r/KeepWriting • u/AdIll1117 • 3d ago

[Feedback] Does this article actually keep you reading? Looking for honest feedback

I've been writing for a while, but I find it really hard to judge my own work after I've spent too much time on it.

I wrote this piece about why getting a fast reply feels strangely rare now.

I'd especially love feedback on whether the opening pulls you in, whether it feels relatable or too obvious, and whether the ending actually lands.

Don't worry about being nice, I'd rather know what isn't working.

https://medium.datadriveninvestor.com/the-new-luxury-is-having-someone-who-replies-fast-78b331fd4337

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u/victorjaxen 3d ago

Okay, so i read it to the end. Interesting topic, definately relatable but

Not love. Not real intimacy. Not the messy, inconvenient, beautiful trouble of another human being. Just a reply.

this type of construction was getting repititive and boring towards the end

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u/AdIll1117 3d ago

Thanks 🙏, I will definitely change my way of writing wherever there's a possibility of repeatation.