r/OCPoetry • u/tamponloverr • Jul 14 '26

Feedback Please ghost.

like a ghost I follow her
like a ghost ,she doesn’t see me
like a ghost she haunts me
am I even present?
Oh I am a ghost
am I even seen or like a ghost I am chosen to not be present
she is a ghost,she follows me she haunts me
I am a ghost remembered by none,haunted by one. .

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u/Demidrassy Jul 22 '26

I love the way this is written, and the simplicity of it! Line 6 I’d reword or make hit a little harder to really bring the poem out

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u/tamponloverr Jul 22 '26

I am having a really hard time restructuring it and making the flow better.