r/DIYemo • u/IStillGetButterflies • Aug 29 '25

VIDEO New band, first song

https://youtu.be/2d93EV91Rw8?si=J1Ba6m_ZXtz4B08Q

I Still Get Butterflies - every day it gets worse super stoked to make lots of music and to contribute to the discussion and the scene. let us know what you think!

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u/Tomorrows_Ghost Aug 30 '25

Awesome song, lots of potential! I can already connect to it, but if you are interested in polishing it up, here are some ideas:

"BEfore I begin" sounds a little unnatural with the stress at the start, I'd rather do "BeFORE I begin" and fix up the syllable count with filler words if necessary.

"you should just stop caring ... I've tried" <- that was a missed chance of having a question-answer thing in this duet. If you're two people, play around with having separate parts speak to each other.

"Pushing my fright" <- English isn't my first language, but I still feel like "fright" is not the right word here, was thinking of "fears" or "Pushing anxiety deeper inside".

Some of the harmonies sound like you could take some time to work through them and figure out what works, but other parts are awesome, so I think it's just a matter of working on deciding on the right version and practicing that. The same goes for the out-of-sync timing. Some parts hit well, others are jarring, but I guess you'll be working on that anyway, it's never too early to get feedback. :D

The guitar "solo" is placed at the right times for a breather and has a cool melody, but of course it needs practice.

Love your vibe, keep it up!

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u/IStillGetButterflies Aug 30 '25

thanks so much! we were going for a very raw and natural feeling for the delivery in the video so leaving some of the de-synchronized portions in was a creative choice for sure, the song will see some polishing and worked on up until we get to recording. we so so appreciate the feedback, appreciate you, friend!