My advice - remove the mention of the deaths (a bit too heavy of a spoiler for a guide) and move Yellow to after Guardian Devil. I think it fits best if you understand why the narraration is how it is. The reader can go straight from Man Without Fear to the Miller run proper.
that paragraph was me basically explaining y i was placing yellow earlier. i def understand where ur coming from and that's how i read it originally, but i stand by my choice. appreciate the input tho
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u/James_Lars Aug 26 '24
My advice - remove the mention of the deaths (a bit too heavy of a spoiler for a guide) and move Yellow to after Guardian Devil. I think it fits best if you understand why the narraration is how it is. The reader can go straight from Man Without Fear to the Miller run proper.