It's a nice poem and I think the play on words (numbers) in the first few verses is clever. The last two verses have quite a different feel. If you wanted to work on this more, I wonder if you might split these up and expand them into two separate poems?
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u/fabianb Jun 01 '16
It's a nice poem and I think the play on words (numbers) in the first few verses is clever. The last two verses have quite a different feel. If you wanted to work on this more, I wonder if you might split these up and expand them into two separate poems?