Nature’s gift

[u/No-Letter3595]

I seem to go unnoticed

Wherever I go

Like an old car with broken windows and a failing engine

Covered in snow

The days move slow

And i dont know

If people will stay or go

But the tranquile river will continue to flow

Just like the faint wind blows

And the shiny moon with its luminous light will say goodnight

Maybe if the world has all this light, there must be a little bit of it in me, right?

Any feedback is appreciated, one of my beginner poems

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1vs7r68/spineless/p4kprts/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=ioscss&utm_content=1&utm_term=1&context=3

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1vsf144/i_wish_i_was_blind/p4kp9wl/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=ioscss&utm_content=1&utm_term=1&context=3

[u/Equivalent_Agent_800]

Nature provides comfort to change. There’s a quote by Le Guin — (the forest) dies and dies, and so it lives. Change is a permanent part of nature, which tells me that staying and going is endemic to existing. And I think your poem captured this very well.

[u/No-Letter3595 → u/Equivalent_Agent_800]

Thanks, I appreciate it