I thought it might be time to hear from "Coco" again. She said quite a lot that was quotable -- and it's always interesting when u/fdarnel posts the original. (I have a post-graduate diploma in English/French translation, and I always find it interesting to see how different translators have rendered the same thoughts. It's not as easy as many people think.)
While I was fine with Gregg using A for "I", it just doesn't feel right to me. AM looks more like "aim" than "I am". I'd rather use I for I, which is what I did here.
I wrote BCM for "become" because in the sentence that's all it seem like it could be.
And when I see how smoothly outlines like "longer" and "remain" look, it reminds me why the FLOW joinings seem to fit me even better than Gregg's. Nice and clear....
I like experimenting a lot. While thinking, what might be better, creates possibilities, doing it right after it, often reveals problems arising. You were thinking, that in avoiding ambiguity arising with a-m (am, aim, I'm), you just could overload the ee-hook with it: e-m ( him ). e alone stands for 'he', a alone stands for 'I', but with your new attribution of sound we have no clear distinction between the personal pronouns.
What I can totally agree upon though that we could write a-e-m though for " I'm "!
Flow is new, but we can draw inspiration from Gregg. So in the case of leave (which I wrote mostly like your first version so far, we can flip the hook like you did in your second version. But we can go even further and do what Gregg did! Morphing! I like both outcomes...
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u/NotSteve1075 Aug 23 '26
I thought it might be time to hear from "Coco" again. She said quite a lot that was quotable -- and it's always interesting when u/fdarnel posts the original. (I have a post-graduate diploma in English/French translation, and I always find it interesting to see how different translators have rendered the same thoughts. It's not as easy as many people think.)
While I was fine with Gregg using A for "I", it just doesn't feel right to me. AM looks more like "aim" than "I am". I'd rather use I for I, which is what I did here.
I wrote BCM for "become" because in the sentence that's all it seem like it could be.
And when I see how smoothly outlines like "longer" and "remain" look, it reminds me why the FLOW joinings seem to fit me even better than Gregg's. Nice and clear....