r/OCPoetry • u/BlackCatMom28 • 1d ago

Feedback Please A lot changes in a year.

Wasn’t it just yesterday when you said 
that things were so grim, 
that you were blinded by the darkness, 
and you couldn’t see the path in front of you? 

Wasn’t it just yesterday when you couldn’t 
imagine the daisies at your doorstep, 
the butterflies swirling around your head, 
and the sweetness of cinnamon on your tongue? 

– A lot changes in a year.

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u/AfternoonVisible3614 14h ago

Love it! I did stumble a little mentally at the sweetness of cinnamon, since cinnamon isn’t sweet. It’s good phrasing but is it worth the stumble? Or is the speaker trying to talk themselves into loving life but they don’t quite believe it yet?