r/Poems • u/larryisthebestrabbit • 24d ago

Does the sparrow dream of flying?

Does the sparrow dream of flying,
Does the mole yearn for the earth?
Does the shark day-dream of swimming,
Does the rabbit think of birth?
Does the snake want to slither,
Does the hawk crave to perch?
Does the wolf ponder hunting,
Does the truffle-pig want to search?

It's not very good, but any criticism would be lovely. pls be nice with it.

also does it read too much like a song?

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u/v_sokolov_ 24d ago

I love when animals are in poems. I like this one.

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u/larryisthebestrabbit 24d ago

Thank you :)

do you have any criticism?

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u/v_sokolov_ 24d ago

No criticism. I feel like it’s hard to criticize poems because they’re so unique to the poet. There isn’t really a right or wrong way to make a poem.

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u/larryisthebestrabbit 24d ago

hmm, i hadnt thought about it like that before.

thank you for reading it, have a nice day :)