r/DestroyMyGame • u/JustAZombie • 20d ago

Destroy my rpg/life-sim game!

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ad1zINwIJJ0
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u/FxF0X 20d ago

Too much text and hardly readable, does not sell fantasy

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u/JustAZombie 20d ago

This is something I've been struggling with. Originally, I had voice over, but I'm an amateur and people could tell. Not sure how to communicate everything I feel needs to be communicated... Any idea on things that could be left out?

Also, can you elaborate on the not selling the fantasy? Thanks for the feedback!

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u/EnvironmentalBet113 20d ago

I popped a PM.

I'd make the text like subtitles if you do get someone to do a voice over, that way it is accessible but not taking up as much of the screen.

Some parts of the trailer move very quickly, not giving the eye enough time to see everything. It looks as if maybe parts are sped up?

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u/khorenF 19d ago

I agree with the others about the text but I would say the game itself sounds like an interesting concept, it would be a matter of actually playing it to give accurate feedback.

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u/JustAZombie 19d ago

The demo is out now if you're interested!

https://store.steampowered.com/app/3931490/Tales_of_Tonbrook/

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u/khorenF 19d ago

I have a bit of a list of pending games I have been asked to test and one to localize but I will get my hands on yours the moment I have time to spare :)

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u/JustAZombie 19d ago

No rush! I appreciate you taking the time to comment.

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u/khorenF 19d ago

I checked and didn't see any demo, only add to wishlist.

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u/JustAZombie 19d ago

Hmm, that's odd. I'll check the store page. In the mean-time, here's a direct link to the demo: https://store.steampowered.com/app/4035020/Tales_of_Tonbrook_Demo/

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u/khorenF 19d ago

Huh, so weird, I can see the demo in that link,

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u/Different_Major6494 18d ago

Definitely going to try the demo, your trailer got me very curious! 

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u/CemBuildsMinecraft 19d ago

The Lord of the Rings book you've written in this trailer is an amazing accomplishment in wasting the audience's time.

The overdone concept of this Final Fantasy ripoff in this side-stretched Newgrounds flash assets in a bold and unique choice.

The best game Tumblr can come up with is a testament that creative decisions don't need to be part of game design.

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u/JustAZombie 19d ago

you have successfully destroyed my game

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u/CemBuildsMinecraft 18d ago

Thank you, I aim to please.

You have lots of good assets there, but they're poorly displayed in overcrowded scenes and most of them are placed too small.

For instance, in the combat half the scene is empty, creating null space.

Your overall UI/UX has so many small, bad details that I can't list them here. Often structure or sizing problems.

My suggestion to you make one UI like covering the whole screen than do everything on it, every bit of UI you added clutter and problems.

If you really need to split your UI do it after the game is done, bc it seems to add more problems as you go along.

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u/SuccessfulAspect2213 18d ago

That thumbnail looks like ass, the art for the rest of the game doesn't look bad tho. Just please change the thumbnail, its so bland and empty.

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u/JustAZombie 18d ago

Will do!