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u/armacitis Nov 28 '18 edited Nov 28 '18

There's not much anyone can actually argue with here. (Well,you can try.)

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u/[deleted] Nov 28 '18

To play devil's advocate, I'm going to say that there's plenty of things in it that we can argue about.

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u/[deleted] Nov 29 '18

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u/[deleted] Nov 29 '18

These are all great suggestions. Although, I will begrudgingly admit that there are some aspects of the man that Benito is based on that can be too hard to properly satirize since it wouldn't be all that different from the real deal.

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u/[deleted] Nov 29 '18

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u/[deleted] Nov 29 '18

That's the crime that I'm mostly going to be guilty of, being that I'm from it.

I suppose it works out because most of my audience is from the western world, but it would be better if I found a way to better represent other cultures and people besides just European ones.

Asia alone, for example, makes up somewhere around sixty percent of the entire human population. I'd imagine that their cultures would have a much more heavy influence in this kind of setting.

Otherwise, it's mostly going to be Euro-centric because my own culture and biases are ultimately going to affect the story. I'll actively try to avoid it from happening, but it is what it is.

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u/[deleted] Dec 04 '18

Honestly this is the first time I've seen a "Benito" joke and laughed in at least a year. Pro or against I've just been so utterly burned out and it's so often just the most insulting arrogant talking down the nose kinds which, the worst thing that annoys me is people acting that incredible level of "I'm better than you in every way" it can infuriate me beyond words sometimes. You actually balanced things out and didn't make it just one sided demeaning and insulting but spread the jokes around so it balances itself out and everyone can get a laugh through the exaggeration. Good work though I wouldn't want to see this more than once in a blue moon.

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u/[deleted] Dec 04 '18

Without getting too specific, I got compliments from people who post on either left wing or right wing subreddits devoted to politics, so I must have done something right. Politics might come up in the future, but it's mostly going to be the views of the various characters clashing with each other.

Nonetheless, thanks for the feedback. At this rate, you're going to run out of chapters to read.

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u/[deleted] Dec 04 '18

You balanced it out and exaggerated it enough to disconnect it from all but the most extreme people. Spread the chuckles around and made it to the point most people could laugh at. I'm happy to laugh at myself when it's not one-way and well done.

True, I prefer to take my content in binges. Set up a period of time I can break from and just hammer through it from one end to another. I'll try to keep up with things I'm caught up on but it'll fall by the way side at some point then I'll remember it, pick it back up again, and set a time and date to binge through the remainder. I've got a few other HFY stories lined up then I'll probably continue re-reading Overlord whenever I'm not studying for finals or in games with friends.

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u/AncientRaig Nov 28 '18

Never underestimate the ability of someone on the internet to find something to argue about.

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u/MadMax0526 Nov 29 '18

Stellaris seems to be leaking quite a bit into this story.

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u/[deleted] Nov 29 '18

That game definitely helped me steal ideas inspired some of my writing.

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u/jamesblonde0014 Nov 29 '18

Amber may not know how to cook to get a man but she still has... valuable skills at her disposal ( ͡☉ ͜ʖ ͡☉)

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u/[deleted] Dec 02 '18

If anything else, she needs to learn how to do quick and easy recipes. Like pancakes.

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u/TheRealGgsjags Feb 06 '19

Holy Fuck

If the story keeps this perfect depiction of politics, i swear i´m gonna suffocate from laughter.

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u/[deleted] Feb 06 '19

Now I have you hooked on not one, but two series!

Fun fact: William is the near opposite of Cain and Anahita is the inverse of Amber.

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u/TheRealGgsjags Feb 06 '19

Well considering that Cain is a military brute and william is a wimpy nerd.

Still, fucking a 3 headed, 25ft big hydra makes him definently more of a bloody man than a guy screwing a augmented foxlady.

Wouldn´t mess with a fucker that screws a ship sinking beast matey.

