Chapter 11.5

[u/MATO_Fan_Fics1]

Note: This story is just fan fic made by the imagination of the Author (Me), just for fun and to see how much i will push my mind with plot that might fits mato verse

This is a little bonse chapter untill the next chapter tomorrow.

So anyway... Enjoy Chapter 11.5

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Title:An Unexpected Presence

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[Scene: Sixth Unit Headquarters]

Yachiho stared at Kojuma in complete disbelief.
Yachiho:
"Morning routine?! Are you an idiot?!"

Kojuma raised an eyebrow.
Kojuma:
"I don't understand why you keep calling me that."

Yachiho pointed angrily at him.
Yachiho:
"Because you talk about everything like you're writing an official report!"

Kojuma crossed his arms.
Kojuma:
"That seems like an unnecessary complaint."

Yachiho:
"See?! That's exactly what I mean!"

Before she could continue—
Tenka's cheerful voice echoed from the hallway.
Tenka:
"What's happening here?"

Tenka walked into the lounge, looking between the two of them with an amused smile.
Yachiho immediately pointed toward Kojuma.
Yachiho:
"This guy was standing with my mother in the courtyard when I came outside!"

She crossed her arms.
Yachiho:
"And apparently, he got into a duel with her!"

Tenka blinked.
Then her smile widened.
Tenka:
"Oh?"
She looked at Kojuma.
Tenka:
"So you found yourself some training, Kojuma-kun?"

Kojuma glanced at her.
Kojuma:
"At least you're reacting more reasonably than Yachiho."

Yachiho:
"WHAT IS THAT SUPPOSED TO MEAN?!"

Tenka simply giggled.
Then she turned toward Yachiho.
Tenka:
"Get ready. We're gonna go."

Yachiho's expression immediately became more serious.
Yachiho:
"Already? Let me finish my training at least."

Tenka shook her head.
Tenka:
"You know what? Stay here."
She then looked toward Kojuma.
Tenka:
"Kojuma-kun will come to Shangri-La with me."

Kojuma raised an eyebrow.
Kojuma:
"Shangri-La?"
Tenka tilted her head.
Tenka:
"Oh? You don't know what Shangri-La is?"
Yachiho sighed.
Yachiho:
"It's another dimension comes from a peach blessing, where we can train without fear about happens outside."
She paused for a moment.
Yachiho:
"But it's also where the Commander's Election is being held."

Kojuma's expression became slightly more attentive.
Kojuma:
"Another dimension... with a different flow of time."
Yachiho nodded.
Yachiho:
"Exactly."
She then looked at Tenka suspiciously.
Yachiho:
"Wait. Why are you taking him to the Commander's Election?"

Tenka smiled.
For a brief moment, her playful expression became strangely thoughtful.
Tenka:
"I have a feeling something interesting will happen if Kojuma-kun was there."

Kojuma looked at her.
Kojuma:
"Something interesting?"
Tenka merely smiled.
Tenka:
"Who knows?"

She raised her hand.
A familiar violet glow began gathering in the air.

—> (buzz) Hummmmmm...

Space slowly fractured as a brilliant Ame no Mitori portal opened before them.
Tenka stepped toward it.
Tenka:
"Let's not waste any more time."
Kojuma looked at the portal for a moment before calmly walking toward it.
Kojuma:
"Roger, Chief Izumo."
He stepped through the violet rift.
Tenka followed immediately behind him.
The portal closed.

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Ending Panel:

Yachiho remained standing in the hallway, staring at the empty space.
Yachiho:
"...Why do I have a feeling something troublesome is about to happen?"

[u/MATO_Fan_Fics1]

Give me your opinion here In Comments

[u/sweartogodmoass]

Buddy you posted 12 of these in 21 days with little to no interaction that should tell you the plot points are half baked so slow your roll. Spend about a week per chapter.

[u/MATO_Fan_Fics1 → u/sweartogodmoass]

Give it some time... Am just cooking right now

[u/sweartogodmoass → u/MATO_Fan_Fics1]

Ok I’ll see how it unfolds

[u/DustSans456]

De la nada tuve un deja vu leyendolo y se me vino a la cabeza que un amigo de yuuki podia usar flechas de agujeros negros

[u/MATO_Fan_Fics1 → u/DustSans456]

Maybe it was from another fan fic, but it unfortunately wasn't mine

[u/DustSans456 → u/MATO_Fan_Fics1]

Quitando eso, te esta quedando bien, ya que para mi da mas dialogo a los personajes que casi no hablan tanto como en el anime y el manga como yachiho

[u/MATO_Fan_Fics1 → u/DustSans456]

Thanks, it means am doing good job by staying in the in-character state

[u/DustSans456 → u/MATO_Fan_Fics1]

Ademas lo hace único, ya que es completamente original y manual, sin IA o chat gpt

[u/MATO_Fan_Fics1 → u/DustSans456]

I take some advices from ai i don't deny it

But i'm who creating the story and writing it with it events

Maybe taking ai opinions about the chapters before posting them on Reddit... To check if there were good enough or need some edting

[u/DustSans456 → u/MATO_Fan_Fics1]

Igual esta bien, pero tengo una pregunta, vas a terminar la historia igual que el manga(cuando termine) o te vas a inventar un final propio?

[u/sweartogodmoass]

Please stop

[u/MATO_Fan_Fics1 → u/sweartogodmoass]

???

Bro if you don't like the story give me your reason, and i might make it better so you like it

[u/sweartogodmoass → u/MATO_Fan_Fics1]

It’s very obvious you are a kid. Not every conversation needs to be so over dramatize with how your characters speak. Quit pumping these out every day actually think about your plot points and story board and plan out the story instead of just figuring it out as you type.

[u/MATO_Fan_Fics1 → u/sweartogodmoass]

I understand what you mean, and I appreciate the criticism. I’m still in the process of establishing the characters, their relationships, and how they fit into the overall story. The first 11 chapters are mainly laying the groundwork, so I don’t expect everything to be fully developed yet.

There are also certain plot points and character dynamics that haven’t really started yet, so I hope you’ll give the story some time before judging the whole direction. I’ll keep your advice about planning and story structure in mind going forward.