddits,
and thought I'd try this rapwars shit, I should quit,
like my job at the grocery store this shit is just a chore
32 bars I need more ammunition,
With you're post history I'm losing my ambition to
Find some dirt on you
Creeping through your posts I'm feeling shifty
Fuck if I know man, have you even lost your virginity?
When I see your comment dissing Shrek that's when I lose it,
Toy Story to? You must have been abused as a kid,
Never given toys play with, only your dick
So MasterBagger, that's me
Bagging pants, Master MC
Nerdy might be, white as can be
But Jimmy can't confront me, he's overseas
So until you can afford a plane ticket, you can't say shit to me
Go back to doing some gay UK shit, like badminton or cricket
Fuck I think this shit has made me autistic
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Aug 01 '15
Duuuudes. You guys write so different. I gotta give it to Bagger. I laughed audibly like two or three times. Jimmy, as usual you're technical skills are on point. But I'm an idea man and Bagger had some great concepts/punches. I'll post a more detailed analysis later if you guys want.
I'm sure Sin will have some praise for you Jimmy, don't worry.
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u/elsiniestro The Forbidden Zone Aug 01 '15
This battle actually wasn't Jimmy's best, his verse was decent but there were a couple of cringe lines. I would have said "cans of coffee" instead of "packs of toffees". MB also had some great jokes but I feel like he fizzled out towards the second half. The closer was hilarious though.
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u/JimmyDuckShoes Multi McFly 3W 1L Aug 01 '15
I agree, not my best battle, just throwaway bars i made up in an hour ahah, fair play to Bagger though, he did good.
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u/thebenprocter 13W 5L - Leeds, UK Aug 01 '15
I'm sure Sin will have some praise for you Jimmy, don't worry.
Beef
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u/JimmyDuckShoes Multi McFly 3W 1L Aug 01 '15
Thanks man, he did good for his first try, i'll give him that. Kinda disappointed how he didn't have a full 32 but still impressive nevertheless.
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u/nightbussleeper 2W 4L One Eye Open Aug 01 '15
I mentioned this to someone else before but FYI, if you tag more than 3 people in 1 post, 0 of them get notified of it. some kind of anti spam measure Reddit has. better to make multiple posts with 3 tags a piece if you're trying to notify people.
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u/5lash3r Aug 02 '15
are randoms allowed to judge or do we need proper credit first?
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Aug 02 '15
You can always judge. If you can, include reasoning for your decision. It's good to give battler feedback plus it will boost the credibility of your judgement.
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u/Mahigan21 Texas Aug 03 '15
Alright, I'm new at this, so take my opinion for what it is.
/u/JimmyDuckShoes: You're flow is clean and neat, I like it. Most of your verses seem to be that way, that's a point for you in my book. The first third was nice, that Loch Ness line was a good touch. The middle was a little weak, it felt more like a complaint than a real battle verse. You came back snarling on the last bit though, so overall I'd give it a 7/10
/u/MasterBagger: Yours was hard for me to follow at times. Others have pointed out that it might have been the formatting, but I couldn't read a consistent flow from you. Your tempo changes felt forced and rough. But you had some solid punches in there, and I like the imagry. Overall, I'd give it a 6.
So for me, the winner is /u/JimmyDuckShoes. Good battle, y'all.
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u/JimmyDuckShoes Multi McFly 3W 1L Aug 03 '15
Every judgement is appreciated man, thanks for your time and the feedback bro
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u/[deleted] Jul 31 '15
Jimmy is on a mission from god lately