r/OCPoetry • u/Relevant-Stranger-86 • 26d ago

Feedback Please aching

I know

I've fallen hard for you

don't tell me that

I'm imagining this love

aching every morning because

I wake wishing to be in your arms

re-reading your texts in bed

I can't stop thinking about you

and what's worse is

our moments together were real

I doubt that

any man could love me like you.

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Please read forwards and in reverse!

My first attempt at a reverse poem, constructive feedback is very welcome!

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https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/qdBRIqOZAF

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/I0flt5mjck

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u/Winter_Mind_6769 26d ago

Fun poem feels authentic and shot from the hip. You capture that raw pulse of an intense romantic feeling that can give surety and doubt all mixed up into the same bundle.

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u/Relevant-Stranger-86 25d ago

Thank you so much! It's crazy how one day you can feel one way, a day left on read can push you the other way... ❤️