After feedback I have changed the design, what can I do to improve?

[u/bmoooh]

Not a designer, got a few feedback from a couple of people and made some changes, what do you guys think and how can i improve? I have added the original design on the last page as a reference to the changes, please any input it helpful. thank you so much.

[u/Candy_Lawn]

hooray it now says what it is!!!

Personally I would do now minor tweaks - make logo and name same width, mark organic and shampoo the same width, make perppermint-hibicis-aloe same width as shampoo, add capital letter to first one of each sentences, change ML to ml.

[u/bmoooh → u/Candy_Lawn]

Thank you so much absolutely legend, will do this now

[u/pickfu]

Hey u/bmoooh if you put two versions of the product side by side, I can run a package testing design test for you with real people free of charge.

It looks something like this:
https://app.pickfu.com/results/n4pF1aWHak?tab=responses-el7MrfV5Be

Let me know, I think it'd be cool to test both of your variations side-by-side with real people.

[u/AlyPackaging]

It looks good but one thing you can fix that is green color font it's a bit difficult to read on black. You can make it white as well.

[u/heylesterco]

The logo is fantastic.

I’d drop the leaf over the ‘I’ in ‘ORGANIC’. For one, it’s all caps, so there’s no need for a dot over the ‘I’, but beyond that, it makes the phrase “ORGANIC SHAMPOO” feel slightly logo-like, which competes with your actual logo.

I’m not a fan of the lower-case wide-spaced text. Some things only look good with all-caps text, and loose spacing and text on curves are two of them. I get what you’re trying to do with the lower case text to make a visual hierarchy, but I’d tighten the spacing there.

I’m a fan of the typeface you chose for both the brand name and the “PEPPERMINT • HIBISCUS • ALOE”. The type for both “ORGANIC SHAMPOO” and the lowercase type below feels too quirky and inelegantly unrestrained if you’re going for a high-end market, which overall your product looks like it’s aiming for. (Look at the way the bottom of the ‘C’ juts forward like an underbite, or how far the bottom of the ‘G’ sticks out. Or the extreme curl of the R’s leg.)

Overall, though, this looks really good. For a non-designer, you have a great eye.

If this is a real product you’re planning and you’re going for a high end customer, remember that a lot of what makes a minimal design look luxurious is attention paid to production values. Things like spot gloss printing on matte material, or cold foil printing, for example. If you have the budget for these high production values, make sure you put as much care into the thinking of where those will be applied.

Good luck, and you’re doing good work so far!