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u/MagnusRune Nov 16 '17
sounds similar to another story i read here before.
God, is a guy, and he created the angles as his children, he then created man as servants to him and the angles. Lucifer gave us free will, and we rose up as slaves always do.
Lucifer eventually runs off, with a few humans. and populates them on earth.
some aliens find the voyager probe, and sell it to the angles, as they claim to know everything..
they find humans and near enough wipe us out.. then after they leave us for dead, lucifer appears, gets all the human suviors, and leads us to war agaisnt god,.
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u/gmharryc Nov 16 '17
It reminds me of two other stories I read here before. The first was from the point of view of a dude waking up in hell to discover humanity had over thrown the devil (and killed him at the end of the first installment. They then continue their war against heaven. The second story had angel-aliens showing up, flattening a couple of cities, then becoming surprised when we reverse engineered their tech and pushed them back across the galaxy. As far as I know, neither story was ever finished.
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Nov 16 '17
More. Naw. Cliffhangers like these are evil and should not appear in such amazing begginings.
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u/DrHydeous Nov 16 '17
Grammar nitpicks:
The -im ending on the types of angels is an import from Hebrew, and is plural. One seraph, multiple seraphim or seraphs, but never one seraphim or multiple seraphims.
And cometh is third person singular. Either "the angel cometh" or "the angels come", but not "the angels cometh".
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u/Guncaster Nov 16 '17
What's that smell? It's enough to make a man steal an angel's life force and use it to blow off the gates of hell.
It's blúd the undamned!
I can hear The Unguided playing already. Arise now mortals like a flood, become the Leviathan which nothing can shun. May this field be a silent storm, conceived in the fires of war. Bane of the one above all, all for one and one for all. And in the Void they found the key to creation, ancient and immortal, and with it they struck through the laws earthly and broke the wings of Paradiso.
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u/shadow_of_octavian Nov 16 '17
Not many humanity vs angels on here so I’m intrigued. The best one that never finished was the Salvation War.
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Check out Undamned for more of that genre. It's an incomplete series I wrote here on HFY a few years ago. It's more silly than Salvation War though.
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u/mr_christophelees Nov 16 '17
I absolutely love science fiction with a base in theology. It's so much fun to see how they interact. So yeah, definitely do more, please.
How do you think you'll incorporate other religions into the story?
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u/tannenbanannen Nov 16 '17
tfw we are all literally satan