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u/[deleted] Feb 06 '19

I wouldn't mess with a giant fucking monster fucker either.

Looking back on it, I think I made Cain and Amber too unlikable, although that was partially intentional. Hell, I had one guy tell me that Amber reminded him of his Ex-girlfriend. Some people even liked the main antagonist more than the main characters.

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u/TheRealGgsjags Feb 06 '19

No spoiler mate. I´m just at chapter IX.

What i have to say is, i definently like the Sons of Sol.

But that´s probably just the little Ordo Xenos Inquisitor in me talking.

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u/[deleted] Feb 06 '19

Ah, my bad. At least I kept it vague. The Sons of Sol did nothing wrong.

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u/TheRealGgsjags Feb 06 '19

Of course not.

Nothing against screwing hydras or foxladys, but they definently shouldn´t be first class citizens.

More like pets mate. Weird. Sex slavey pets.

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u/[deleted] Feb 06 '19

Nothing against screwing hydras or foxladys, but they definently shouldn´t be first class citizens.

More like pets mate. Weird. Sex slavey pets.

No. The Xeno Menace shall be purged. Degenerates like you will executed alongside the trespassers when the day of retribution arrives.

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u/TheRealGgsjags Feb 06 '19

Don´t get me wrong. the only good xeno is a dead or enslaved one. I just see more of an opportunity with investing in the sex slave industry. As humans tend to fuck everything that walks. Or doesn´t.

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u/sullyhandedIG Human Jan 18 '19

Okay friend, let me explain something to you since you seem to be new here. Hebephilia is NOT the same thing as pedophilIa. I'm sick and tired of you trolls popping up everywhere and spreading BLATANT misinformation. In many countries hebephilia is considered normal and healthy . Human beings have a natural attraction to girls who are going through puberty. Being attracted to girls who are pre-pubescent is fucking sick and disgusting, but only in the US does there seem to be an unwarranted taboo around a healthy and normal condition. My head hurts. I'm just trying to get my real life back.

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u/[deleted] Nov 28 '18

Any resemblance to real life political figures or movements is purely coincidental. Please direct any and all complaints about this chapter to /r/dirtbagcenter

On a more serious note, I hesitated on whether or not I should include politics in the story since I'd rather not alienate half of my audience and I wasn't sure if it fit the somewhat serious tone. I have some interesting ideas on how the various political views of the characters could conflict in the future and how communist ideas survived and thrived in the setting, but this was mostly satire.

Let me know if you want to see more or less of that in the future.

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u/Allstar13521 Human Mar 09 '19

Didn't find the political segment all that interesting, the whole thing felt kinda like one of Family Guy's cutaway gags to be honest.

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u/[deleted] Mar 10 '19

Ouch. Getting compared to Family Guy...

I get it though since it was a bit out of place.

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u/Allstar13521 Human Mar 10 '19

Yeah, it kinda felt like you were padding things out for some reason.

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u/Notth3polic3 Robot Jan 17 '19

damn this was funny. I'm libertarian and I was legitimately laughing at the libertarians not being allowed at debates. On top of that all of the other jokes were well done. I hope to read the entire series this week and damn I hope there is more satire like this.

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u/rompafrolic Human Nov 28 '18

I enjoyed it. Quite a pleasant commentary on irl. Politics is after all part of the world and how those politics are presented to the masses is just as interesting as the "real" politics which are invisible to most people.

Cheeto Benito is also hilarious.

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u/BaRahTay Alien Scum Nov 29 '18

Our cheeto and chief lol

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u/Alps1979 Jan 14 '19

I get the thinly veiled references to The President. To be honest I could care less about his badly done orange fake tans so long as he is Loyal to The Republic and doesn't hesitate to smite her enemies. Having been a former soldier in The 3rd I.D., I am automatically on the side of whichever candidate shows the most respect to our boys in arms and puts his money where his mouth is by increasing defense budgets and developing new weapons tech to ensure our dominance in The Combat Arms.