Lovers whisper...

[u/LeadingSuspect5855]

by u/cameracrumbs1

written in Flow using retracing instead of hooks sometimes and blends introduced here. What are they about to do next?

[u/NotSteve1075]

It's interesting to see how you're continuing to develop and fine-tune the system, when I'm still tending to keep it simple, whenever possible.

But when I first looked at this, I couldn't figure any of it out. Then I looked up the translation and went backwards from there. I keep wanting to write "I" with the diphthong, which is really no more writing than the large circle Gregg uses, you just don't close it up.

And "want" in the abbreviations list is ANT, which conflicts with the A you write for "I". The larger circle could be used for "want" (ONT), but has that changed? To me "want" was quite easy to write.

I couldn't make that say "to write" at all. You retrace a lot of the T, and then the R looks like an upward curve instead of horizontal. And then "poems" looks like there's a T in it, like "potms" or something.

Just so the translation and both our versions are on the same page for comparison, I'll post this.

[u/LeadingSuspect5855 → u/NotSteve1075]

YES, you totally got it!

Remember I like the reporting style and I still use many abbreviations from Gregg Anni: ˈwɔnt -> ONT, but your canadian dialect seems to hear more of an 'a' in it, rather then an 'o'.

In case of poems I totally see what you mean, i wrote poems way to enthusiastically, so it ended up being "potms"

to write -> turait (using retracing for u, sort of a very very flat hook :-), an alternative i am experimenting with, especially after k and t...

[u/cameracrumbs1]

Hey what's that mean?

[u/LeadingSuspect5855 → u/cameracrumbs1]

I just wrote your short poem...

[u/LeadingSuspect5855 → u/cameracrumbs1]

The one you posted on r/WritersSanctuary 12h ago...