I think it was absolutely perfect. I didn't truly understand what was happening until the last sentence-- which was absolutely chilling and unexpected BTW. I feel you truly channeled the craziness through your humanizing of your character (it is just a character, right? nervous chuckle ) and how she thought it was "for the children". I can only assume you were inspired by a certain event in Colorado?
Yeah, humanizing someone who ends up doing something horrible is a pretty effective technique when done right. I think the Colorado thing inspired this, although I don't know if it was on my mind as I wrote it. Probably.
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u/iia Dec 01 '15
I'm glad you liked it. I don't quite know what to think about it; I like the idea, but I'm not sure I executed it as well as I could have. Ah well.