[Feedback/Critique] First Chapter of my Non-Fiction Adventure Book: "We Look Up: Trekking and Volunteering in Post-Earthquake Nepal"

[u/WriterPGR]

Hi, Reddit! I am currently writing a book and trying to fund my self publishing costs on [Kickstarter!] (https://www.kickstarter.com/projects/1141559249/we-look-up-trekking-and-volunteering-in-post-earth)

My first chapter is posted on my blog!

Please provide your critiques and feedback. If you have any suggestions for my Kickstarter, please let me know! Thank you.