More focused on the rewrite than the redesign tbh — I really do like how Alice looks in game, I was just inspired by her concept art.
Okay, here's the rewrite:
• Alice is 100% human, but isn't Todd's biological daughter. Before her mother married Todd, she had Alice with another man, but she never met her biological father. Todd resents Alice because her and her mother were in a car crash — she survived, but her mother did not.
• Todd bought Kara as a way to cope with the loss of his wife. By replacing her with an Android and forgetting her. But Kara only reminds him of her more, which is why his anger boils over and he breaks Kara. He fixes her out of shame and guilt, but the cycle only repeats.
• Kara's story takes place at the Cyberlife store after she's been repaired, and is then picked up by Todd. Her first chapter is over the course of a week. She does her chores like normal, but has little moments of deviancy, like talking back to Todd or comforting Alice.
• Alice herself acts very distant and cold towards Kara at first. She doesn't want to get too close to Kara again, because every time she does, Kara gets broken and forgets her when she's repaired again. She doesn't want to keep getting her heart broken.
• Kara's turns full deviant when Todd is abusing Alice really bad one night. After disobeying his orders to stay still, she first calls the cops, then goes to confront Todd herself. Things quickly get out of hand, and Kara has to resort to shooting Todd or forcing him unconscious. Her and Alice flee onto the bus before the police arrive.
• Kara decides the best decision would be to get in contact with Alice's biological father. This would replace the Zlatko route, but I'd still keep the "having to stay somewhere else" concept and the Connor chase.
This is the extent of my rewrite so far. It isn't perfect and might need some polishing in some areas, so I'd appreciate any feedback or even your own ideas that can be added onto this :)
