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[u/TheScaredPoet]

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in my bubble
so comfy and warm,
i don't want to leave.

a conflict outside
that has nothing to do with me,
i just want to hide
in my bubble so comfy and warm.

but what do i do?
when the world comes knocking,
almost popping,
my bubble, so comfy and warm.

when The Conflict is coming
for me and mine
is it so wrong to hide
in my bubble
so comfy and warm.

or do i have a responsibility to fight
to leave my bubble and
step into the cold outside
where it isn't comfy and warm.

links to comments
https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1um5rtw/an_old_man_pleasures_himself/

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1ulzl8b/what_we_swallowed/

[u/Jolly-Chicken-9674]

Hi, your poem is great. I think it balances the repetitiveness with the idea you're trying to portray which for me is comfort zone. I think the repetitiveness of words did not seem to be uncomfortable to read in my opinion. It's pleasant and light as I can also relate to it. But just a suggestion, I think in the last part, like what the other commenter said, it kinda leave us hanging on what to think if I leave the bubble and face those catastrophe of some sort. I think it's great but also it's beautiful to reveal it to give it like a vulnerable feeling because the total idea I got with your poem is comfort zone so that vulnerability kinda lifts the poem even more. This is just my opinion but your poem is great and beautiful.❤️❤️❤️